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[Beks]

Thanks! ^_^

[Chica_Andromeda]

Thanks!  ^_^

You're welcome. How could I not reply to such an awesome story? :D

[Beks]

Awww! Stop it! Your making me blush! ^_^ I will have the next chapter ready soon, I promise!

[JimmySpaz]

Ooh. Beks, I can't believe I didn't read this until just now! I really missed out! This is another AWESOME fanfic, and I can't WAIT for the next chapter! :D

[Beks]

Thanks! ^_^ I was wondering when you'd pop by! :D

[JimmySpaz]

Haha. You're welcome! :lol:

[Beks]

Ok, finally here is the much antisipated chapter 14! (the stuff in Impact is the monster)


Chapter 14: The Monster Within

The monster threw his head back and laughed, a deep, resounding laugh that sent chills up Jimmy’s spine.

“You thought you could get rid of Jimmy, but Jimmy come back, and come back for good!” his mutated self said, pointing a large, orange finger at Jimmy.

“How did you…how did I…how?” Jimmy stammered. The monster laughed again.

“Ha! You not remember explosion?” ]he said.

“Explosion?” Jimmy murmured. He thought of the N-men suits, and the radiation, and finally his discolored skin. “Pukin’ Pluto, Of course! Why didn’t I see that before? I’ve had plenty of radiation burns before, and they’ve never looked that this.” The creature smiled evilly.

“Now it too late! You in public place with lots of people for Jimmy to crush! So let Jimmy out!” He let out a thunderous roar. Jimmy suddenly remembered the ball. He thought of Cindy, his friends, his mom and dad, and countless other people who were unaware they had a human time bomb in the bathroom, waiting to explode.

“Never!” Jimmy shouted. The monster once again laughed.

“Jimmy knew you’d say that. Now Jimmy will make you let him out!” He roared again, and a sudden, excruciating pain came over Jimmy, causing him to bind over the sink, his eyes squeezed tight. “Let Jimmy out!” He heard the monster shout inside his head. “Jimmy want to smash!”

“Never.” Jimmy repeated through clenched teeth. “I’m going back to my house. I’ve got to get rid of you once and for all!” He tried to shuffle towards the door, but his feet couldn’t move, and he lurched sideways, bringing himself to his knees.

The pain worsened, and Jimmy panted heavily as he said, “Let me go!”

“Not until you let Jimmy out!" His mutated self said in his imagination.

“Never.” Jimmy said again, though considerately weaker. The monster seemed to notice.

“Why don’t you give up? You would not hurt no more.” it said, almost calmly. The pain numbed down a little. Jimmy longed to just let go…but a sudden image of Cindy forced its way into his mind, and he knew he had to fight it.

“I’ll never let the people I care about get hurt because of me!” he shouted. Suddenly, the pain intensified to a level he had never experienced before, seeing white spots at the corner of his eyes. He heard another thunderous roar, and realized it was coming from his own mouth. He felt himself shaking, and cold sweat poured down his pain stricken face. A noise at the door caused him to jerk his head up.

Carl stood in the half-opened door, staring at him with a look of terror on his face.

“Um…” he said nervously. “Cindy sent me t-to s-see if you ok. W-was that y-you I heard s-screaming?”

“Cindy” thought Jimmy. “She’ll know what to do.”

“Carl,” he said in-between gasps of pain. “Go get…Cindy. My N-men power…is back…Need to get him…under control…before it’s too late.”

“W-who?” Carl said, shaking. The pain grew even more, and Jimmy felt a stab of anger. He glared at Carl. Carl stared back, unable to move, until Jimmy finally shouted, “Just go!” in a booming voice that matched the monster’s. Carl watched in horror as veins slowly formed on the side of Jimmy’s head. He shut his eyes as a wave of pain hit him, and when he opened them again, they were green. Comprehension dawned on Carl, but he still couldn’t move.

“Now!” Jimmy screamed, and Carl finally ran screaming from the room.

[Ang]

FINALLY!


--kersplodes--


YESSSSSS!!! FINALLY!

Beks I love it! :kawaii: Great chapter! I love how Cindy keeps projecting into his mind to keep him from changing. That made my day, seriously. This fic is just screaming JC. I can HEARRRRR it!

Write on! :rock:

[JimmySpaz]

Whoa. :blink: Intense.

Very good chapter, Beks, thanks for telling me. Very beautifully written. I can't wait for the next chapter!

[rumorgirl1983]

I liked that. Very suspenseful. You've done a nice job with the monster.

[Chica_Andromeda]

Wow, awesome chapter!!! ^_^ You did a terrific job. I hope you post the next chapter soon! :D Something tells that there's some J/C coming...

[Beks]

thanks everybody! ^_^ I posted it, and then I was like "I have to tell everyone I've put it up" and I mostly did!

[ShadRose17]

:o A NEW CHAPTER! AND AN AWESOME ONE AT THAT! Wheres a jaw drop smile when yan need one? Keep it up! Can't wait to hear more :thumbsup:

[sunnstar]

Seven words:

A-W-E-S-O-M-E!

Wait, that was one word. Okay, I'll say it seven times: AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME!!
(Yes I saw that eppi of FOP lol)

I LUUUURVED that chapter! Especially the descriptions of Jimmy's "inner battle" LOL... stupid Carl! Why must you be so slow?!!

I don't get the whole reason he turned into a monster, tho. :huh:

[Beks]

it's explained better later in the story. :P

[sunnstar]

Oh ok. =D

[girlgenius123]

Very sweet chapter!

[Beks]

Ok, next (finally) chapter!!!


Chapter 15: A Push in the Wrong Direction


Outside on the dance floor, the light ballroom music had been replaced by the funky beats of dance music. The speakers were shaking from the sound, making it hard to hear the person next to you, let alone the boy’s bathroom. Through the dancing masses in the center of the floor Carl weaved in an out of couples and groups. As he finally got to the outside edge of the dancers, he saw Cindy and the rest of the gang waited for him. Carl wheezed as he ran up to them, breathing deeply from his inhaler. His eyes were wide with fright, something noticed by Cindy.

“Carl, what’s wrong? What’s Jimmy doing?” she said. Carl put his inhaler away, and stammered, “Guys…Jimmy…changing…N-men…GREEN EYES!”

“Calm down, Carl. What are you talking about?” Libby said.

“No time to explain. Come on!” Carl said, grabbing Cindy’s arm and pulling her towards the bathroom. Everyone hurriedly followed.

“Hold it, Carl. We can’t bring the girls in there. It’s against the Man Laws laid down by the Ancient Ones.” Sheen said. “We’ll be shunned by all mankind!” But Carl ignored Sheen, pulled open the door and pushed Cindy inside.

“Hurry!” He said, pulling Sheen, Libby, and Elkie in with him. Everyone but Carl gasped in horror.

Jimmy had managed to prop himself up against the sink, leaning heavily on it, facing the door as they came in. He was covered in sweat and panting as if he had just run a mile around the room. His eyes flashed from blue to green and back again at odd intervals, and he looked like he was in great pain, which he was. At the sight of Cindy, his face softened, but when she cautiously tried to come closer, he waved his hand wildly to keep her away.

“No, don’t…come no…I mean any…closer.” He said quietly in his own voice. To reassure her, he mustered a small smile, but as he did, a wave of throbbing pain ran up his body. He gasped, and closed his fluxing eyes, clutching the sink tighter.

“What’s happening to you?” Cindy meant to say, but as Jimmy opened his eyes to stare at her, her question was answered on her lips.

“Green? I haven’t seen those since…” She gasped. Taking action, she yelled, “Everyone, get against the wall!” Her tone of voice made them scramble to obey her order. Cindy licked her lips. “I have no idea how he got his power back, but I’ve got to get him to calm down, but how?” she thought. “I don’t know what got him ang…” She had a sudden thought of Eustace’s sneering face. Her eyes flashed with a plan.

“Libby, go get Eustace. We need him to apologize to Jimmy.” Libby hurried out.

“Sheen, I need you to get everyone out of here. Go pull the fire alarm.”

“But my dad told me not to do that anymore!” Sheen retorted.

“Just do it!” Cindy yelled. Sheen scrambled out the door. Cindy turned back to Jimmy. He was back on his knees, bend over in pain. Cautiously inching towards him, she said quietly, “Um…Jimmy? How did this happen?” He turned his sweat ridden face to her slowly.

“The…explosion.” Was all he said, but Cindy understood. All this time, Elkie had been shaking with fright, utterly confused.

“Carl, what is going on?” she asked fearfully. Carl reached out and took her hand.

“It’s too hard to explain right now, but don’t worry. I’ll protect you.” He said.

They all turned as they heard a struggle at the door. Libby was trying to push Eustace in, while Eustace continued to resist.

“What are you simpletons doing? I’ll not be handled like this! I…” He caught sight of Jimmy. An evil grin spread across his face. “It looks like I’ll have my revenge tonight as it is!” he thought. He walked willingly the rest of the way in the door, and stopped in front of Jimmy. “What’s this James? Are you having a fit? Can I watch?” He laughed evilly at his own joke. Jimmy glared angrily at Eustace, the hatred in his eyes burning green. And that was all it took for the monster to start taking control.

Almost instantly, the pain in his body intensified as pulsing veins appeared on his forehead. He clutched his stomach painfully and fell over onto his side. He squeezed his eyes shut, but if they were open, they would have been growing a brighter green with each second. Jimmy continued his inward fight with his mutated self.

“Aha! You angry with somebody! Now Jimmy smash him for you!”

“No! I know you won’t stop at Eustace. I’m not letting anyone get hurt, not even Eustace, even though he deserves it.”

“You want Snooty Boy smashed, you do. Why you hate him so much?”

“Well, he…wait! It’s none of your business!"

“Oh, but it is Jimmy’s busyness. Your busyness is Jimmy’s busyness. Let Jimmy see…” Jimmy mind suddenly filled with images of Eustace’s sneering face. As picture after picture floated in his brain, Jimmy became angrier and angrier at him.

As Jimmy’s inner battle raged on, Cindy battled with Eustace.

“Eustace, you idiot! I didn’t bring you here to insult Jimmy! You’re here to save your own skin, plus ours!” she yelled at him.

“What would I need to save myself from? He’s just having some sort of fit is all.” He retorted.

“No he’s not. Didn’t you watch the news for when we almost destroyed the town with superpowers?” she said.

“Why yes, I did! I laughed very much when this insolent boob here,” He pointed at Carl. “blew the cameraman away with one of his rude belches!”

“Well if you remember what Jimmy turned into, you’ll know why we’re in danger!” she said.

“Oh, I remember that! The idiot kept talking in third person! Is that what he’s doing then? Turning into that? Oh, no! A grammatically incorrect monster! What ever will we do!” he said sarcastically. He laughed again. Cindy glared at Eustace with as much intensity as she could.

“Listen buster,” she said, grabbing the front of his blazer. “If you don’t apologize to Jimmy right now, so help me I’ll…” But at that moment, Jimmy spoke, but not with Jimmy’s voice.

“No, Blond girl. Let Jimmy smash Snooty Boy for you!” Jimmy slowly got up from the floor, glaring green eyed at Eustace. His body contorted with concentrated rage. And slowly, he changed.

Veins appeared all over his body, pulsated with increasing energy. He grew larger-than-life muscles, causing his shirt to rip and tear and finally fall to the floor in tatters. His watch popped off his wrist and landed at Cindy’s feet. As he grew, his shoes ripped with the sound off stressed leather. Soon, his shoes too were torn beyond repair, showing large orange feet. He finally reached the ceiling, and then, as soon as it started, it stopped. The creature before them was no longer Jimmy, no longer a friend. It let out an earth-shaking roar and glared at Eustace with a much more intimidating stare.

“Um…did I say idiot? I-I meant i-in-increadible! So, how ‘bout we forget this whole ‘smashing’ business, and you can turn back. Please?” he whimpered. But the monster formally known as Jimmy just smiled even more evilly than Eustace, and moved closer. Eustace screamed like a little girl, and ran from the room. The creature continued to move towards the door, but Cindy waved her arms, diverting its attention.

“Jimmy! Jimmy! Don’t do this! Fight it! You need to fight this!” she said to it. “I’m not letting you past this door.”

“Blond Girl knows Jimmy can’t fight himself. But Jimmy won’t hurt Blond Girl neither.” And with that, it turned and smashed his way through the wall. Cindy covered her eyes from the dust, and when it cleared, she saw the parking lot, with cars smashed out of the way, and the star stringed sky above the buildings in the near distance. Cindy picked up Jimmy watch in front of her, and put it on her own wrist.

“Well, so much for my great plan.” She said to herself.



A little J/C, a little C/E, and a dash of Sheen! Voila!

[marioarp]

pretty good

[sunnstar]

AWESOME CHAPTER! Definitely the best one yet. I can't wait for more!! **waits excitedly**