108 replies to this topic

[ssj4majuub]

Great as usual, Peedro!
Cant really think of any criticism to give, lol.

[J/C AVA]

That's alright.

Thanks for replying anyways.

[Macey]

Wonderful Chapter! Nice to hear some talk between the girls. Cindy's mom, lol. Was really nice to see Cindy remember her speech from N Men- in red text, too! In Umineko, anything in red means it's definitely true. So yeah.

Nice job!

[J/C AVA]

Wow. Good point, Macey.

Thanks for reading.

[J/C AVA]

Even better news! Part 5 is now posted.

HERE

I'M ON A ROLL!!!!

[CjIiNmDmYy]

This is AWESOME!!!

[CjIiNmDmYy]

P.S- Your fanfic is so cool! Love it!

[Macey]

Read Chapter 5.

It was interesting, but...lacking. Nothing really happened. Maybe you could merge it with the next chapter?

[CjIiNmDmYy]

I just read chapter 5. It was cool, but as DarkTeamRush1 said, t'was kinda lacking. Sorry! Anyway, I'm looking foward to Chapter 6. Post it soon, Okay?

[J/C AVA]

Read Chapter 5.

It was interesting, but...lacking. Nothing really happened. Maybe you could merge it with the next chapter?

I just read chapter 5. It was cool, but as DarkTeamRush1 said, t'was kinda lacking. Sorry! Anyway, I'm looking foward to Chapter 6. Post it soon, Okay?

Hmmmm. Y'know what? You're right. I was just reading it and it does seemed "rushed". Which sadly it was I think, cause my mom wanted to hog the computer only moments before I tried working on it. Ah, parents.

I think it's likely I'll merge it with the next chapter, so Part 5 might be extended.

Thanks for that though guys.

[J/C AVA]

DID IT!!! And I think it's WAY better than before!

YAY!!!

[CjIiNmDmYy]

This new chapter is way, WAY better. I think it's awesome! Can't wait for chapter 6!!!

[Macey]

Pedro, I officially love you.

First of all, the comet is now my favorite character. *shot* She's such a woobie. C'mere, I'll give ya cookies and a warm bed, dearie...

Also, Goddard is really man's best friend, haha.

[J/C AVA]

HAHAHAHAHA!!

Awwww. You think a rock from space is cute. That's so cute.

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

DID IT!!! And I think it's WAY better than before!

YAY!!!

LUV it, Pedro! Even better than last time!!

[RocksmySocks]

Wow, Pedro!

Your story is even more fantastic than before!

I've finally just caught up to where you are now, and I really am loving it. The characters are just like how I always imagine them, and the plot is really starting to develop! I'm really curious as to what is up with that strange comet! Macey's right, it is adorable, haha.

I wonder what will happen to Jimmy's new invention now, and I also wonder if Cindy and Jimmy will eventually get past all this stubbornness! I was proud of Cindy for trying to be nice for a change - Jimmy certainly didn't make it easy for her!

I think your writing style is really coming along as well. I can see a lot of improvement, so keep up the good work!

[J/C AVA]

Awww, thanks alot, Katie.

LOL! Don't even get me started on the plot. It's still has some bugs to work out and all but I tell you, it's BIG on an emotional level, not to mention musically. So there WILL be tears sheaded reading this, I think.

You all have been warned.

As for Jimmy and Cindy's stubborness, it's gonna be a HUGE challenge for me. They ARE subborn, but it's only cause they're afriad of showing themselves their true love and all to each other. Expect alot of high tensioned arguing and fighting in this story. But don't fret. The BIG moment of change will come upon them in this story.... somehow.

Thanks alot for replying, Katie. This encourages me more to move forward with this story.

[CjIiNmDmYy]

The BIG moment of change will come upon them in this story.... somehow.

Sounds REALLY exciting.

BTW when are you gonna post the next chapter? I really want to know the story behind the comet.

[J/C AVA]

BTW when are you gonna post the next chapter? I really want to know the story behind the comet.

Hahha. I don't plan on explaining the whole backround of the comet until way into Phase 2.

Hopefully soon.

[CjIiNmDmYy]

Oh ok, I'll wait!