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[Band_Geek923]

Hey thanks Pedro.

I didn't even know you were reading this.

I can't wait for Part 7 of your story.

Chapter 6 up soon!

[J/C AVA]

Actually I just read the last chapter. :lol:

I gotta get to reading the rest. Sorry if I made you mad.

I'll read the rest soon. ^_^

[Band_Geek923]

Here's Chapter 6 Emily and Pedro!

Chapter 6:

We got to Torie's house.

"Wow, cool house, Torie," Cindy said.

"Thanks, Cindy," Torie said.

We went inside her house, and there were her parents and her twin brother, Morris.

"Woa, check these guys out," he said.

Morris had shoulder length brown hair which was tied into a ponytail, with a black T-shirt, and black jeans with holes in the knees, he was wearing cowboy boots and he had studded wrist bands on each wrist.

"Morris, these are friends of the new neighbor, Sheen," Torie told him.

"Oh, well introduce us to your friends, Sheen," he said.

I told him and the parents their names.

"It's good that you met some new friends already, Torie," said Mrs. Hutchinson.

"I know, can I show them around the house?" Torie asked.

"Sure," said Mr. Hutchinson.

"Let me come too," said Morris.

So Vicki and her brother showed us around the house, I just kept thinking about Libby. Why was I so afraid to tell her that I liked Vicki? I mean I only met her today, but I fell madly in love with her.

She's so pretty, and has an Ultralord collection and has even seen all the episodes and the movie. She was my everything. I wanted her to become my girlfriend, she had to be, she has more in common with me than Libby.

But I can't tear myself away from her....

"Sheen!" Torie said, snapping me out of my thoughts.

"What?'' I asked.

"We're going upstairs now so we can show you our rooms," she said.

"Oh, okay," I said.

First, we went into Morris' room. He had an electric guitar on his bed, a drum kit, posters all over his wall, and his walls were painted black, and he had black and red bedsheets.

"Wow, what a nice room," said Cindy.

"Yeah," said Libby.

"Why thanks girls," said Morris.

"Hey, Morris are you in a band?" Carl asked.

"Nah, I just write and play my own songs for fun," he said.

"Oh, well that's interesting," said Jimmy.

"Thanks, you know you guys aren't that bad, and you girls are kinda cute," Morris said.

Cindy and Libby blushed.

I walked over to Morris' guitar.

"Can I try holding it for just a minute?" I asked him.

"Sure Sheen," said Morris.

I held it in my hands. It was smooth and nice and shiny and black.

"Excellent," I said.

"Thanks," he said.

"Okay, guys now it's time to see my room," said Torie.

We made the way across the hall to Torie's room. I knew that when they saw her room, they'd instantly think she's weird like me for liking Ultralord. I had to stop her from taking them in.

"Umm, Torie, let's show Morris my house or go to Jimmy's house or something," I said.

"No, Sheen. We'll go after I show you guys my room," she said.

"But...but..," I stammered.

"But what, Sheen?" she asked.

"Oh, never mind, lets' just go inside," I said.

So Torie opened the door and we stepped inside, and there in her room, everywhere, was Ultralord stuff.


There you go, Chapter 7 coming soon!

[Band_Geek923]

Can someone please reply to this?

I need replies!

Sheen: Yeah reply to my story you stupid people!

[Band_Geek923]

How come no one is replying to my story?

I feel lonely here guys. =[

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

I can't wait for chapter 7! GREAT JOB!!!!! :thumbsup:

[Band_Geek923]

Wow that was a fast reply!

I'm glad you liked it.

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

lol thx! I'm lookin' forward to it! ;)

[Band_Geek923]

You'll probably get chapter 7 tonight, if I can post it.

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

Sounds great! ^_^

[Band_Geek923]

It's time for chapter 7!

We all looked at Torie's room.

"This is your room?" Jimmy asked.

"Yes, is there a problem?" Torie asked.

"It's filled with Ultralord stuff," said Libby.

"Yeah, because I like Ultralord just like Sheen does. It shows we have a lot in common," said Torie.

"But just because she likes Ultralord, I don't want you guys saying she's an UltraFreak like you call me, Cindy," I said.

"Cindy calls you an UltraFreak? That's not nice," said Torie.

"'Cause Cindy's not a nice person," I said.

"Look, Torie. It's okay if you like Ultralord, I just wasn't expecting you to like him, you don't seem the type to like him," said Cindy.

"Well I do, and get used to it because you'll be seeing me alot more once I start at your school," said Torie, "but anyway, I want you guys to show me around town."

"Okay, come on let's go to Jimmy's house we can go in his hovercar," I said.

"Sounds good," said Torie.

We turned to her brother, Morris, and asked if he wanted to come too. He said yes.

So we went over to Jimmy's house ready to show Torie around Retroville.

I still wasn't sure if I should tell Libby that I have a crush on Torie.

I know I'll have to tell her eventually though, I just had to chose the right time to do it.

[fierysue]

I finally got enough time to read this! WOO!

It's a good simple enough, straightforward Sheen narration! I really like it (though I do miss crazy!Sheen). At any rate, I notice you alternate between Vicki and Torie for Victoria. Maybe it's better to stick to one so that others don't get confused? ;) Just a thought.

Thanks for PMing me about the story update, Millie! :D

[Band_Geek923]

Hey thanks for replying Sue.

Chapter 8 will be up soon.

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

It's awesome! Can't wait for more! :thumbsup:

[Band_Geek923]

Thanks Emily. =]

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

no prob! ;)

[Band_Geek923]

Chapter 8 of this story is done. It'll be up tomorrow!

In fact 9 is done also.

I might give two chapters tomorrow night, so stay tuned.

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

ok, good to know! ;)

[Band_Geek923]

Parts 8 and 9 will be up tomorrow!

So stay tuned.

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

*uses a surfer-dude voice, like Crush from Finding Nemo* Most EXCELLENT!!!!