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[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

It was great, Mara! I can't wait 'till you update! :bff: :thumbsup:

[Kaytron]

Still reading.
Also, I've noticed that if a scene has April in it, it's about 80% less likely to be interesting.

You don't like APRIL??


*grabs a cannon and aims it at you*

j/k :P

^Kaytron^ :ph43r:

@Sue: Man, I think I'm suffering from TOSOT Withdrawal level 9/10

[John Richards]

You made Jimmy an atheist? You bastard! Make Jimmy not be an atheist or don't mention it!

[J/C AVA]

Uhh.. not that I'm mad but don't you think you're being a bit harsh? Just asking. :unsure:

[Flank]

At last I got time and mood to read the new installment.

Thanks for feeding us another portion of our favorite TOSOT!

This was a good portion of action with our fave TOSOT characters.
What I really love in your writings, it's deep plot, feelings and realism. Action scenes mixed with love scenes in a meaningful plot.
I love how it all sounds military and professional, you did a good work there. I appreciate and the little details, like Fabian tactics, and their spirit to accomplish their plans.
It was great to see how you managed to go through minefield and drones part. It is written and as an exciting twisted adventure, and as a drama, and as a making sense in all ways picture.
Your works are real sci-fi for me, I see you are working to make it realistic and you have imagination to make it breathtaking reading.
Smart move on using Goddard as a distraction decoy.
AURORA'S piloting skills and wits are WIN. April's shooting too. Nav can win using only with his bathroom jokes.
THANK YOU for soundless space explosions, I was tired of Space Wars junk.

That scene with AURORA and Half Life was intense.
Overall tension and the vortex of events and deadly dangers kept me on the edge of my chair, looking for what will happen next until the end of the installment.

One technical criticism. At the last moment, a laser beam from Half Life penetrates AURORA'S ship. It is physically impossible to send a concentrated beam of radiation hundreds kilometers away, it disperses. Besides, after depressurization at high altitudes people lose consciousnes after a few seconds.
If a beam from main cannons of Half Life went near the ship, it could cause dangerous flight destabilization and/or damage to electronics inside with radiation of certain length.

Otherwise, I really, REALLY appreciate how cool, tough and professional AURORA is there. Can I hug AURORA now? I enjoyed April's bravery and Nav's humor. It was so touching when he so worried if AURORA was OK after her ship was hit.

That scene when they moved to the other ship was interesting. LOL, how adorable, Nav got to cuddle little AURORA! *Remembers Future Libby* He sure had fun on that mission.

I suppose that shirtless Future Carl will enter the battlefield the last moment, riding his cyborgian beasts and save the world single-handedly slaying the Dictator. OK, I wrote this thing just for Beks.

One more thing, I'll sure learn A LOT of new English words reading your fanfictions. Your dictionary is extremely rich.

P.S. Sorry for revealing the ending of TOSOT in the "never" topic.

[J/C AVA]

Your dictionary is extremely rich.

Which is why I go on emo rants at times. I'd have to spend the next 50 years to get to her level. :'(

[Flank]

I'd rather spend the next 50 years around Mara reading her writings! :lol:


But, relax Pedro, it comes with lots of reading, and practice, and thinking. You can improve later.

[J/C AVA]

But, relax Pedro, it comes with lots of reading, and practice, and thinking. You can improve later.

-sigh- That's what I'm afriad of. I just don't have the patience or the will to make such an effort. :'(

[Flank]

I think, you can determine a lot there. Nobody got it in one day. But, those who wanted, got it eventually.

[okmeamithinknow]

I'm basically dying here! I can't wait for the next installment....

Mara you totally rock, and I wish that I was as good a writer, nay GREAT a writer as you are!

*bows at Mara's feet*

Please please post soon!

[Macey]

Flank and I have plans. BIG plans.

DarkTeamRush1 (11:19:34 AM): Lettus see
DarkTeamRush1 (11:19:46 AM): You want Aurora,,,
DarkTeamRush1 (11:19:49 AM): *...
Flank35 (11:19:50 AM): yesh
DarkTeamRush1 (11:19:55 AM): I want Lee
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:05 AM): Mara, Pig, and Kax want Nav
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:09 AM): Resulting in lulz
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:12 AM): *Kaz
Flank35 (11:20:19 AM): Kaz will stay away, i think
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:23 AM): lol
Flank35 (11:20:32 AM): Pig and Mara will have to share, i suppose
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:35 AM): ROFL
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:38 AM): Erm
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:41 AM): Jessi dirves
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:43 AM): *drives
Flank35 (11:20:43 AM): what will be epic lolz
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:46 AM): Sac is our lawyer
Flank35 (11:20:51 AM): yes
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:58 AM): Pedro wants FL
Flank35 (11:21:08 AM): don't forget Beks
DarkTeamRush1 (11:21:17 AM): With FC!
DarkTeamRush1 (11:21:20 AM): Yeah!
Flank35 (11:21:24 AM): yesh!
DarkTeamRush1 (11:21:39 AM): This shall be epic!
Flank35 (11:21:41 AM): Krista will GET DJ
DarkTeamRush1 (11:21:46 AM): yeah
DarkTeamRush1 (11:21:55 AM): We should make it a bi-monthly event
DarkTeamRush1 (11:22:05 AM): All the IDOJers possible will get on AIM
Flank35 (11:22:14 AM): haha!
DarkTeamRush1 (11:22:15 AM): Depending on their scedules
Flank35 (11:22:19 AM): that'd be epic
DarkTeamRush1 (11:22:24 AM): And hunt the TOSOT cast
DarkTeamRush1 (11:22:32 AM): It would be liek the Epic 10-person chat
DarkTeamRush1 (11:22:38 AM): But with a plot
DarkTeamRush1 (11:22:39 AM): lol
Flank35 (11:24:52 AM): *AURORA peeks out a cave on an asteroid in the other galaxy*
DJ: nobody?
AURORA: nobody.
LEE: good
AURORA: was that pink?!!?!
April: relax and be quiet, it's my purple part of armor.
DarkTeamRush1 (11:25:04 AM): LOL
DarkTeamRush1 (11:26:55 AM): Dude
Flank35 (11:27:01 AM): what?
DarkTeamRush1 (11:27:02 AM): I must post tghis on the TOSOT thread
DarkTeamRush1 (11:27:05 AM): *this
Flank35 (11:27:07 AM): go on\

LOL yas.

[Kaz]

"Kax" does not back off. ^_^

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

Flank and I have plans. BIG plans.

DarkTeamRush1 (11:19:34 AM): Lettus see
DarkTeamRush1 (11:19:46 AM): You want Aurora,,,
DarkTeamRush1 (11:19:49 AM): *...
Flank35 (11:19:50 AM): yesh
DarkTeamRush1 (11:19:55 AM): I want Lee
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:05 AM): Mara, Pig, and Kax want Nav
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:09 AM): Resulting in lulz
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:12 AM): *Kaz
Flank35 (11:20:19 AM): Kaz will stay away, i think
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:23 AM): lol
Flank35 (11:20:32 AM): Pig and Mara will have to share, i suppose
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:35 AM): ROFL
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:38 AM): Erm
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:41 AM): Jessi dirves
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:43 AM): *drives
Flank35 (11:20:43 AM): what will be epic lolz
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:46 AM): Sac is our lawyer
Flank35 (11:20:51 AM): yes
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:58 AM): Pedro wants FL
Flank35 (11:21:08 AM): don't forget Beks
DarkTeamRush1 (11:21:17 AM): With FC!
DarkTeamRush1 (11:21:20 AM): Yeah!
Flank35 (11:21:24 AM): yesh!
DarkTeamRush1 (11:21:39 AM): This shall be epic!
Flank35 (11:21:41 AM): Krista will GET DJ
DarkTeamRush1 (11:21:46 AM): yeah
DarkTeamRush1 (11:21:55 AM): We should make it a bi-monthly event
DarkTeamRush1 (11:22:05 AM): All the IDOJers possible will get on AIM
Flank35 (11:22:14 AM): haha!
DarkTeamRush1 (11:22:15 AM): Depending on their scedules
Flank35 (11:22:19 AM): that'd be epic
DarkTeamRush1 (11:22:24 AM): And hunt the TOSOT cast
DarkTeamRush1 (11:22:32 AM): It would be liek the Epic 10-person chat
DarkTeamRush1 (11:22:38 AM): But with a plot
DarkTeamRush1 (11:22:39 AM): lol
Flank35 (11:24:52 AM): *AURORA peeks out a cave on an asteroid in the other galaxy*
DJ: nobody?
AURORA: nobody.
LEE: good
AURORA: was that pink?!!?!
April: relax and be quiet, it's my purple part of armor.
DarkTeamRush1 (11:25:04 AM): LOL
DarkTeamRush1 (11:26:55 AM): Dude
Flank35 (11:27:01 AM): what?
DarkTeamRush1 (11:27:02 AM): I must post tghis on the TOSOT thread
DarkTeamRush1 (11:27:05 AM): *this
Flank35 (11:27:07 AM): go on\

LOL yas.

That's epic! SO epic!!!! Any chance of squeezing me in???? :dance:

[curiochibi]

Flank and I have plans. BIG plans.

DarkTeamRush1 (11:19:34 AM): Lettus see
DarkTeamRush1 (11:19:46 AM): You want Aurora,,,
DarkTeamRush1 (11:19:49 AM): *...
Flank35 (11:19:50 AM): yesh
DarkTeamRush1 (11:19:55 AM): I want Lee
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:05 AM): Mara, Pig, and Kax want Nav
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:09 AM): Resulting in lulz
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:12 AM): *Kaz
Flank35 (11:20:19 AM): Kaz will stay away, i think
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:23 AM): lol
Flank35 (11:20:32 AM): Pig and Mara will have to share, i suppose
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:35 AM): ROFL
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:38 AM): Erm
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:41 AM): Jessi dirves
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:43 AM): *drives
Flank35 (11:20:43 AM): what will be epic lolz
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:46 AM): Sac is our lawyer
Flank35 (11:20:51 AM): yes
DarkTeamRush1 (11:20:58 AM): Pedro wants FL
Flank35 (11:21:08 AM): don't forget Beks
DarkTeamRush1 (11:21:17 AM): With FC!
DarkTeamRush1 (11:21:20 AM): Yeah!
Flank35 (11:21:24 AM): yesh!
DarkTeamRush1 (11:21:39 AM): This shall be epic!
Flank35 (11:21:41 AM): Krista will GET DJ
DarkTeamRush1 (11:21:46 AM): yeah
DarkTeamRush1 (11:21:55 AM): We should make it a bi-monthly event
DarkTeamRush1 (11:22:05 AM): All the IDOJers possible will get on AIM
Flank35 (11:22:14 AM): haha!
DarkTeamRush1 (11:22:15 AM): Depending on their scedules
Flank35 (11:22:19 AM): that'd be epic
DarkTeamRush1 (11:22:24 AM): And hunt the TOSOT cast
DarkTeamRush1 (11:22:32 AM): It would be liek the Epic 10-person chat
DarkTeamRush1 (11:22:38 AM): But with a plot
DarkTeamRush1 (11:22:39 AM): lol
Flank35 (11:24:52 AM): *AURORA peeks out a cave on an asteroid in the other galaxy*
DJ: nobody?
AURORA: nobody.
LEE: good
AURORA: was that pink?!!?!
April: relax and be quiet, it's my purple part of armor.
DarkTeamRush1 (11:25:04 AM): LOL
DarkTeamRush1 (11:26:55 AM): Dude
Flank35 (11:27:01 AM): what?
DarkTeamRush1 (11:27:02 AM): I must post tghis on the TOSOT thread
DarkTeamRush1 (11:27:05 AM): *this
Flank35 (11:27:07 AM): go on\

LOL yas.

YES! I get to drive like a bat outta-

*cough* I mean, transport you to your destination in the most luxurious way possible. :D

[Mara=^.^=]

Still reading.
Also, I've noticed that if a scene has April in it, it's about 80% less likely to be interesting.

Ya, April's manner of speaking can be a bit long-winded at times. I can understand if you find it boring. It's probably my fault at some level because, in all honestly, I don't spend that much time on April's character. I have too many chars to develop. April's just kind of that stable person who's just...there.

You made Jimmy an atheist?  You bastard!  Make Jimmy not be an atheist or don't mention it!

Looool I'm a bastard. I'll take that as a compliment. :thumbsup: Also, I'll thank ye kindly to NOT tell me what to do. And I'd also like it if you didn't PM me telling me what to do either. I'll make my characters skip rope while wearing tutus under a rainbow sky, if I darn well feel like it.

~*Mara*~ = ^.^ =

[Mara=^.^=]

@Flank - Thanks so much for the awesome review! Ya, I know the plasma cannon on the Half Life was a bit much, but I figured I could sacrifice accuracy for effect. It's the "Rule of Cool"!

~*Mara*~ = ^.^ =

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

It was great nevertheless, Mara! I'm looking forward to the next update! No pressure, of course! ^_^

[Mara=^.^=]

Sending the next installment to Macey for beta-reading!

~*Mara*~ = ^.^ =

[cancel_me]

Rawr. I can't wait to (re)read the next installment.

JKJKJK guys don't kill me. >.<

[okmeamithinknow]

Sending the next installment to Macey for beta-reading!

~*Mara*~ = ^.^ =

ZOMG! *Dies*!!!!