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#61 Ang

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Posted 21 September 2012 - 02:07 PM

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I simply adored how you are revealing Tex's character so far. This chapter by far has got to be one of the most revealing— her narrow-minded loneliness, excitement, borderline adrenaline rush over the secrets of Sheriff..

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I must say in several ways she reminds me a bit of Aurora(the female badassery is probably making me think this); however, Tex has her own story here. Whereas one of Aurora's biggest enemies was herself, Tex soaks in what she is and works with it in her own style. (random thought: what's with you and wanting Cindy to kill Jimmy in some AU? your idea of romance is kinda adorable in such a weird way :lol: but we all can't have it interesting.)
Any way: Tex is adorable. I'm not one to fear the badasses, but I find most of her qualities a bit cute. c: She has this child-like demeanor in her when it comes to thoughts and suspicions on Sheriff.
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I am so gonna be a Sheriff/Tex shipper after this. XP
Oh and thanks for the suspense on when he comes in.
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Fantastic writing style so far! Not overly descriptive, but more than enough to keep me enticed. Great!
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Posted 21 September 2012 - 03:32 PM

Wasn't Goddard out in the desert with Jimmy? I know they could have come back by now but the only place he could be is in the trapdoor which is looked from the outside.

 

Sorry if the description was confusing...what I meant by it was that Tex was listening for Goddard as a way of determining whether the Sheriff was at home. When Goddard didn't bark, she surmised he was out in the desert with his master, like Carl had said.

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#63 JimmyxxCindy4EVER

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Posted 21 September 2012 - 03:44 PM

I loved everything about this!! The part I loved most was the Encyclopedia of Infinite Knowledge reference from the series!! :kawaii: Just one question, though. Why did the memory of her childhood caused by the balsam soap scent strike fear in Cindy's mind?
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Posted 21 September 2012 - 04:12 PM

I simply adored how you are revealing Tex's character so far. This chapter by far has got to be one of the most revealing— her narrow-minded loneliness, excitement, borderline adrenaline rush over the secrets of Sheriff..

LOL yeah, Tex obviously doesn't have any sort of real relationships in her life; the closest she gets to making friends is observing her surroundings and manipulating people based on the traits they exhibit. She usually avoids learning anything meaningful about her targets (otherwise it would hurt too much to kill them), so when she stumbles upon one who deviates so much from the norm that she can't HELP but learn meaningful things about him, she immediately wants to learn more. That's what happens when you're deprived of human interaction for long enough rolleyes.gif
 

I must say in several ways she reminds me a bit of Aurora(the female badassery is probably making me think this); however, Tex has her own story here. Whereas one of Aurora's biggest enemies was herself, Tex soaks in what she is and works with it in her own style.

Yeah, Aurora was extremely single-minded and goal-oriented...Tex is more of a drifter, and she'd probably have a hard time determining her motivations (other than "I'm in it for the money"). Furthermore, Aurora had a personal stake in freaking everything, whereas Tex has a personal stake in nothing (well, not yet anyway). They're both dangerous ladies, but Aurora was very physical and confrontational, where Tex relies a bit more on subterfuge and planning to accomplish tasks. They both definitely have street cred with the scum of the world, though XD_by_E_motive.gif
 

(random thought: what's with you and wanting Cindy to kill Jimmy in some AU? your idea of romance is kinda adorable in such a weird way laugh.gif but we all can't have it interesting.)

You know, I asked myself this very same question when I was formulating the idea for this fic...rolleyes.gif At first I was like, "so apparently my idea of romance involves a looming threat of death. THE HELL IS WRONG WITH ME??" But then I was all, "Pffft, screw this, intent-to-commit-murder makes for great fiction!"
What it comes down to, really, is that I'm fascinated by who holds the power in any given relationship (romantic or platonic). When I was on the improv team in high school, one of my favorite warm-up games was called "high status-low status". Basically, you and your partner would be given a scenario and characters, and one of you would start out as high status, and the other as low (think aristocrat-peasant, boss-worker, cop-captured criminal, etc.). Then, at random points throughout the scene, the coach would yell out "switch!" and you'd have to change who had high status and who had low, while still maintaining your characters. I've always thought this would be an insanely useful exercise for writers, and I try to craft each scene I write based on who has high and who has low status in the interaction. It's a great way to build character and maintain tension Two_thumbs_up.gif
What's great about Tex is that she's figured out a way to kind of "cheat" the system - she's able to maintain a de facto high status role simply by not engaging with other people at their level. She keeps an "I know something you don't know" attitude, so when she comes across a character with a secret that SHE can't learn (in this case, Jimmy), it automatically undermines her high status position, and she can't abide that XD_by_E_motive.gif

 

Any way: Tex is adorable. I'm not one to fear the badasses, but I find most of her qualities a bit cute. c: She has this child-like demeanor in her when it comes to thoughts and suspicions on Sheriff.

I'm glad you're picking up on these things. Otherwise I'd feel like I was just writing for the amusement of the Oxygen and Nitrogen particles swarming around me. rolleyes.gif
 

I am so gonna be a Sheriff/Tex shipper after this. XP

Mission accomplished! ROCK_ON_Emoticon_by_BlackLithium.gif See, I've watched a ton (and I mean a TON) of Westerns, and if they involve romance, it's usually some weather-worn, rough-n-tumble cowboy who's softened and humanized by a kind-hearted lady. I was like, screw that noise, let's make the lady the hardened badass! And then this happened.
 

Oh and thanks for the suspense on when he comes in.

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Posted 21 September 2012 - 04:18 PM

Just one question, though. Why did the memory of her childhood caused by the balsam soap scent strike fear in Cindy's mind?

 

It didn't strike fear in her mind. Read the paragraph again:

There was sawdust and parchment, woodsmoke and peppermint – but above all, the familiar, comforting fragrance of balsam soap. It was the smell of civilization, and in a flash Tex was back in her childhood, sitting in the front parlor of her family's home. It was all there, in vivid detail: the crisp pages of the book in her lap, the folds of her peach-colored dress, Daddy's too-large slippers on her feet. It was as if the past and present were tethered to each other by a scented string, and she need only look down its length to see herself standing on the other side.

All of those recollections are pleasant.

If you're referring to the line where she "threw off the memory with a shiver and stomped into the front room"...that's not fear. Shivers can signify other strong emotions, like regret, wistfulness, a longing for a better time, etc.

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Posted 21 September 2012 - 04:20 PM

Oh, okay. Well, that clears that up! Thanks! ^_^ I wait eagerly in anticipation of Part 5!! :kawaii:
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Posted 21 September 2012 - 05:25 PM

WHY YOU MAKE US WAIT?
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Posted 21 September 2012 - 06:36 PM

I know this probably will NOT happen in this fic, but hypothetically speaking, say Jimmy DID get the best of Cindy and kill her in the end... If her spirit came back to haunt him, I imagine it could look like this:

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Posted 21 September 2012 - 10:45 PM

WHY YOU MAKE US WAIT?

 

Because I enjoy your pain Wink_emoticon.gif

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Posted 22 September 2012 - 01:01 AM

So, Mara, what did ya think of my hypothetical idea??
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Posted 22 September 2012 - 01:11 AM

So, Mara, what did ya think of my hypothetical idea??

I don't see why he would kill her...I mean, she's the one trying to kill him, not vice versa...
Also why would I end a romance fic with a homicide? :huh: Come on, dude, this is fanservice :rolleyes:
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Also also how come she has gray hair and a dress? She's blonde and wears pants. Do all dead ladies just revert to a skirt-clad gray-haired form? Is that like, the "it" look for deceased chicks?



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Posted 22 September 2012 - 01:19 AM

Did you miss the word "hypothetical" in my post, Mara?? :lol: And she's supposed to be a ghost there. :lol: A purely hypothetical situation there, girl... :lol: Okay, I'm using that smiley too much. XD
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Posted 22 September 2012 - 01:25 AM

she nearly bashed her head against a hairbrush-and-crank contraption hanging from the ceiling.

OMG It's Jimmy's crazy hair-gizmo in his bathroom! LOL figures he would have a primitive version even in this universe...how else would he achieve his stickity-up hairdo? ;)

The bedspread was the same blue as the curtains, which was the same blue as the throw-rug on the floor, which was the same blue as the chair in the corner.

I'm pretty sure this is actually true of regular Jimmy's bedroom too...well, maybe not all the same shade of blue, but all blue none the less.

she staggered sideways and nearly tripped over a heap of unwashed pants.

At least these pants won't come alive and go rampaging through the streets

Tex laid back as she pondered, and the scent of balsam soap wafted up from the comforter. She closed her eyes. I'll bet he smells like this too...

LOL as someone who loves to sniff the air in the laundry detergent aisle, I totally get Tex's reaction to the pine smell. I looooove it when people smell like soap >.<

She would offer him the Get-Out Clause...then she'd see what kind of man he was.

Excited to see what the 'get out clause' is!



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Posted 22 September 2012 - 01:29 AM

OMG It's Jimmy's crazy hair-gizmo in his bathroom! LOL figures he would have a primitive version even in this universe...how else would he achieve his stickity-up hairdo? ;)

Score! I'm so glad someone noticed this >.< I wasn't sure if I'd made it obvious enough.

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Posted 22 September 2012 - 01:46 AM

Excited to see what the 'get out clause' is!

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I have a few ideas, but I'm nearly positive I'm correct. ;)
If I AM right then this fic just got a hell of a lot more interesting~
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Posted 22 September 2012 - 01:50 AM

I have a few ideas, but I'm nearly positive I'm correct. Wink_emoticon.gif
If I AM right then this fic just got a hell of a lot more interesting~

 

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Posted 22 September 2012 - 02:31 AM

Did you catch what I said, Mara??
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Posted 22 September 2012 - 02:32 AM

Did you catch what I said, Mara??

 

I knew it was hypothetical, but that doesn't make it any more plausible blink.gif

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Posted 22 September 2012 - 02:37 AM

I know. I was just making stuff up for the heck of it. :lol:

Edit: When I first read about that hairbrush contraption, I swear it did NOT occur to me that it was a twist on Jimmy's usual hair-gizmo! But once I thought about it and saw a couple more posts on it, I was like, "No, DUH!!!" :wacko: :rolleyes: :P :lol:

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Posted 22 September 2012 - 02:47 AM

Edit: When I first read about that hairbrush contraption, I swear it did NOT occur to me that it was a twist on Jimmy's usual hair-gizmo! But once I thought about it and saw a couple more posts on it, I was like, "No, DUH!!!" wacko.gif rolleyes.gif tongue.gif laugh.gif

 

Glad you noticed now! I thought it would be funny to include that detail, but I obviously didn't make it clear enough sweatdrop.gif Ah well, live and learn...

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