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[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

Thx, Pedro! I'm finally ready to post Chapter 6!

*rushes off to post it*

[Band_Geek923]

I like all of Emily's fics, I like Pedro's and of course Mara's.

Can some of you check out my fic called My First GF Ever?

It would be much appreciated.

Looking forward to reading more of your fics Emily and Pedro and Mara!

[SweeneyxxTodd]

OK, sorry if this is off topic or somewhat, but since this sort of relates to some fics, I thought I'd ask about it here:

So, in some JN fics (as aforementioned) on FF.net, I come across the word 'Pomona' a lot. I didn't watch ALL of the JN eps *cry*, but I watched enough to love the whole universe. In some of the fics I've read (which I can't list because FF.net is simply being horrid to me at the moment by not letting me log in), the word 'Pomona' (which I tried Googling but was unable to find much info about) seemed to refer to a college/university Jimmy attended. I was wondering whether it had any canon basis.

That is all. Sorry if I'm being such a n00b. I am one, but that's beside the point... :P

In the season three episode Jimmy Goes to College, he attends Pomona School for Advanced Physics, or Pomona SAP. Many fanfiction writers like to have him attend that college later in life for some reason.

I wonder what kind of careers Pomona is preparing their students for. I mean, it's a school for advanced physics. That really narrows career options down quite a bit, doesn't it?

[fierysue]

Thanks Mary! *Has new cliched fanfic idea*

That was helpful. I'm going to download that ep first when I get round to downloading JN! :D

[SweeneyxxTodd]

No prob.

Do I get to hear this idea? Cliche can be good sometimes, if done right.

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

I got this GREAT fanfic idea just a day or 2 ago. For some reason, I had woken up with Tim McGraw's song "Don't Take the Girl" stuck in my head. Then it got me thinking. What if it could be made into a fic called "Don't Take the Girl"? The very beginning would be about when the gang were kids, then, much later in the midsection of the fic, when they're young adults, and still later, when they're middle-aged adults, when people usually have their kids and such... Take time to read these lyrics from this song, and I'm sure you'll have an idea how to word this fic if one of you writes it.

Don't Take the Girl

By: Tim McGraw

Johnny's daddy was taking him fishin'
When he was eight years old
A little girl came through the front gate holdin' a fishing pole
His dad looked down and smiled, said we can't leave her behind
Son I know you don't want her to go but someday you'll change your mind
And Johnny said "Take Jimmy Johnson, take Tommy Thompson, take my best friend Bo
Take anybody that you want as long as she don't go
Take any boy in the world
Daddy please don't take the girl

Same old boy
Same sweet girl
Ten years down the road
He held her tight and kissed her lips
In front of the picture show
Stranger came and pulled a gun
Grabbed her by the arm said "If you do what I tell you to, there won't be any harm"
And Johnny said "Take my money, take my wallet, take my credit cards
Here's the watch that my grandpa gave me
Here's the key to my car
Mister give it a whirl
But please don't take the girl

Same old boy
Same sweet girl
Five years down the road
There's going to be a little one and she says it's time to go
Doctor says the baby's fine but you'll have to leave
'Cause his momma's fading fast and Johnny hit his knees and there he prayed
Take the very breath you gave me
Take the heart from my chest
I'll gladly take her place if you'll let me
Make this my last request
Take me out of this world
God, please don't take the girl

Johnny's daddy
Was taking him fishin'
When he was eight years old

I was thinking that, instead of Johnny, Jimmy is used instead, and the girl he's referring to is Cindy. How about that? ;)

[J/C AVA]

Ok guys.

If you've read my update, I'm gonna post the "new" chapter of Pt. 1 right here in the JN FF Club for critiques, suggestions and overall approval or disapproval.

So here...

Phase 1: The Comet Catalyst

Part 1: The Mood Machine

[2 Days earlier - February 12th]

*It is a nice winter day in Retroville. The birds are chirping, the flowers are blooming, and the sun is shining brightly.

In the classroom of Lindbergh Elementary during show and tell, Cindy Vortex finishes reading a self-written poem about a loving couple*

Cindy: And they lived happily ever after. The End.”

*A 10-second silence fills the air, then broken by an eruption of yelling and cheering*

Ms. Fowl: That was beautiful Cindy. How selfless of that prince to throw himself in that dark hole for his one true love.”

*She pats her teary eye with a handkerchief*

*Cindy bows before the class*

Cindy: Thank you. Thank you very much.

*As she walks past by Jimmy…*

Cindy: Top that, Neutron.

Ms. Fowl: Up next, Jimmy! Show us what non-threatning, non-lethal, and non-deathly invention you’ve concocted for us today, BWARK!

Jimmy: Ladies and gentlemen, allow me to present my 300th greatest invention ever made: The Neutronic Mood Machine!

*From behind his back, Jimmy pulls out a hand-sized remote made of an outer sleek and silvery-white metal with a small red knob in its center, what looks like a meter above it, and at the very end, an antenna. The class stares in amazment.*

Ms. Fowl: Very interesting Jimmy. What does it do?

Jimmy: The Mood Machine can change a person’s mood using energy found on any human brainwaves. And it acts like a radio where you can change the person’s mood by frequencies and airwaves like on any old radio. Like this!

*He points it towards Sheen, presses the button, causing orange waves to shoot out at Sheen*

Jimmy: Now, let’s see… *He observes the meter* Let’s try… sad!

*He turns the knob to sad, and right before the students’ eyes, Sheen starts crying hysterically.*

Sheen: WHY?! WHY?! WHY DID THEY CANCEL ULTRALORD!!! THE WORLD… SO… CRUEL!

*He rests on Carl, who is looking rather uncomfortable*

Jimmy: Or let’s try… happy!

*He turns the knob again to happy, and instantly, Sheen’s mood changes*

Sheen: CARL!! MY BEST FRIEND IN THE WHOLE WORLD!!

*He hugs Carl tight, nearly strangling him*

Carl: Ack! Sheen!

Jimmy: Uh oh! *He turns off the machine, returning Sheen back to his normal self*

Jimmy: Uhh, Sheen? How do you feel?

Sheen: Kinda dizzy… *holding his head* AWESOME!!

*Just then Principal Willoughby walks into the classroom*

Principal Willoughby: Hello Children!

*At that moment, the machine twitches with small sparks and turns at Willoughby in “angry” mode. Suddenly he starts prancing around like an ape*

Jimmy: What?! What’s going on?

*He looks at his machine to find it shaking*

Jimmy: Oh no! It’s malfunctioned!

*The kids rush in a panic to the other side of the room. Willoughby stomps around and beats his chest, then seeing Jimmy, prepares to attack*

Jimmy: Oh no!! C’mon, shut off already!!

*In a panic, he hastily pushes buttons. Right when Willoughby’s arms touch his neck ready to strangle him, the machine turns off, turning Willoughby back to normal. The kids breathe a sigh of relief. Standing dazed and dizzy, Willoughby staggers to stay up.*

Willoughby: Oh. What happened?

Jimmy: And that concludes my presentation thank you!

*He quickly walks back to his chair*

Willoughby: James Neutron!! You’re VERY lucky I’m in a good mood today. And do you know why?

Carl: ‘Cause you’re mommy packed your favorite lunch in your bag?

Sheen: Carl! Please, his mom doesn’t pack his own lunch for him. His butler probably does it for him.

Carl: Well, then does your butler make your food with lots of love…

Willoughby: OH BE QUIET!!!! -sigh- No. The reason why I’m in a good mood is because the school’s first annual Valentine’s Day dance is coming up soon.

Jimmy: Valentine’s Day dance?

Willoughby: That’s right. Kinda like your early glimpse of your future high school proms. Ha ha ha.

*The class falls indifferent to his joke*

Ms. Fowl: Oh that’s right! Valentine’s Day is coming up.

Willoughby: Oh, tell me about it. Anyways, there’s also gonna be a couple contest as well and only the best and the brightest couple can win the very prestige honor of being Valentine couple of the hour!!

*The whole class simply mumbled in disinterest*

Willoughby: Did I mention that the winning couple also gets an exclusive, VIP access to the new and improved Retroland with the new Ultralord atomic rollercoaster, Llama love ranch AND an improved Tunnel of Love?

*And just like that all the kids faces light up amid cheers of celebration*

*The school bell rings*

Willoughby: Bye kids. Oh! And don’t forget that the dance starts at 8 PM sharp! So don’t be late.

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So, what do you guys think?

Personally I'm much happier with this version cause I seemed to capture everyone's personality of the show more well this time around.

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

:Sheen: AWESOME, Pedro!!!

Yeah, what he said! :thumbsup:

[J/C AVA]

Ha ha ha! Thanks Sheen. ^_^

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

Btw, did you see my fanfic idea I posted? Just checkin'! ;)

[J/C AVA]

You mean the new chapter of Unforgettable Summer?

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

No, the brand new idea that I posted about an hour ago. About it being based on a country song.

[J/C AVA]

:blink:! I didn't see that!

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

WTF?! It was RIGHT before you posted your revised chapter on L,L,&D fic, you silly ding-dong!! *playfully knocks Pedro's head*

[J/C AVA]

OW! That hurts! :'(

OH!! I see! Sounds like a pretty good idea. I'm not too big on Tim McGraw but it's a nice J/C song.

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

So, you like the fic idea?! :dance:

[J/C AVA]

I like it.^_^

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

NOW I just wonder who'll take that idea and turn it into a fic...

[J/C AVA]

You not looking at me now are you? :rolleyes:

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

NO, of COURSE not!!! Anyone else who wants to is what I mean! :thumbsup: