Another great chapter. Love it! :thumbsup:
We're Curious (Black and White)!
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Posted 11 May 2008 - 02:27 AM
Way to go, Beks. ^_^ This is fun seeing the girls go incognito.
And...ohhhh boy, Sheen, Sheen, Sheen... :rolleyes: Heh. He's always entertaining. XD
Put the next chapter up soon, if you can!
~Rachel~
And...ohhhh boy, Sheen, Sheen, Sheen... :rolleyes: Heh. He's always entertaining. XD
Put the next chapter up soon, if you can!
~Rachel~
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Posted 12 May 2008 - 07:17 PM
Very good chapter, Beka.
That chapter made me laugh.
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P.S. Can you read my story on here JN Boy Genius Big Brother?
That chapter made me laugh.
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P.S. Can you read my story on here JN Boy Genius Big Brother?
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Posted 17 May 2008 - 05:08 PM
Great job on chapter 6 Beks. I hope your update chapter 7 pretty soon. :thumbsup:
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Posted 19 May 2008 - 01:14 AM
Great job! I would've read it earlier, but I've been so busy! <_<
That was a close call with Cindy almost giving it away to Sam!
:o And Sheen hitting on 'other girls'. Oohhh he was caught on that one. :grr:
Can't wait to read more! Great job Beks! :thumbsup:
That was a close call with Cindy almost giving it away to Sam!
:o And Sheen hitting on 'other girls'. Oohhh he was caught on that one. :grr:
Can't wait to read more! Great job Beks! :thumbsup:
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Posted 22 May 2008 - 11:55 PM
For chapter 7 of We're Curious Black And White will the chapter have scenes from this part of the comic?
http://comicbooksrev...t_10.html#links
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Posted 22 May 2008 - 11:56 PM
Pretty much, but don't let everyone see what it's supposed to be about. :rolleyes:
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Posted 23 May 2008 - 12:32 AM
So when in chapter 7 of We're Curious Black And White will the scenes from the comic be in?
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Posted 06 June 2008 - 11:36 PM
Chapter 7 is eating my soul, and will take a few segments to get it all up, so here's the first part.
Chapter 7: Jamal and the Real Turnersville (part 1)
‘Chelsea’ and ‘Linda’ could not convince the boys to leave them to their work, and they insisted on coming with them. ‘Chelsea’ at least convinced both of them to go with ‘Linda’ to Green Springs.
“I’d just feel better going by myself,” she explained, remembering her humiliation from that morning.
When Cindy vacated the sanctuary of the taxi, she immediately noticed a change in attitude in the people around her. Instead of being disgusted by her presence, as they had that morning, the pedestrians barely glanced at her, a sign that she looked like she belonged there.
“Hey!” a voice suddenly called. “You new?” Cindy spun around and came face to face with the boy with the basketball from the court. Yet, somehow, he seemed like a totally different boy. He looked into her eyes curiously, and a new aura of friendliness surrounded him. And without his little backup group, he seemed less intimidating.
“Hello?” Are ya in there?” the boy asked as Cindy continued to stare.
“Oh, hi,” she finally said. “Um, what did you say?”
“Are you new around here?”
“Well,” Cindy explained. “I’m supposed to write a newspaper article about this neighborhood. I don’t actually live here.” The boy caught the slight tone of disgust in her voice, and gave her a small smile.
“Yeah, I wish I could say the same,” he commented, looking up at the buildings around them sadly. “Do you want me to show you around? I can tell you about most of the neighborhood.”
“Yeah, that’d be great!” Cindy agreed, smiling.
“All right,” the boy said. “Let me just drop my b-ball at my house first. By the way, the name’s Jamal.”
“Cindy,” she replied, not thinking. “Oh, well,” she thought. “He doesn’t really know the real me anyway.”
On their way, they came upon the store where the two old men still sat in rocking chairs outside the door. One was reading a newspaper, while the other looked up, and gave Jamal a wink.
“Who’s that pretty, young thing you’re walkin’ with there, Jamal?” he asked.
“Hi, Mr. and Mr. Jenkins,” Jamal greeted. “This is Cindy. She’s doing a research project, and I’m helpin’ her.”
“A research project? During the summer? Crazy teachers…” the man mumbled.
“Cindy, this is Mr. and Mr. Jenkins. They’re the oldest living residents of Turnersville.”
“You make us sound ancient, boy,” the old man chuckled. “We may be old, but we get around.”
“Hey, listen to this,” the other Mr. Jenkins piped up, looking up from his newspaper. “Local boy genius, Jimmy Neutron, will be awarded the Junior Nobel Peace Prize next week for his latest invention, the identity of which is not being leaked to the public. To date, this is his third time receiving this prestigious award.”
“The little smarty pants is at it again,” his brother replied, laughing softly.
“I’ve never actually met ‘em,” Jamal commented. “But I’ve seen him hanging with his friends at the Candy Bar. He’s friends with that Libby Folfax girl, so I guess he’s ok.”
Cindy snorted. “If you call putting the town in danger at least once a week ‘ok’, then he’s the greatest guy ever!”
“Hey now, everyone makes mistakes, sweet cakes,” the old man with the newspaper said.
“Yeah, but his mistakes almost get the entire town killed!”
“But, if you think about it,” Jamal replied. “He has all that ‘sponability on his shoulders, and when he goofs up big, he’s the one with all the guilt.”
“Well,” Cindy thought. “I suppose he’s right. Come to think of it, I probably make it worse when I yell at him.” She blushed guiltily.
“Hey, Cindy,” Jamal said. “Why don’t you interview these guys for your paper? They’d be a big help, I think. And while you’re doing that, I’ll go in here.” He walked though the open door that led into the store.
The Jenkins’ were actually quite useful in filling in the gaps in the neighborhood’s history, and Cindy even learned some of the last names of the ancestral families. After she was done, she walked into the store to find Jamal. She quickly discovered that it was a comic book store.
Jamal was engrossed in a comic book when Cindy found him. She looked at the front page.
“You like Super Guy?” she asked.
“Ah huh,” he replied, nodding. “I come here whenever they get a new issue and read it.”
“Why don’t you just buy it? That way you could take it home.”
“Well,” Jamal nervously replied. “Money’s kinda tight right now, and my mom hasn’t given me an allowance for a couple months now. I’m afraid to ask her for it.” He closed the comic book and placed it neatly back on the shelf with a heavy sigh.
“Super Guy can wait, though. I’ve gotta show you around.” He picked up the basketball from the floor and walked towards the door.
“Come on!” he called. “We got to get to my house. You’ll love my mom!”
Chapter 7: Jamal and the Real Turnersville (part 1)
‘Chelsea’ and ‘Linda’ could not convince the boys to leave them to their work, and they insisted on coming with them. ‘Chelsea’ at least convinced both of them to go with ‘Linda’ to Green Springs.
“I’d just feel better going by myself,” she explained, remembering her humiliation from that morning.
When Cindy vacated the sanctuary of the taxi, she immediately noticed a change in attitude in the people around her. Instead of being disgusted by her presence, as they had that morning, the pedestrians barely glanced at her, a sign that she looked like she belonged there.
“Hey!” a voice suddenly called. “You new?” Cindy spun around and came face to face with the boy with the basketball from the court. Yet, somehow, he seemed like a totally different boy. He looked into her eyes curiously, and a new aura of friendliness surrounded him. And without his little backup group, he seemed less intimidating.
“Hello?” Are ya in there?” the boy asked as Cindy continued to stare.
“Oh, hi,” she finally said. “Um, what did you say?”
“Are you new around here?”
“Well,” Cindy explained. “I’m supposed to write a newspaper article about this neighborhood. I don’t actually live here.” The boy caught the slight tone of disgust in her voice, and gave her a small smile.
“Yeah, I wish I could say the same,” he commented, looking up at the buildings around them sadly. “Do you want me to show you around? I can tell you about most of the neighborhood.”
“Yeah, that’d be great!” Cindy agreed, smiling.
“All right,” the boy said. “Let me just drop my b-ball at my house first. By the way, the name’s Jamal.”
“Cindy,” she replied, not thinking. “Oh, well,” she thought. “He doesn’t really know the real me anyway.”
On their way, they came upon the store where the two old men still sat in rocking chairs outside the door. One was reading a newspaper, while the other looked up, and gave Jamal a wink.
“Who’s that pretty, young thing you’re walkin’ with there, Jamal?” he asked.
“Hi, Mr. and Mr. Jenkins,” Jamal greeted. “This is Cindy. She’s doing a research project, and I’m helpin’ her.”
“A research project? During the summer? Crazy teachers…” the man mumbled.
“Cindy, this is Mr. and Mr. Jenkins. They’re the oldest living residents of Turnersville.”
“You make us sound ancient, boy,” the old man chuckled. “We may be old, but we get around.”
“Hey, listen to this,” the other Mr. Jenkins piped up, looking up from his newspaper. “Local boy genius, Jimmy Neutron, will be awarded the Junior Nobel Peace Prize next week for his latest invention, the identity of which is not being leaked to the public. To date, this is his third time receiving this prestigious award.”
“The little smarty pants is at it again,” his brother replied, laughing softly.
“I’ve never actually met ‘em,” Jamal commented. “But I’ve seen him hanging with his friends at the Candy Bar. He’s friends with that Libby Folfax girl, so I guess he’s ok.”
Cindy snorted. “If you call putting the town in danger at least once a week ‘ok’, then he’s the greatest guy ever!”
“Hey now, everyone makes mistakes, sweet cakes,” the old man with the newspaper said.
“Yeah, but his mistakes almost get the entire town killed!”
“But, if you think about it,” Jamal replied. “He has all that ‘sponability on his shoulders, and when he goofs up big, he’s the one with all the guilt.”
“Well,” Cindy thought. “I suppose he’s right. Come to think of it, I probably make it worse when I yell at him.” She blushed guiltily.
“Hey, Cindy,” Jamal said. “Why don’t you interview these guys for your paper? They’d be a big help, I think. And while you’re doing that, I’ll go in here.” He walked though the open door that led into the store.
The Jenkins’ were actually quite useful in filling in the gaps in the neighborhood’s history, and Cindy even learned some of the last names of the ancestral families. After she was done, she walked into the store to find Jamal. She quickly discovered that it was a comic book store.
Jamal was engrossed in a comic book when Cindy found him. She looked at the front page.
“You like Super Guy?” she asked.
“Ah huh,” he replied, nodding. “I come here whenever they get a new issue and read it.”
“Why don’t you just buy it? That way you could take it home.”
“Well,” Jamal nervously replied. “Money’s kinda tight right now, and my mom hasn’t given me an allowance for a couple months now. I’m afraid to ask her for it.” He closed the comic book and placed it neatly back on the shelf with a heavy sigh.
“Super Guy can wait, though. I’ve gotta show you around.” He picked up the basketball from the floor and walked towards the door.
“Come on!” he called. “We got to get to my house. You’ll love my mom!”
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Posted 07 June 2008 - 01:02 AM
Very good chapter! I love it!
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Posted 07 June 2008 - 06:47 AM
Oh, great chapter, Beks. (: I loved knowing there were at least some people that were a little unbiased towards race (Mr. and Mr. Jenkins). That just adds a whole new depth of reality to your story, as well. In truth there were always be people that are spiteful, people that are unbiased, etc. It shows difference between characters and personality.
I have a feeling this story is really headed somewhere special. Keep up the good work!
I have a feeling this story is really headed somewhere special. Keep up the good work!
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Posted 07 June 2008 - 07:01 AM
Nice one, Beks!
I really love your stories!~
Keep it up ^_^
I really love your stories!~
Keep it up ^_^
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Posted 07 June 2008 - 09:40 PM
That was a great chapter, Beka.
I really enjoyed.
Please write more soon.
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I really enjoyed.
Please write more soon.
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Posted 07 June 2008 - 11:14 PM
Wow, tons of reviews!
@Neros Urameshi: Thanks! Glad you loved it! ^_^
@Miss Piggy(sorry, couldn't resist :lol: ): *long whistle* Holy cow, that's a long review! Do you see your fan-ness yet? ;) I'm glad you loved the first part of the chapter! You seem to think everything I do in these fics is genius, but I'll be modest and say I'm definitly not a genius. ^_^
I'll just sum up your comments and say thanks for such a long, and deep reply!
@Krista: Thanks for replying! ^_^ Yes, the Mr. Jenkins' are a little unbiased, but I put that off as they're too old to care anymore. They just let the younguns do their own thing, and they just observe and put in their two cents everyonce and a while.
And yes, this is heading somewhere big. In fact, the climax should be coming at the end of this chapter! ;) *hinthintwinkwink*
@Karin: Thanks! I'm really glad you're exploring my other work! :D
@Gretchen: Glad you liked it! I'll have a new chapter up ASAP! Right after one for Llama Heaven. ^_^
@Neros Urameshi: Thanks! Glad you loved it! ^_^
@Miss Piggy(sorry, couldn't resist :lol: ): *long whistle* Holy cow, that's a long review! Do you see your fan-ness yet? ;) I'm glad you loved the first part of the chapter! You seem to think everything I do in these fics is genius, but I'll be modest and say I'm definitly not a genius. ^_^
I'll just sum up your comments and say thanks for such a long, and deep reply!
@Krista: Thanks for replying! ^_^ Yes, the Mr. Jenkins' are a little unbiased, but I put that off as they're too old to care anymore. They just let the younguns do their own thing, and they just observe and put in their two cents everyonce and a while.
And yes, this is heading somewhere big. In fact, the climax should be coming at the end of this chapter! ;) *hinthintwinkwink*
@Karin: Thanks! I'm really glad you're exploring my other work! :D
@Gretchen: Glad you liked it! I'll have a new chapter up ASAP! Right after one for Llama Heaven. ^_^
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Posted 10 June 2008 - 01:10 AM
Great job on part 1 of Chapter 7. :thumbsup: Make sure you update parts 2 and 3 ASAP. :thumbsup:
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Posted 10 June 2008 - 03:14 PM
*pant, pant* I'm here at last!
That was awesome, Beks (as always :P )! I just love your stories!!! Like Pigquet said, that's awful that once Cindy's skin color was different she was immediately accepted in the neighborhood. Just goes to show how absurd racism is. *shakes head* Anyway, this should be interesting. Don't let chapter 7 continue to eat your soul!!! D: And please get the next part up soon!
Keep up the great work! :thumbsup:
~Rachel~
That was awesome, Beks (as always :P )! I just love your stories!!! Like Pigquet said, that's awful that once Cindy's skin color was different she was immediately accepted in the neighborhood. Just goes to show how absurd racism is. *shakes head* Anyway, this should be interesting. Don't let chapter 7 continue to eat your soul!!! D: And please get the next part up soon!
Keep up the great work! :thumbsup:
~Rachel~
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Posted 14 June 2008 - 06:21 AM
Great update. :D
Bleh, racism. Oh well. I know that this story will have a great message in the end, but you can't fight it. Also, they support Jimmy! Aw! :)
Bleh, racism. Oh well. I know that this story will have a great message in the end, but you can't fight it. Also, they support Jimmy! Aw! :)
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Posted 16 June 2008 - 03:45 AM
I thought since that everybody really likes We're Curious Black And White I thought you can do a sequel of We're Curious Black And White featuring Cindy's and Libby's mom as they go through Jimmy's machine.
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Posted 16 June 2008 - 03:49 AM
Well, that might work, but I'm gonna pass on a sequel. I have 3 other fanfics to write on, and I really don't want to start on another one.
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Posted 16 June 2008 - 03:52 AM
After you finished working on your 3 other fics I have another Jimmy Neutron suggestion based on another Superman comic.
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