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True Colors (My Date With Nick)
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Posted 30 October 2007 - 02:29 AM
@Andrea: I know, I know. **hangs head** AND I'm even worse for abanding my Diamonds Ain't a Girl's Best Friend!! =[ **head falls off** I'M SORRY!! :'(
@Beka and AE: Well, if you must know, I am currently working on a secret fic that I am not aloud to stop. Chica and Krista might kill me if I do. ;) So, after that, I PROMISE I WILL TRY MY HARDEST TO COME BACK TO TC! [Glad you guys are so enthusiastic! :) :D ;) ]
@Beka and AE: Well, if you must know, I am currently working on a secret fic that I am not aloud to stop. Chica and Krista might kill me if I do. ;) So, after that, I PROMISE I WILL TRY MY HARDEST TO COME BACK TO TC! [Glad you guys are so enthusiastic! :) :D ;) ]
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Posted 27 June 2008 - 05:41 AM
Well guys, it finally happened.
SUNNY CRACKED.
Yes, it's true!
WHAT'S true, some of the newbies may ask?
Well...
THIS FIC IS BACK. :o
I know, I know. YOU'RE ALL IN TREMENDOUS SHOCK. How could this possibly be? you're all wondering. I thought this fic was OVER 'N' DONE WITH. On a permanent hiatus. A never-ending writer's block.
Well, you would have been right. But for poor Snazzo's sake, for his FORTIETH BIRTHDAY, I decided to make the ultimate sacrifice.
The chapter that I have been unable to write for over EIGHT MONTHS I wrote in one day. JUST FOR SNAZZO. (And my promise to myself to finish all started-fanfiction.) Pathetic, isn't it? ;) Although that's why it's not that long of a chapter.
But I've tortured you long enough. (If you actually care about this and are still reading, I mean. And, well, if you haven't forgotten what half of the fic was about. Cuz I sure did.) I've been looking forward to this moment since the day I got writer's block, and now I was finally able to write this. So without further ado, I give you all...
Chapter IX
Four days later, while Ms. Fowl was writing on the board, Jimmy threw his pencil several feet from Cindy’s desk and turned to her sweetly.
“Oh, Cindy, I accidentally dropped by pencil,” he said with a smile. “Do you think you could possibly get it for me?”
“Of course,” she grumbled, and picked up the pencil only to slam it back on Jimmy’s desk.
“Ah-ah-ah,” he said tauntingly. “This is your last day, remember! If you do anything mean until—when did you mess up yesterday?—six forty-five tonight, those colors on your arms?” He nodded toward Cindy’s wrists where, thankfully, the colors had receded slightly since this morning. “Those will be permanent. Again.”
Cindy held back the urge to stab him with the banana on her desk only with the repeating thought of Three hours and fifteen minutes. Three hours and fifteen minutes.
“Oh, and Vortex?” Jimmy added politely.
“What ELSE do you want?” Cindy murmured quietly, as Ms. Fowl turned around quickly. “You’ve been absolutely torturing me for four days, not to mention this ENTIRE THING is your fault. Haven’t I suffered enough?”
Jimmy blinked at her in surprise.
“Wow. Fine. Okay.”
Cindy leaned back and began blocking out Ms. Fowl’s lecture coolly. Just three more hours and fourteen minutes.
* * *
Later that night, Jimmy, Libby, Sheen, and Carl were crowded around Cindy anxiously. Cindy herself was not so calm either. Four of them were staring at their respective watches or cell phone clocks, but Jimmy was fidgeting with the Rainbow 5000 nervously while watching the satellite clock on his wrist. He had a look of unmistakable guilt plastered upon his face.
Five.
Four.
Three.
Two.
One.
Every color that was not an original part of Cindy’s body faded from her skin and hair immediately. She took a deep breath, savoring her return to normal at last.
“Thank you so much, Neutron!” Cindy squealed, forgetting that it was in fact Jimmy’s fault that anything had happened to her in the first place.
“Hold the thanks, I have to tell you something,” Jimmy said guiltily.
Dread filled Cindy and spread instantaneously. Even though she had no idea what Jimmy was about to say, it was obvious that it was not good.
“Oh, Neutron,” she wailed, “what did you do?”
Jimmy cleared him throat and looked her straight in the eye. “I have a confession to make.”
SUNNY CRACKED.
Yes, it's true!
WHAT'S true, some of the newbies may ask?
Well...
THIS FIC IS BACK. :o
I know, I know. YOU'RE ALL IN TREMENDOUS SHOCK. How could this possibly be? you're all wondering. I thought this fic was OVER 'N' DONE WITH. On a permanent hiatus. A never-ending writer's block.
Well, you would have been right. But for poor Snazzo's sake, for his FORTIETH BIRTHDAY, I decided to make the ultimate sacrifice.
The chapter that I have been unable to write for over EIGHT MONTHS I wrote in one day. JUST FOR SNAZZO. (And my promise to myself to finish all started-fanfiction.) Pathetic, isn't it? ;) Although that's why it's not that long of a chapter.
But I've tortured you long enough. (If you actually care about this and are still reading, I mean. And, well, if you haven't forgotten what half of the fic was about. Cuz I sure did.) I've been looking forward to this moment since the day I got writer's block, and now I was finally able to write this. So without further ado, I give you all...
Chapter IX
Four days later, while Ms. Fowl was writing on the board, Jimmy threw his pencil several feet from Cindy’s desk and turned to her sweetly.
“Oh, Cindy, I accidentally dropped by pencil,” he said with a smile. “Do you think you could possibly get it for me?”
“Of course,” she grumbled, and picked up the pencil only to slam it back on Jimmy’s desk.
“Ah-ah-ah,” he said tauntingly. “This is your last day, remember! If you do anything mean until—when did you mess up yesterday?—six forty-five tonight, those colors on your arms?” He nodded toward Cindy’s wrists where, thankfully, the colors had receded slightly since this morning. “Those will be permanent. Again.”
Cindy held back the urge to stab him with the banana on her desk only with the repeating thought of Three hours and fifteen minutes. Three hours and fifteen minutes.
“Oh, and Vortex?” Jimmy added politely.
“What ELSE do you want?” Cindy murmured quietly, as Ms. Fowl turned around quickly. “You’ve been absolutely torturing me for four days, not to mention this ENTIRE THING is your fault. Haven’t I suffered enough?”
Jimmy blinked at her in surprise.
“Wow. Fine. Okay.”
Cindy leaned back and began blocking out Ms. Fowl’s lecture coolly. Just three more hours and fourteen minutes.
* * *
Later that night, Jimmy, Libby, Sheen, and Carl were crowded around Cindy anxiously. Cindy herself was not so calm either. Four of them were staring at their respective watches or cell phone clocks, but Jimmy was fidgeting with the Rainbow 5000 nervously while watching the satellite clock on his wrist. He had a look of unmistakable guilt plastered upon his face.
Five.
Four.
Three.
Two.
One.
Every color that was not an original part of Cindy’s body faded from her skin and hair immediately. She took a deep breath, savoring her return to normal at last.
“Thank you so much, Neutron!” Cindy squealed, forgetting that it was in fact Jimmy’s fault that anything had happened to her in the first place.
“Hold the thanks, I have to tell you something,” Jimmy said guiltily.
Dread filled Cindy and spread instantaneously. Even though she had no idea what Jimmy was about to say, it was obvious that it was not good.
“Oh, Neutron,” she wailed, “what did you do?”
Jimmy cleared him throat and looked her straight in the eye. “I have a confession to make.”
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Posted 27 June 2008 - 07:15 AM
Yeah! You're gonna finish it! :dance: Can't wait to hear the punch line! :lol:
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Posted 28 June 2008 - 01:57 AM
SUNNY!
^_^ :D :lol: :) :kawaii: :bff: *.* :thumbsup: <3 :huh:
WOW!
I am *SO* stunned and flattered. That's wonderful that you're going to finish it!
You may have noticed, I did try a petition but that didn't go to well.
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Awww, Sunny, have I told you you're an Awesome Sunny lately?
-You always have been, and you always will be to me.
^_^
What a nice present!
Oh, and it was so unique how you had the link in your signature.
-I didn't know WHAT to expect.
Thanks bunches Sunny!
And, Oh! I almost forgot. GREAT CHAPTER!
-What shocking secrets will Jimmy reveal?
I think Beks knows ... Don't tell me Beks! I want it to be a surprise!
Bye for now!
Snazzo
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^_^ :D :lol: :) :kawaii: :bff: *.* :thumbsup: <3 :huh:
WOW!
I am *SO* stunned and flattered. That's wonderful that you're going to finish it!
You may have noticed, I did try a petition but that didn't go to well.
:unsure:
Awww, Sunny, have I told you you're an Awesome Sunny lately?
-You always have been, and you always will be to me.
^_^
What a nice present!
Oh, and it was so unique how you had the link in your signature.
-I didn't know WHAT to expect.
Thanks bunches Sunny!
And, Oh! I almost forgot. GREAT CHAPTER!
-What shocking secrets will Jimmy reveal?
I think Beks knows ... Don't tell me Beks! I want it to be a surprise!
Bye for now!
Snazzo
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Posted 28 June 2008 - 02:38 AM
I love it so far
I can't wait for more!!
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I can't wait for more!!
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Posted 28 June 2008 - 02:43 AM
Snazz is right! You're awesome, Sunny. ^_^
I liked the chapter, but dang, I don't remember everything very clearly, so I think I'm gonna have to make time and reread the other chapters again to refresh my memory... :P
Still, it was awesome and I'm looking forward to seeing this fic finished!
~Rachel~
I liked the chapter, but dang, I don't remember everything very clearly, so I think I'm gonna have to make time and reread the other chapters again to refresh my memory... :P
Still, it was awesome and I'm looking forward to seeing this fic finished!
~Rachel~
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Posted 08 July 2008 - 05:33 AM
AAAHHHHHHH SUNNY!!!!!! OMG I can't believe what my eyes are seeing!!! you are actually going to finish this story!!!! this is awesome!! and the chapter was a blast!!! really cool! I actually remembered where the story stayed!! oh thanks Snazz for your birthday!!! oh I've been waiting for this for so long!!! wow!! a confession?? what could it be??? omg well at least she's her normal colour again!!! cool! keep writing can't wait for the next interview!!!
o:) Andrea o:)
PS: sorry! I have NO idea why I wrote interview!! I wasn't thinking of one and I wasn't reading or listening to one...um how strange...well you know I meant chapter. Anyway, see you later!
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PS: sorry! I have NO idea why I wrote interview!! I wasn't thinking of one and I wasn't reading or listening to one...um how strange...well you know I meant chapter. Anyway, see you later!
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Posted 14 July 2008 - 07:20 PM
Wow, I can't believe I FINALLY finished this. It's been almost a year! Actually, I really should wait to finish it... **devilish look** I mean, I started it on September first so I should end it on September first, right? ;)
Nah, okay, I won't. So here it is, the chapter that took months... Chapter 10!!
Chapter X
Cindy advanced several steps. “Neutron,” she snarled, “what did you do?”
Jimmy backed up against his wall, terrified. “I—I—I—”
“Look, Neutron,” Cindy growled, jabbing him in the chest.
“I—I—I—I—” he spluttered.
“Why can’t I just have the truth?” Cindy screamed. Though her temper wildly increased, her skin color stayed the same.
“O—okay, well, I kind—sorta—maybe—totally—lied to you—ah!” Jimmy confessed, squealing when Cindy stamped her foot furiously.
“What exactly do you mean, lied to me?”
“Cin,” Libby whispered just loudly enough so Cindy could not pretend to have not heard her, “don’t you think you’re blowing this thing way out of proportion?”
“That remains to be seen,” Cindy said flatly, tapping her foot. “Now Neutron… What. Did. You. Do?”
Jimmy looked momentarily surprised at her change in tone, then relieved. “Well, I know you’re definitely not going to like this. So you have to go sit over there, okay?”
He was pointing to a chair at the other end of the room, at least thirty feet away. Cindy stalked off, muttering things like “no respect” and “the Incredible Hulk.”
“So,” Jimmy said slightly louder so Cindy could hear him. “This was all my fault.”
“Duh,” she called back, looking aggravated.
“No, I mean the entire thing was my fault,” he repeated. Libby, Sheen, and Carl looked like they knew what he was going to say and started looking nervous.
“I beg your pardon?”
“Look, I made the entire thing happen. The night of that storm, Sheen, Carl, Libby, and I had had enough, so we made this whole thing up. You were never really changing colors by yourself. I’ve been following you around this entire time with the Rainbow 5000. I even brought the Heat Ray into this when it got that bad… how do you think I always got there so fast when you called? The Hovercar is fast, but not that fast—I would just be outside wherever you were and count to twenty before coming in. So we just did this whole thing to teach you a lesson.”
Cindy just sat there for a minute, staring at Jimmy without blinking. Was I really that bad? she wondered. She thought back to everything that had happened since that storm and realized she had been. Then she stood up, and all four of them flinched, expecting her to blow any second. She opened her mouth (Sheen and Carl covered their ears), the words Thank you waiting to come out. But she couldn’t. Not yet. Not after everything he had put her through.
She walked wordlessly to the chute that led in and out of the lab and pressed the button that had been used so many times against her. Sheen and Carl uncovered their ears, and Libby and Jimmy looked shocked.
But Cindy never saw their expressions. Her back was to them, and in a moment, that familiar glass appeared over her head and she zoomed away through it silently for the last time.
Nah, okay, I won't. So here it is, the chapter that took months... Chapter 10!!
Chapter X
Cindy advanced several steps. “Neutron,” she snarled, “what did you do?”
Jimmy backed up against his wall, terrified. “I—I—I—”
“Look, Neutron,” Cindy growled, jabbing him in the chest.
“I—I—I—I—” he spluttered.
“Why can’t I just have the truth?” Cindy screamed. Though her temper wildly increased, her skin color stayed the same.
“O—okay, well, I kind—sorta—maybe—totally—lied to you—ah!” Jimmy confessed, squealing when Cindy stamped her foot furiously.
“What exactly do you mean, lied to me?”
“Cin,” Libby whispered just loudly enough so Cindy could not pretend to have not heard her, “don’t you think you’re blowing this thing way out of proportion?”
“That remains to be seen,” Cindy said flatly, tapping her foot. “Now Neutron… What. Did. You. Do?”
Jimmy looked momentarily surprised at her change in tone, then relieved. “Well, I know you’re definitely not going to like this. So you have to go sit over there, okay?”
He was pointing to a chair at the other end of the room, at least thirty feet away. Cindy stalked off, muttering things like “no respect” and “the Incredible Hulk.”
“So,” Jimmy said slightly louder so Cindy could hear him. “This was all my fault.”
“Duh,” she called back, looking aggravated.
“No, I mean the entire thing was my fault,” he repeated. Libby, Sheen, and Carl looked like they knew what he was going to say and started looking nervous.
“I beg your pardon?”
“Look, I made the entire thing happen. The night of that storm, Sheen, Carl, Libby, and I had had enough, so we made this whole thing up. You were never really changing colors by yourself. I’ve been following you around this entire time with the Rainbow 5000. I even brought the Heat Ray into this when it got that bad… how do you think I always got there so fast when you called? The Hovercar is fast, but not that fast—I would just be outside wherever you were and count to twenty before coming in. So we just did this whole thing to teach you a lesson.”
Cindy just sat there for a minute, staring at Jimmy without blinking. Was I really that bad? she wondered. She thought back to everything that had happened since that storm and realized she had been. Then she stood up, and all four of them flinched, expecting her to blow any second. She opened her mouth (Sheen and Carl covered their ears), the words Thank you waiting to come out. But she couldn’t. Not yet. Not after everything he had put her through.
She walked wordlessly to the chute that led in and out of the lab and pressed the button that had been used so many times against her. Sheen and Carl uncovered their ears, and Libby and Jimmy looked shocked.
But Cindy never saw their expressions. Her back was to them, and in a moment, that familiar glass appeared over her head and she zoomed away through it silently for the last time.
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Posted 14 July 2008 - 08:30 PM
Great chapter. I can't believ its been Jimmy,Libby, Carl and Sheen teaching her a lesson the whole time
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YEAH SUNNY! YOU FINISHED IT!!!
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That's so cool!
Aw, it was a very good ending.
-I was so annoyed at Cindy for going out with Nick in the first place!
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-And then doing it AGAIN! What was she thinking?
...
Kind of odd though, Sunny, and almost disturbing.
-The way Cindy went up the chute for the LAST time.
The last time in this story? The last time EVER?
-Say it ain't so!
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"What's next for Sunny?"
"Well, Snazzo, I think you'll be surprised and delighted!"
SNAZZ*O
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P.S. - I suggest you work it up into proper format and submit it to Mara to add to the site. We need more great fanfics on that page!
P.P.S. - You might want to PM Beks too! I'm sure she'll see it, but it'll be a nice surprise when she pops in from Camp, or gets back.
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That's so cool!
Aw, it was a very good ending.
-I was so annoyed at Cindy for going out with Nick in the first place!
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-And then doing it AGAIN! What was she thinking?
...
Kind of odd though, Sunny, and almost disturbing.
-The way Cindy went up the chute for the LAST time.
The last time in this story? The last time EVER?
-Say it ain't so!
...
"What's next for Sunny?"
"Well, Snazzo, I think you'll be surprised and delighted!"
SNAZZ*O
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P.S. - I suggest you work it up into proper format and submit it to Mara to add to the site. We need more great fanfics on that page!
P.P.S. - You might want to PM Beks too! I'm sure she'll see it, but it'll be a nice surprise when she pops in from Camp, or gets back.
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Posted 15 July 2008 - 01:00 AM
Thanks, guys!! (:
And LOL, so was I, and I wrote it! XDD
I'm not sure what "for the last time" meant. It was just supposed to be more dramatic. xDD :P So yeah, let's say it's the last time in the story. LOL.
You will definitely be surprised and hopefully delighted! I have one fic in progress right now, and I'm hoping to start at least one other new idea (and then one I had WAAAAY back in the days of It's a Matter of Life and Death). I don't want to have my spot of most fics going on at one time taken from me by Beks!! XD
PS. Well, I submitted two or three fanfics to her at least a month ago, so I'll wait to hear if I should send this one in too. Before you came along, I had the most non-admin fics on the whole site! XD
PPS. Okay, thanks!!
And LOL, so was I, and I wrote it! XDD
I'm not sure what "for the last time" meant. It was just supposed to be more dramatic. xDD :P So yeah, let's say it's the last time in the story. LOL.
You will definitely be surprised and hopefully delighted! I have one fic in progress right now, and I'm hoping to start at least one other new idea (and then one I had WAAAAY back in the days of It's a Matter of Life and Death). I don't want to have my spot of most fics going on at one time taken from me by Beks!! XD
PS. Well, I submitted two or three fanfics to her at least a month ago, so I'll wait to hear if I should send this one in too. Before you came along, I had the most non-admin fics on the whole site! XD
PPS. Okay, thanks!!
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Posted 15 July 2008 - 04:07 PM
Whoa! Awesome, Sunny! I love how you had that twist at the end. Great job, girl! As usual. ;D
~Rachel~
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Posted 15 July 2008 - 06:01 PM
awww cool sunny!!!! amazng!! I'delaborate a bit more in this reply, but I kinda have a head ache and I have zero inspiration, but I really liked it and wow!!! you really had to end it so dramatically!??? lol but it was a bit shocking, I mean I never really thought tht it had been planned...I would have probably imagined it if I had read the whole story at one, but your (not so) little pause of suspence just before the two last chapters was gret! lol
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o:) Andre o:)
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Posted 16 July 2008 - 11:09 PM
YAY!! You finally finished it! It was a very good ending: "for the last time", and even though I knew that was the ending, I still had that suspence in me. Way to go! :thumbsup:
I especially loved the part when Jimmy tells Cindy to move far away in order to tell her. ^_^
I especially loved the part when Jimmy tells Cindy to move far away in order to tell her. ^_^
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Posted 20 July 2008 - 12:42 PM
Thanks for writing it and for making me read it, Sunny! It was a really interesting story for my Sunday. I liked how they played with Cindy, everybody was natural there. That's like another good episode of the show!
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Posted 20 July 2008 - 02:37 PM
Sunny! What a great story! I just read all of it today, and wow! Fantastic job! :lol:
Cindy definitely needs to be taught some life lessons, and this was a super creative way of doing it.
:D I can't wait to see what you have for us in future stories!!!
-Katie :ahoy:
Cindy definitely needs to be taught some life lessons, and this was a super creative way of doing it.
:D I can't wait to see what you have for us in future stories!!!
-Katie :ahoy:
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Posted 01 August 2008 - 08:24 AM
@Beka: Yup! And thanks! Endings are my worst piece, lol, so I'm glad you liked it. XD
LOL, so did I. :thumbsup: Thanks again!!
@Flank: You're welcome!! I should be thanking you for reading it, though. So--THANK YOU!!! =D And I'm so glad you thought it was like the show--that was my complete and total goal!! YAY!
@Katie: Wooow, am I honored or what! Thanks so much!
Haha, I agree about the first part. And thanks! It was so fun to write it. XD Except, you know, the eight-month writer's block. XD
Well, I'm kind of sick of writing for now. But I have a hardrive and a half of old ideas, so you can bet you'll be seeing some more of my work! (:
LOL, so did I. :thumbsup: Thanks again!!
@Flank: You're welcome!! I should be thanking you for reading it, though. So--THANK YOU!!! =D And I'm so glad you thought it was like the show--that was my complete and total goal!! YAY!
@Katie: Wooow, am I honored or what! Thanks so much!
Haha, I agree about the first part. And thanks! It was so fun to write it. XD Except, you know, the eight-month writer's block. XD
Well, I'm kind of sick of writing for now. But I have a hardrive and a half of old ideas, so you can bet you'll be seeing some more of my work! (:
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This was a cery good story, Rachel.
I really enjoyed it.
I really enjoyed it.
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