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[Ang]

AHHHH! PLEASE BE OK!

[marioarp]

Awsume nice fic so far its turning out good!!! :thumbsup:

[Beks]

I guess to keep you guys from dieing of cliffhangers, I'll put up the last part of Chapter 5...


Chapter 5: The Explosion Heard Round the Neighborhood (part 3)


Cindy was rudely awakened by a light coming through her window facing the street. She got out of bed saying, “Oh, what now? Is Sheen trying to signal to his ‘alien brethren’ again?” She looked out the window, scanning for the source of the light. Then she saw the small mushroom cloud coming from behind Jimmy’s house, and gasped. She stared in horror as the swirling smoke rose into the sky and covered the moon. The smoke reflected in her eyes, like two explosions deep inside her. “No, no, NO!” she said, first as a whisper, then growing into a scream as she ran down the stairs and out the door.

Sprinting across the street, she saw other people coming out of their houses or looking out windows, entranced by the spectacle. Blinking back tears, she ran on.

As she rounded the corner around the house, she saw Jimmy’s parents running out the back door. The smoke had cleared and she could see the jumbled pieces of wood and metal that had been the clubhouse. Fire was burning in places, causing shadows to dance in the wreckage, Jimmy’s dad ran back in the house to grab the fire extinguisher. His mom was standing motionless, swaying softly, staring unseeing into the burning debris.

“Mrs. Neutron!” Cindy yelled, running up to her. Judy Neutron was shaken out of her trance, and turned around as Cindy stopped in front of her.

“Cindy, sweetie, go back home. You shouldn’t be here.” she said, her eyes wide and fearful.

“I’m sorry Mrs. Neutron, but I have to be here. Jimmy’s my friend.” Cindy said, being as forceful as she dared. Jimmy’s dad ran out of the house with the fire extinguisher, his face unusually serious. He started to extinguish the fires, his eyes wild and terrified against the burning wood.

“Cindy!” a voice yelled. Cindy looked back to see Libby, Sheen, and Carl running up to the ruins, parents in tow. “What happened?” Libby said when they stopped and stared at the fiery wreck.

“I don’t know!” Cindy said. “All I know is that he’s in there somewhere, probably trapped.” Voices could be heard in the front of the house, rising and falling like the roar of waves.

Carl’s mom spoke up, her hair still in rollers. “We’ll keep the crowd under control.” she said, nodding at the other parents. They walked back toward the street. The voices slowly quieted to a low rumble. Jimmy’s mom stood up straight and stared at them with as hopeful a look as she could muster.

“When Hugh is done putting out the flames, we’ll all help look for…his body.” she said, reluctant to say the word. At the signal of Mr. Neutron, Cindy and the gang started shifting through the twisted metal and blackened wood. They saw familiar objects in the debris, shattered mirrors, a burnt chicken clock, a brass doorknob that Carl refused to pick up, and Jimmy’s computer chair, charred black. Cindy stopped and looked at the people around her. Everyone was very serious, even Sheen. He didn’t even smile when Carl tripped over a piece of wood and fell over. She knew they all had good reason to be this dull, but it was still unnerving to watch all those sad faces all at once. She sighed and looked back down at the pile she was shifting through. She suddenly picked up a piece of metal and cried out. Mrs. Neutron stumbled to her. “What is it, sweetie? Did you find him?” she said.

Cindy sniffled and wiped away a tear. “No, but look.” she said, holding up the metal in her shaking hand. It was Goddard’s lower jaw.

“Oh Goddard.” Mrs. Neutron said, taking the piece from Cindy. She stroked it lovingly. Suddenly, it started to shake wildly. Mrs. Neutron dropped it hurriedly, as if it had bit her. It started to slide across the ground on its own, followed by many other pieces from all over the ruins.

“It can’t be.” Libby said, awestruck. Metal plates and bolts practically flew to an empty place on the lawn and attached themselves together until Goddard’s familiar form was reassembled. He barked happily as everyone ran up to him.

“I have no idea how, but Goddard’s alive.” Mrs. Neutron said.

“Hey, I have an idea! What if we used Goddard to search for Jimmy?” Libby said, patting Goddard head.

“Hey yeah. Ok Goddard, go get Jimmy. Go on, get him.” Sheen said, whistling and patting his knees.

“You have to say it scientifically, like this: Goddard, scan for life forms in the debris.” Cindy said. Goddard immediately opened up his screen and radar satellite. Cindy stared at the radar for a second and then looked at the wreck. “I know where he is.” she said. She hurriedly scrambled over the rubble and started to dig wildly. “Come on guys. I can’t do this alone.” she said, looking back at them. They ran to the place where she was digging and helped. After layers and layers of objects, an arm could be seen.

“Oh my goodness.” Mrs. Neutron gasped quietly. Digging more, they finally pulled Jimmy out and laid him on the grass. His entire body was red, and his clothes were rags. Only his pants seemed to hold together. His face was peaceful, his mouth open slightly. It was an unreal experience, seeing Jimmy, the boy who had saved the world thousands of times, lying helpless and beaten.

“Is he..?” Libby said. Cindy looked at his chest. It was rising and falling slowly, almost undetectable in the dark.

“No, look. He’s breathing.” she said. A glimmer of hope danced in her eyes. Mr. Neutron picked Jimmy up carefully and carried him over his shoulder. His face was a picture of seriousness.

“Come on, we have to hurry.” he said, running around the house. During the time that they had been looking for Jimmy, the police, the fire department, the press, and an ambulance had arrived. The kids’ parents were still keeping the crowd back, with the help of the police. As Mr. Neutron ran out to the front lawn, the crowd started yelling and cameras started clicking when they saw the limp body of Jimmy Neutron, boy genius. Mr. and Mrs. Neutron, Cindy, Libby, Carl, and Sheen piled into the back of the ambulance with Jimmy’s unconscious body. Cindy stared at Jimmy, willing him to open his beautiful blue eyes and tell her that everything was going to be all right.

With the smoke gone, the starry sky twinkled with hope, and the nearly full moon shone gently.



Scared ya, didn't I?
:P

[ShadRose17]

Good Chappy, Write more soon.

[Ang]

*recovering from almost a heart attack* Don't you ever scare me like that again! And yes its too good for words.........



(speechless)

[Beks]

Awww...Thanks guys!! ^_^

[cynthia_aurora24]

you deserve it- this is getting really good!

:D

[Beks]

If you thought that was good, check this out:


Chapter 6: Blue Spots in a Sea of Orange


Jimmy woke comfortable and warm. As the room slowly focused, he could make out familiar faces. His mom, dad, and all his friends were there, even Cindy. He moved to sit up, but when he tried, pain seared through his entire body. Exhausted with the attempt, he lay back down on his pillow. Staring at all the faces around the bed, he said, “What happened?”

“You tell us!” Libby said. “All we know is that the entire clubhouse exploded, with you inside!”

“It was terrifying!” Carl said.

“You gave us quite a scare there, Jimbo.” Mr. Neutron said, who his cheery old self was once again. The door opened, and a doctor in a white coat came through. He had a very pointy face, short black hair that was slicked back, and he kept smiling creepily.

“Mr. and Mrs. Neutron, will you come with me, please? You need to sign a few things.” he said. He glanced at Jimmy, gave him a huge toothy smile, and winked. Jimmy turned back to his friends as his parents filed out the door with the smiling doctor.

“Ok, now what’s the deal? What the heck were you doing in the lab?” Cindy said.

“I guess I can tell you guys, but you have to keep it a secret. Nobody else can know about this.” Jimmy said. He quickly looked around for any cameras in the room.

“Ok, so spill. What’s this ‘project’ you just had to do?” Libby said.

“BTSO asked me to make super suits with our N Men powers so that they could use them for missions. But in order to do that, I needed to work with a lot of dangerous radiation. I probably shouldn’t have rushed myself just to go to the dance.” said Jimmy, looking ashamed. “But anyway, I must have fallen asleep. I don’t know what caused the explosion, but thank Neptune I fell asleep before it. That’s probably the only reason I’m alive. Every muscle in my body was completely relaxed.” There was a moment of silence after those words. Then Jimmy said, “Did any of my inventions survive?”

“Well…no, everything’s gone except the hover car, cause that was outside, and whatever’s in your room is ok.” Cindy said.

“The last eight years of my life, gone up in smoke.” Jimmy said, gloomily. “Wait, what about Goddard? Didn’t he make it?” At the sound of his name, Goddard jumped up onto the bed and licked Jimmy’s face. “Good boy, Goddard! You self-destructed at the last minute didn’t you? Just like I told you! Good boy!” Jimmy rubbed Goddard’s nose. He just then noticed his arms and hands. They were a reddish orange.

“Holy Hinesburg! Look at my skin! he said.

“’Bout time you noticed.” Cindy said. “The doctor said you have some kind of radiation burn.”

“You totally look like the Tomato King from UltraLord episode #582: UltraLord vs. the Mutant Veggies!” Sheen said.

“Hey, I thought tomatoes were fruits.” Carl said.

“Maybe in your twisted reality Carl, but clearly they are veggies.” Sheen said.

“Fruit.” Carl said.

“Veggies.”

“Fruit.”

“Veggies.”

“Fruit.”

“Look Carl, if Ultra lord Inc. says that tomatoes are veggies, then tomatoes are veggies.” Sheen said.

“Guys, cut it out. You could show a little more sympathy ya know. Jimmy’s been through a lot.” Libby said. At that moment the door opened and Jimmy’s parents came back into the room, followed by the doctor from before.

“Good news, sweetie!” Mrs. Neutron said. “Dr. Mangalore says that you can go home tomorrow morning!” Dr. Mangalore smiled toothily.

“That’s right, kiddo!” He walked over to the bed, and pulled a tube of ointment out of his white coat. “And all you have to do is rub this on yourself every night until the burn is all gone.” He gave Jimmy the ointment and turned back to face Jimmy’s parents.

“Would you like to stay here some more, Mr. and Mrs. Neutron? Visiting hours don’t end until two more hours.”

“No thank you, I think we all need to go home and get some much needed rest.” Mrs. Neutron said. Carl yawned widely right on cue. “We all stayed up all night to see if you would wake up.”

“I figured as much.” Jimmy said as Sheen and Carl yawned at the same time. “It’s ok if you go, mom. I’ll be fine. But Goddard can stay, right?”

“Of course, kiddo.” Dr. Mangalore said. “We allow hairless pets to stay with their owners while they’re here. And your pooch is no exception.”

“Good night, Jimmy.” Mrs. Neutron said as everyone but Cindy moved toward the door.

“Um, Mrs. N, can I stay a few more minutes?” she said. Mrs. Neutron looked knowingly down at her.

“All right, dear. But don’t stay long.” She said. She gave Jimmy a kiss on the cheek and walked out the door. There was a silence when she left, as Cindy walked over to Jimmy’s bed and sat in a chair beside him.

“So…” Jimmy said, filling up the silence.

“So…” Cindy repeated. She looked away from him, mustering up the courage to talk to him. “So…I guess you can still go to the ball, huh?”

“I guess so.” Jimmy said. The silence was unbearable. Cindy looked back at Jimmy, and his eyes, like two blue spots in a sea of orange, stared right back at her.

“Oh, I can’t take this! It’s all my fault this happened!” Cindy yelled, and promptly burst into tears. She leaned over in the chair and covered her face. Taken aback at her sudden outburst, Jimmy lay speechless for a few minutes. Finally, he painfully sat up, and taking his discolored hand, lifted up Cindy’s tear streaked face.

“It’s not your fault.” He said. “It’s mine. If I hadn’t tried to work on the suits all night…”

“But I was the one you were rushing for.” Cindy said. “I should have told you that you shouldn’t try to hurry. It’s all my fault.” She blinked hard and a single tear slowly ran down her face. Jimmy wiped it away, saying “Don’t beat yourself up for this. I’m the so-called genius, and I say this is my fault, ok?”

“All right.” Cindy said reluctantly. She started hiccupping, and tears still dripped down her flushed cheeks.

“Good. Goddard, tissue.” Goddard opened his back compartment, and with his robotic hand, gave Jimmy a tissue. Jimmy handed it to Cindy, and said, “Now dry up. You don’t want my mom to see you crying. She makes such a fuss. I’ll see you tomorrow, ok?”

“All right.” Cindy said, unable to say anything else. She got off the chair, taking the tissue, and started to turn away. But before Jimmy could object, she suddenly turned back to him and kissed him on his cheek, exactly where his mom had. She stared at his bewildered face for a second, and then bolted out the door.

Jimmy stared at the open door for a moment, and then lay back down on his pillow, exhausted. He touched his cheek where Cindy had kissed him.

“Well Goddard, I guess I’m not bored anymore.” He said, rubbing Goddard’s nose with his other hand as Goddard sat beside his master’s bed.



whatcha think? B)

[Beks]

Any predictions about what happens? I know you're dying to say something

[rumorgirl1983]

I suspect that in the next chapter, Jimmy and Cindy will be going to the ball. ;)

[Ang]

LOVE IT! And I think the ball will be afterwards, then the next chapter. Thats just what I think.

[ShadRose17]

I LOVE IT!! YAY! As for what'll happen next.... Hm, IDK.

[Beks]

The ball is a little later. There are some other things to do before that. It's only Tuesday, and the ball is on Saturday night.

[rumorgirl1983]

The ball is a little later. There are some other things to do before that. It's only Tuesday, and the ball is on Saturday night.

Oops. :P Got a bit ahead of myself there.

[cynthia_aurora24]

The ball is a little later. There are some other things to do before that. It's only Tuesday, and the ball is on Saturday night.

hmm.. are you writing it like today's Tuesday? so does that mean on Saturday we'll read about the ball, cause it really is on Saturday? or am I just asking stange questions and jumping to obscure conclusions?

[Beks]

Sorry I meant that in the story it's Tuesday, and the ball will be on Saturday night, in the story. I might let you read it before Saturday. But only maybe. :P


BTW, do you like Sheen and Carl's fight over fruits and veggies?

[rumorgirl1983]

I thought it was very in-character and funny. :) You're doing a great job with this fic.

[Beks]

Aww, how sweet! Just for that I'll put up the next chapter. ^_^




Chapter 7: Midnight Intruder


In the middle of the night, Jimmy lay asleep with Goddard at the end of his bed. His side of the hospital was completely quiet, except the buzz of the drink machine in the hall, and the distant chatting of some late night nurses at their desk. Suddenly, a hand shot out of the darkness and shook Jimmy awake.

“Huh?” he said. He squinted in the dark. “Commander Baker?” The director of BTSO was indeed there, though it was hard to see him in the gloom. Only his white suit gave him away.

“Agent Neutron, when we heard what happened, we felt it was necessary to come to you in person to see you well.”

“Well, I appreciate that, but couldn’t you have come a little earlier…or later.” Jimmy said.

“Ah, you know company rules. I was cutting it close even when I was marrying Agent Fusion. Anyway, I came in person to ask forgiveness for making you do the super suit project for us. We should have had our scientists work on it, just as you said. We hope you will forgive us, and continue to be an agent in our organization.”

“It’s ok, commander. I was trying to rush to hard to get it done. No hard feelings.”

“We also want to do our own analyze on your condition. We don’t trust any doctors on our agents except our own.” Commander Baker pulled out what looked like a palm pilot. He pressed a few buttons, and a slit of blue light ran up and down Jimmy’s body. “Ok, that should do it. We will send the analysis back to you when we have, well, analyzed it. Goodbye and goodnight, Agent Neuron. I am glad you will be well soon.”

[Beks]

Not a good chapter, I know, but I needed something to move it along.

[Ang]

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Awesome is a weak word for this fic.