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[J/C AVA]

Part 6 - The Fumbling Ninja and The Chosen One Meet Again

"So, Chosen One, we meet again.."

Yoo Yee sat on a throne-looking chair with two steward maids at his side, as well as ninja guards.

"Alright, Yoo Yee, what are ya possibly up to now?," Libby demanded.

"Ah, Liberty Folfax, How we meet yet again. I hope you didn't forget the last time I captured you."

"Oh I HAVEN'T forgotten alright! And DON'T call me by that name! It's totally beat!"

"HA! I'll call you whatever I want since you three are my prisoners now!"

"You won't win. Jimmy is gonna come save the day like he always does!," Carl said.

"That stubby little man with weak legs and cock roach like skills? HA! He is inferior to my fighting skills and so is his girlfriend!."

They all stare at Yoo Yee awkwardly.

"What? Haven't my public social skills improved? Am I not the life of the party like the ferice Bengal tiger? Or the grace of the Phoenix?"

"Man, this guys jokes is as lame as his dating!"

The three couldn't help but giggle at his comment, which he took offense too.

"You DARE MOCK MY JOKE-TELLING SKILLS?!?"

"Uhhh, Sheen," Carl warned, "I think you made him mad."

"Oh c'mon Carl," Sheen passed, "Why don't I just change his headband while we're at it? I can kick his butt all day."

"GUARDS!"

Two ninja henchman come zipping to their master.

"Take these ingrates to the chamber until I figure out a way to deal with them! PERMANENTLY!!"

"Permanently?," the three said simultaneously as the ninja guards drag them away by their shirt collars.

"And do not worry about your friends! I'll make sure that their last time together are... very memorable! Hahahahaha!"

"Dude, you STILL don't make any sense."

"SHEEN!," Carl and Libby scolded.

"GRRRRR! Just for that, I will BURN you both in my grandma's frying pot which stinks like socks inside rotten tomato soup dipped with mother's milk!"

"Wait! What did he say?!," Libby gasped.

Yoo Yee's maniacal laughter echoes away as the door closes in front of them.

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They then find themselves back in the cell.

"And you just couldn't keep ya mouth shut, couldn't you?!," scolded Libby.

"Well how was I not supposed to know that he's bad at soicalizing?"

"Uh, ok guys, I don't wanna be stuck here in the dark, spooky place for long. I get allergic to darkness."

"Ugh! Can things get any worse?"

Suddenly, the floor underneth Sheen's side opens and he falls in.

"SHEEN!," Carl and Libby screams as Sheen's yells echo away...

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

Great job, as always, Pedro! Oh, I sure hope Sheen's okay!! I really love it, dude!!! I just hope no one gets either severely injured or killed in this fic, cuz THAT'LL turn me off REAL quick.

[RocksmySocks]

“Dude, you STILL don’t make any sense.”

This literally made me laugh out loud.


But...uh...lol....

“Why don’t I just change his yellow dipper while we’re at it? I can beat his yellow butt all day.”

Not sure what a the yellow dipper refers to (diaper maybe?), but overall this sounds awfully racist (which I know wasn't the intention, haha, but I thought I should warn you. He is Asian, after all.) So...yes. I'd change "yellow" references if I were you.



Otherwise, very nice job once again, Pedro. =)

[J/C AVA]

Thanks Katie.

I did change that bit, so it should be fine now, I hope.

Actually I'm not sure if I'm satisfiyed with this one. It was more "rushed on the spot cause I was tired of waiting" kinda moment. So I'm not sure if I posted it in the right way.

But thanks anyways.

[Beks]

LOL some good ol' Sheen shananagins. Good stuff.

I wonder what'll happen to Sheen...

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

Wow, Pedro! For right on the spot, ya did an EXCELLENT job, in my opinion!!!! I hope Sheen will be okay... Epic WIN!!!!!!

[taytay1994]

Totally awesome, Pedro! Melikes. You capture the characters very VERY well, esp. Yoo Yee and SHEEN!! He'd better be alright. Anyway,

[CjIiNmDmYy]

Wow. I mean WOW!!! :0 I so LOVED it. Very impressed Keep up the good work

[J/C AVA]

Hahaha! Thanks alot!

[CjIiNmDmYy]

Hahaha! Thanks alot!

No prob! You're welcome!

[gabBy-gabBz^^]

PEDRO!!! I waited almost forever 'bout this!!! as usual, GOOD JOB!

[Zoey <3]

Great job pedro!

[gabBy-gabBz^^]

Part 6 - The Fumbling Ninja and The Chosen One Meet Again

“So, Chosen One, we meet again…!”

Yoo Yee sat on a throne-looking chair with two steward maids at his side, as well as ninja guards.

“Alright, Yoo Yee, what are ya possibly up to now?” Libby demanded.

“Ah, Liberty Folfax, How we meet yet again. I hope you didn’t forget the last time I captured you.”

“Oh I HAVEN’T forgotten alright! And DON’T call me by that name! It’s totally beat!”

“HA! I’ll call you whatever I want since you three are my prisoners now!”

“You won’t win. Jimmy is gonna come save the day like he always does!” Carl said.

“That stubby little man with weak legs and cock roach like skills? HA! He is inferior to my fighting skills and so is his girlfriend!”

They all stare at Yoo Yee awkwardly.

“What? Haven't my public social skills improved? Am I not the life of the party like the ferice Bengal tiger? Or the grace of the Phoenix?"

“Man, this guys jokes is as lame as his dating!”

The three couldn’t help but giggle at his comment, which he took offense too.

“You DARE MOCK MY JOKE-TELLING SKILLS?!? “

“Uhhh, Sheen,” Carl warned, “I think you made him mad.”

“Oh c’mon Carl,” Sheen passed, “Why don’t I just change his headband while we’re at it? I can kick his butt all day.”

“GUARDS!”

Two ninja henchman come zipping to their master.

“Take these ingrates to the chamber until I figure out a way to deal with them! PERMANENTLY!!”

“Permanently?” the three said simultaneously as the ninja guards drag them away by their shirt collars.

“And do not worry about your friends! I’ll make sure that their last time together are… very memorable! Hahahahaha!”

“Dude, you STILL don’t make any sense.”

“SHEEN!” Carl and Libby scolded.

“GRRRRR! Just for that, I will BURN you both in my grandma’s frying pot which stinks like socks inside rotten tomato soup dipped with mother’s milk!”

“Wait! What did he say?!” Libby gasped.

Yoo Yee’s maniacal laughter echoes away as the door closes in front of them.

================================================================

They then find themselves back in the cell.

"And you just couldn't keep ya mouth shut, couldn't you?!," scolded Libby.

"Well how was I not supposed to know that he's bad at soicalizing?"

"Uh, ok guys, I don't wanna be stuck here in the dark, spooky place for long. I get allergic to darkness."

"Ugh! Can things get any worse?"

Suddenly, the floor underneth Sheen's side opens and he falls in.

"SHEEN!," Carl and Libby screams as Sheen's yells echo away...

WTH?!? What do those wierd-looking letters mean?

[J/C AVA]

Oh gosh! -headdesks- I better start fixing.

[J/C AVA]

Ok, FIXED IT!

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

Sweet!

[J/C AVA]

*Looks at the many posts*

OH MY!!

77 posts and this fic isn't even up to Part 10!!

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

lol Whoa!!

[sam-ely-ember]

Okay, I liked it, A LOT .w.
Good job! I want to read more ^-^

(yay, new page! 8D)

[MorganM]

this is awezom. ur da master uv fanfictiion.