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[Hugh]

AWK! Hugh liked your fanfic better than mine.

'Ey, everyone's taking what I said the wrong way! Oh, well, I s'pose it can't be helped.

[Beks]

I like what you said... :P

[Beks]

ok, new chapter! Enjoy!


Chapter 2: Bacon and Secrets

"You seem very happy today, sir." Charles the holographic butler said. "May I ask why?"

"Oh, I'm just thinking about how lucky I've been." Carl said. "I mean, I'm an award winning llama breeder, I'm living in a big house, and I'm married to the girl of my dreams." He sighed. "Who would have thought this would be my life?"

"Yes, I agree sir. Shall I get you a jumpsuit for today?" The hologram gestured around the huge closet.

"Oh, sure Charles, um...how 'bout the orange one with the little blue llama on the left shoulder. It makes me feel like one of those Star Trek people." When Carl had doned his formfitting attire, he stepped back into the bedroom to find Elkie sitting up in bed, rubbing her beautiful eyes. Even half asleep, she was breathtaking.

"Morning Elkie. Feeling better today?" Carl asked. Elkie streched and said, "Much better, Carl." She got up and pecked him on the cheek. "See you downstairs." she said, walking towards the closet, one of the straps of her pale blue nightgown falling carelessly off her shoulder.

Carl walked downstairs and went into the spacious, modern kitchen. The delicious smell of bacon had carried him into the room, and sure enough, there was a llama standing in front of the stove. It looked up at the sound of Carl's squeeky shoes.

"Hi Kevin." Carl said to it. "What are you doing up so early?"

"Morning Carl." the llama named Kevin said. "I took the liberty of cooking breakfast, so you'll have time to help me with something today." Carl came up to the llama, and stroked his long white coat in a friendly manner.

"Thanks, buddy. What would I do without ya?" he said. Kevin looked up at Carl, a smirk on his furry face.

"You would have stumbled big time on that interview the other day. It was a good thing I was there to do most of the tallking." Carl laughed and said, "Hey, it's not my fault public speaking still makes me queasy."

"Oh, by the way," Kevin said. "I used the last of the eggs to make omletes for you and Elkie. I'll get Steve to go grocery shopping later."

"That's fine. Here, I'll help." Carl said, picking up a fork and attempting to flip the bacon, but instead just spraying hot bacon juice everywhere.

"Ah! My skin! I'm melting!" he screamed, holding his arm and dropping to his knees melodramatically. Kevin laughed, rolling his eyes.

"Carl, my friend, I think you should stick to llamas, and leave your llamas to make the bacon."

Meanwhile, upstairs, as soon as Elkie had closed the closet door behind her, she leaned against it, closed her eyes, and sighed sadly. Charles once again appeared in the room.

"Good morning Mrs. Weezer. Are you feeling better now?" he asked. Elkie opened her eyes and looked at the hologram.

"Yes, I am better," she said. She sighed again, looking away.

"You haven't told him yet, have you miss?" Charles said, sensing her meloncholy. Elkie shamefully lowered her head. "No, I have not." she said quietly. Charles took a step forward.

"You need to tell him soon miss, or he'll figure it out on his own."

"I know...Why can not you do it?" Elkie said. Charles shook his head.

"I'm afraid that's not my place, miss. But rest assured, you'll find the right time to tell him." Elkie looked at her softly glowing skin in the mirror.

"I hope you are right, Charles."




oooo, a little suspense! :ph43r:

[Mara=^.^=]

AWESOME chapter!

Brilliant job incorporating the interview shown on The Tomorrow Boys into this chapter. Referencing stuff on the show is one of my fave techniques in fanfics!

I was really impressed by this line: "...one of the straps of her pale blue nightgown falling carelessly off her shoulder". It's such a small detail, but it adds such substance to the story. ^_^

And Yay for suspense!

~*Mara*~ = ^.^ =

[CraazyOne]

*masculine TV announcer voice* Once again, Writer Woman saves the day!!!!

:blink: I didn't think I could do that kind of voice...

Anyway, Beks, that was beautiful!!!!

Hehe, I loved the part with Carl and the bacon grease...Classic Carl, there! It's great throwing in that little bit of humor...

Love the supsense, too! Ooooh... I had a guess and now I'm not quite so sure... Anyway, I'm not going to say anything here and spoil everything for your other readers. But....

PLEASE POST THE NEXT CHAPTER SOON...

~Rach~

[J/C AVA]

Great job Beks. It was AWESOME!!!!!! I loved the suspense in the end. Keep it up!!! :thumbsup:

[Beks]

thanks guys! You rock!

So, anyone wanna take a guess on what Elkie's talking about?

[ssj4majuub]

I thinks some kinda disease.

Great Chapter!

[Chica_Andromeda]

Ooh, Beks!! I lurve it!! Ayy, I loved all the detail... < 3 Beautiful job! ^_^

Hehe, I think I have a guess about Elke... ;) But I'm probably wrong. xD

[Beks]

if you want to take a guess, just PM me.

[rumorgirl1983]

ok, new chapter! Enjoy!


Chapter 2: Bacon and Secrets

"You seem very happy today, sir." Charles the holographic butler said. "May I ask why?"

"Oh, I'm just thinking about how lucky I've been." Carl said. "I mean, I'm an award winning llama breeder, I'm living in a big house, and I'm married to the girl of my dreams." He sighed. "Who would have thought this would be my life?"

"Yes, I agree sir. Shall I get you a jumpsuit for today?" The hologram gestured around the huge closet.

"Oh, sure Charles, um...how 'bout the orange one with the little blue llama on the left shoulder. It makes me feel like one of those Star Trek people." When Carl had doned his formfitting attire, he stepped back into the bedroom to find Elkie sitting up in bed, rubbing her beautiful eyes. Even half asleep, she was breathtaking.

"Morning Elkie. Feeling better today?" Carl asked. Elkie streched and said, "Much better, Carl." She got up and pecked him on the cheek. "See you downstairs." she said, walking towards the closet, one of the straps of her pale blue nightgown falling carelessly off her shoulder.

Carl walked downstairs and went into the spacious, modern kitchen. The delicious smell of bacon had carried him into the room, and sure enough, there was a llama standing in front of the stove. It looked up at the sound of Carl's squeeky shoes.

"Hi Kevin." Carl said to it. "What are you doing up so early?"

"Morning Carl." the llama named Kevin said. "I took the liberty of cooking breakfast, so you'll have time to help me with something today." Carl came up to the llama, and stroked his long white coat in a friendly manner.

"Thanks, buddy. What would I do without ya?" he said. Kevin looked up at Carl, a smirk on his furry face.

"You would have stumbled big time on that interview the other day. It was a good thing I was there to do most of the tallking." Carl laughed and said, "Hey, it's not my fault public speaking still makes me queasy."

"Oh, by the way," Kevin said. "I used the last of the eggs to make omletes for you and Elkie. I'll get Steve to go grocery shopping later."

"That's fine. Here, I'll help." Carl said, picking up a fork and attempting to flip the bacon, but instead just spraying hot bacon juice everywhere.

"Ah! My skin! I'm melting!" he screamed, holding his arm and dropping to his knees melodramatically. Kevin laughed, rolling his eyes.

"Carl, my friend, I think you should stick to llamas, and leave your llamas to make the bacon."

Meanwhile, upstairs, as soon as Elkie had closed the closet door behind her, she leaned against it, closed her eyes, and sighed sadly. Charles once again appeared in the room.

"Good morning Mrs. Weezer. Are you feeling better now?" he asked. Elkie opened her eyes and looked at the hologram.

"Yes, I am better." she said. She sighed again, looking away.

"You haven't told him yet, have you miss?" Charles said, sensing her meloncholy. Elkie shamefully lowered her head. "No, I have not." she said quietly. Charles took a step forward.

"You need to tell him soon miss, or he'll figure it out on his own."

"I know...Why can not you do it?" Elkie said. Charles shook his head.

"I'm afraid that's not my place, miss. But rest assured, you'll find the right time to tell him." Elkie looked at her softly glowing skin in the mirror.

"I hope you are right, Charles."




oooo, a little suspense!  :ph43r:

*waves* Hello, Writer Woman. ;)

Thanks for the PM! I just saw the new chapter. It's pure genius. :D And the talking llama was pretty cool--you just gotta love him.

Update when you can. I have a feeling I may know what Elke's secret might be. ^^

[AnDrEa]

The people voted, or at least you guys did, and you chose Letters to Sweden as my next spectacular fanfic. For those of you that didn't vote, first of all shame on you, and second, here's what the fanfic's about:

In the future of Retroville, Carl is married to Elkie, and they live on a llama ranch outside of town. When going through the attic, Carl finds a box of letters between him and Elkie when they were just pen pals. They look through them together, tracing back to their early romance.

So here's what you asked for: Letters to Sweden!

Chapter One: Luckiest Man on Earth

So, good? bad? horrible? You tell me, cause you guys wanted this in the first place!

(this is the third time I try to leave u a comment, dang you computer!)
OMG!! I didn't vote either, but the sinopsis was great I know I will love this story!!!
that first chapter was superb!!! those descriptions and everything!! it really felt as if you were in that scene! you really were born to do this! if that was the first chapter I can't imagine how the rest of the story would be!
but I don't want to imagine, i want to read it! so please update as soon as possible! this story is definetely worth reading!


o:) Andre o:)

[AnDrEa]

ok, new chapter! Enjoy!


Chapter 2: Bacon and Secrets

""Hi Kevin." Carl said to it. "What are you doing up so early?"

"Morning Carl." the llama named Kevin said. "I took the liberty of cooking breakfast, so you'll have time to help me with something today." Carl came up to the llama, and stroked his long white coat in a friendly manner.

"Thanks, buddy. What would I do without ya?" he said. Kevin looked up at Carl, a smirk on his furry face.

"You would have stumbled big time on that interview the other day. It was a good thing I was there to do most of the tallking." Carl laughed and said, "Hey, it's not my fault public speaking still makes me queasy."
"You haven't told him yet, have you miss?" Charles said, sensing her meloncholy. Elkie shamefully lowered her head. "No, I have not." she said quietly. Charles took a step forward.

"You need to tell him soon miss, or he'll figure it out on his own."

"I know...Why can not you do it?" Elkie said. Charles shook his head.

oh this chapter was amazing! I loved the part where carl started talking to the llama and he talked anout the interview in the tomorrow boys! that was super!!!! oh what's that mysterious secret, I also have my guess, but I will probably be wrong, so I won't mind telling u lol keep writing!!! I'll keep reading!!! thanks for writing!


o:) Andre o:)

[Beks]

thanks!!! ^_^

[sunnstar]

**sigh** Only YOU can get me to read a Carl/Elke fic, Bekz. (Oh and by the way it's "Elke" not "Elkie." :D)

BUT THAT WAS AWESOME. And hilarious! =) Just one thing, tho, besides the Elke spelling: You said ""Yes, I am better." she said." It should be ""Yes, I am better," she said." A comma has to go inside the quotes if you're continuing the sentence.

BUT AWESOME BESIDES THAT.

And I TOTALLY KNOW WHAT THE SECRET IS. WITHOUT A DOUBT FOR SURE DEFINITELY!! ^_^

[Beks]

so PM me and find out if you're right! :rolleyes: And thanks for the tip, I'll fix the coma thing, but I'm still going to stick to Elkie, cause to me Elke sounds like Elk with one of those old fashion silent e's.

and thanks for the praise! ^_^


Stay bubbly! :rock:

[Beks]

*heroic pose* why, thank you!

[AnDrEa]

BUT THAT WAS AWESOME. And hilarious! =) Just one thing, tho, besides the Elke spelling: You said ""Yes, I am better." she said." It should be ""Yes, I am better," she said." A comma has to go inside the quotes if you're continuing the sentence.

lol I love when you check grammar! I always learn something new!!!


o:) Andre o:)

[sunnstar]

XD Thanks! It's kind of a habit that I will never be able to break. XD