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#781 Katia11

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Posted 06 September 2025 - 11:32 PM

It's the kind of ruthless pragmatism you need when you're a disadvantaged member of society (although you are correct in surmising that these two really do love each other).

 

 

faiiirrrr

 

 

Oh yeah, this stanza is a banger. I knew it the moment is sprang forth from my mind, fully formed and perfect.

 

 

IT IS PERFECT. IT IS INFURIATING. (not really though) 

 

 

I wanted this chapter to communicate just how much Tex is adopting the narrative Libby has created for her. Like, it started as a lie, but it's fast becoming truth. If it walks like a bodyguard, and quacks like a bodyguard, it really is a bodyguard.

 

Oh, yes. I remember you saying this now. LOL i just get this vivid image in my mind of Tex quacking. But more seriously, I can see what you are saying!

 

 

You're going to laugh, but the whole time I was writing that paragraph, I was envisioning Addy Walker's older brother from the American Girl: Addy series. He fought as a soldier in the Union Army and was wounded in combat, but survived and went on to reunite with his family.

 

 

Why on earth would I laugh? I think that is fantastic. 

 

One of those little tongue-in-cheek references to the show. If you recall, in Jimmy for President, Cindy goes around bribing people to vote for Libby as class president. This also the origin of the "Ike's Party" joke that came up recently, and will come up again next chapter.

 

*facepalms* oh my gosh. DUH. I am literally so stupid. Ugh. I really need to do a re-watch of this darn show. 

 

The Libby & Tex relationship IS so healthy and it's wonderful. It makes my heart very happy. :) 

 

"Like a flock of polite and stately vultures, the couples traveled clockwise in a circle, repeating this refrain." BIRD reference! (sorry- forgot to point this out the first time around.. and it's tradition so that needed to be fixed!!)


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Posted 07 September 2025 - 12:11 AM

Why on earth would I laugh? I think that is fantastic.

 

Because it ranks highly on the list of improbable crossovers >.<

 

I really need to do a re-watch of this darn show.

 

Yeaaaahhhh, me too. I haven't seen it in 16 years (although on my 30th birthday, I did re-watch the movie with my cousin).

 

 I feel so bad. I did NOT think you would take my suggestion so seriously. I have caused you this pain. :S BUT it's so good!!!

 

Hey man. A good idea is a good idea, regardless of how much of a pain-in-the-ass it is to write. 

 

 

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(not the full thing. The song in its entirety clocks in at 4+ minutes)

 

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Posted 07 September 2025 - 12:23 AM

"Because it ranks highly on the list of improbable crossovers." *shrugs* that may be the case, but inspiration is inspiration, and I love it :)
 
I just always put off watching the show. It's more fun if you have someone to do it with. I VERY recently re-watched the original movie though. That was fun!
 
"Hey man. A good idea is a good idea, regardless of how much of a pain-in-the-ass it is to write." *shifts uncomfortably* if you say so :)

 

Oh yeah! This video is great. Those bonnets though. They are just makin' me giggle. 


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Posted 11 September 2025 - 04:03 AM

Illustration for previous chapter

 

 

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Posted 11 September 2025 - 05:44 AM

Truly amazing, as always, girl! Love it! ^_^ :thumbsup: ;)
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Posted 11 September 2025 - 06:10 AM

Absolutely gorgeous!
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Posted 11 September 2025 - 05:29 PM

Wow, that's awesome!


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Posted 25 September 2025 - 10:16 PM

This chapter isn't perfect, but I could really use some feedback, so I think I'll post it now and patch up the weak spots later.

 

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When Tex returned to the common area after placating her bladder, she found that Wendell had swapped his violin for a Spanish guitar. It was striking, with a bone-white body, scarlet tuning pegs, and a rose-encrusted sugar skull painted on the base. He strummed it feverishly, pearls of sweat shining on his brow. Couples do-si-doed like imps in front of him.

 

The hell? How many cursed instruments does this man have? she thought.

 

Tex wanted no part of it. She wandered off in the direction of the tables. It had been some time since she’d parted ways with Mr. Neutron, and the caffeine trough seemed like a logical place to chance upon him now. Her hunch paid off. She discovered him sitting beside a stack of dirty cups, glowering at the dance floor like a cartoon villain. She flopped down next to him.

 

“What crawled up your ass and died?” she asked.

 

He stuck up his nose and crossed his arms. “None of your business, Vortex. Go away.”

 

“Ehh. I just sat down.”

 

“So? Get up again.”

 

She yawned and glanced over at the crowd of revelers. It did not take her long to identify the source of his consternation. At the far end of the procession, she spotted Betty, smiling and chatting as she threaded through the line.

 

Oh, you have got to be kidding me.

 

“Are you pissy because the church mouse is dancing with someone else?” she asked. 

 

When he didn’t answer, she leaned over and scrutinized his face. He responded by angling even further away, until he was nearly falling out of his chair.

 

“Oh, for the love of – you are, aren’t you? God, that is just sad.”

 

“She’s dancing with Butch!” he burst out, throwing his hands in the air. “Butch! Of all the men in town to pick. I’d be happy for her if she was up there with Ike, or Wendell, or…anyone else, really, but Butch? He’s done nothing but make an absolute fool of himself, day in and day out, since the moment he arrived. It’s unconscionable.”

 

Tex shrugged, picking at her teeth. “I’m sure she’s just trying to ‘save a wayward soul’, or some such nonsense.”

 

“Fat chance. Betty never dances – at least, not with any of the men. She says it's 'immoral' for a married woman to be dancing with someone other than her husband.”

 

“Wow,” drawled Tex. “Self-righteous, and a Jeremiah. You sure know how to pick ‘em, Sheriff.”

 

He glared at her. “What would you know? It’s not like you’re an authority on the subject of dancing etiquette.”

 

“Pfft. And you are?”

 

“More than you,” he shot back.

 

Tex might have been angry with him, had he not looked so ridiculous sitting there, scowling like a curmudgeon. Hot temper or no, in the face of rank absurdity, fury lost its bite. She bumped her shoulder against his.

 

I just did the Varsouvienne,” she bragged.

 

He rotated to face her. “Miss Folfax?”

 

“Mm-hmm. It’s too bad you missed it. We couldn’t decide which one of us was supposed to be the man, and then she regaled me with the origin story of her sapphire ring.”

 

“The poop ring?”

 

Vindication.

 

“The Varsouvienne’s all right,” he continued. “A little too stilted for my tastes, but all right. Trouble is, it reminds me of all those tedious society dances I attended back in Boston.”

 

“Ah, yes,” she shot back sarcastically, “that most dreadful of events: a bunch of hoity-toity women lining up to curtsy for you.”

 

He made a face. “The women were the worst part. All that fawning, and flattery. Not a single person there knew how to be sincere. I was a walking, talking diamond ring to be obtained by any means, and I detested every minute of it.”

 

“Hmm.” Tex examined her nails. “It’s a shame those women never got to know you. I think they would have been entranced by your…eloquent carpentry lessons.”

 

“Oh, shut up.”

 

She bumped him a second time, grinning, and he took off his hat and whacked her with it.

 

“Sheriff!” she cried, feigning outrage. “That’s my woodworkin’ arm!”

 

He jumped to his feet, brandishing his hat, and Tex knew she was in trouble. Quick as a flash, she dove out of range.

 

“Surely there’s at least one dance you enjoy,” she said, from her new seat on the ground. He darted toward her, and she dodged left, circling round the chair.

 

“Come here!” he shouted.

 

“The waltz?” she suggested. He tried to smack her again. “The grand march?” He took another swipe.

 

She reversed directions, and he tried to grab her by the coat. He missed by an inch. He stumbled, and she threw her body toward him and rolled across his back. Nimble as a cat, she was already running when her feet hit the ground on the other side. She took off into the dark.

 

“Catch me if you can!” she called.

 

“You are such an asshole!” he laughed, and gave chase.

 

As the firelight receded, Tex reduced her speed, and Mr. Neutron caught up to her. He tugged her ponytail, and she rewarded him with a delighted squeak. The pair matched strides beneath the canopy of starlight. Out here, the universe was boundless – anything might happen. The outlaw gazed up at the sky, luxuriating in the tranquil air.

 

They chatted amiably, rehashing the day’s events as they meandered. Each took solace in the other’s company: his bad mood dissipated, and her fretful mania began to ebb away. She kicked a pebble at him, and he nudged it back; jokes and gibes flowed freely. The night had lost its fangs.

 

Eventually, discussion turned to Bolbi’s injury, and Tex shared what she’d learned about Ignishka’s medical credentials. The revelation stopped the Sheriff in his tracks.

 

“You actually got her to speak to you?” He was gobsmacked. “Are you a sorcerer? I've had Elke offer every enticement, every assurance – Ignishka still won’t answer any of my questions. She hates me.”

 

His failure only sweetened her triumph. “It’s because I’m such a people person,” she gloated, leaning against his chest. “My mystique…my allure…they make me impossible to resist. My fact-finding prowess is unparalleled.”

 

He looped an arm around her waist, and it felt like such a natural part of the conversation that Tex barely even noticed.

 

“Unparalleled…and probably illegal,” he muttered.

 

“So arrest me, Sheriff,” she vamped. “I’m completely helpless.”

 

“Actually…I think I’d like to join you in your lawlessness. I want results, and your approach appears to yield them.”

 

She beamed up at him. “Truly?”

 

“Maybe,” he shrugged. “Who knows? I can’t be trusted to tell the truth anymore, now that I’m a villain.”

 

Finally. At long last, my diabolical plans have come to fruition – let me savor your corruption like the fine wine that it is.”

 

He put his other arm around her, and she turned to fully face him. “Don’t give yourself too much credit,” he said. “Perhaps I’ve just grown tired of this endless, suffocating propriety. Perhaps the low road is becoming increasingly appealing.”

 

“How low are we talkin’?”

 

Subterranean.”

 

“Heh heh,” she exulted, playing with his lapels.

 

He looked her over. “You know,” he remarked, “there is one dance I enjoy. Since you asked.”

 

“Oh?”

 

“Sheen taught it to us,” he continued. “Last summer, at Ike’s party. Something he picked up in Mexico – the Remolino de Polvo. The Dust Devil.

 

“Oooh. Sounds daring.”

 

“It is. It’s the antithesis of all those pompous, dreary shuffle-steps my parents forced upon me.”

 

“Can you show it to me?”

 

He dithered for a second. “Well…if I’m being completely honest, I was exceedingly drunk when I learned it, so I can’t remember all of the steps precisely. But I’ve retained the gist of it, if you’re interested.”

 

“So you have no idea what you’re doing,” she said.

 

“Not true. Wrap your arms around my neck.”

 

Tex blinked. “What?”

 

“That’s how it starts. Wrap your arms around my neck. And do it like you mean it, or this won’t be any fun.”

 

She squinted at him suspiciously. “I don’t know…”

 

“Oh, for heaven’s sake…your hands are already on my chest. Just move them upward.

 

“Fine,” she relented. “Now what?”

 

He slid his palms down her sides, shifting his grip from her waist to her hips. She almost jumped.

 

“Whoa,” she blurted. “That is very close to…the revolvers.”

 

“Stop being so dramatic. Let me try to remember how this goes. It’s tricky without the proper music.”

 

Tex clung to him distractedly while he ruminated. A tiny sun burned within him; it warmed her cool skin.

 

“So we go back and forth,” he muttered to himself. “One-two-three, pause, five-six-seven, pause. And there are four counts of eight in a row...”

 

“Yawn,” she said. “Can we get a move on, please? I don’t care if it’s perfect – just improvise the parts you can’t recall.”

 

“All right,” he warned, “but it’s not going to be very good.” He tapped her right foot with his left. “Ready?”

 

He stepped forward, and she automatically stepped back, retreating from his abrupt advance. He took another step forward, then another. She dodged away as he pressed toward her, and after several long strides, he paused. Tex glanced at the ground, trying to work out what he was doing with his feet. Before she could regain her equilibrium, he reversed direction. He backtracked, hauling her along in his wake, and she grabbed her hat to keep it from falling off.

 

“Slow down,” she urged. “I can’t see a damn thing, and you’re dragging me all over.”

 

“Forget your eyes. Pay attention to my body.”

 

She took his advice. After a series of halting, uneven paces, they got a sense for each other’s rhythm, and things started falling into place. He was measured and steady, she was fleet-footed and evasive. When he advanced, she withdrew; when he retreated, she pursued. Back and forth, push and pull. Once she understood the dynamic, it was easy to follow his lead.

 

“There you go!” he encouraged. “You’re getting the hang of it. Back-two-three. Now add some oscillation to your hips!”

 

Tex looked down at his pelvis, absolutely shocked. It took a moment for the truth to register.

 

My God, she realized. Is this…a scoundrel’s dance?

 

“What are you doing?” she burst out.

 

“Dancing, Vortex,” he said calmly. “I move my feet, and you move yours. Shall we review any other basic concepts?”

 

She was too stunned to argue with him. Where would she even begin?

 

“Isn’t this a bit…scandalous for you, Sheriff?” she hinted, as his leg brushed against hers. “I mean, there’s a lot of hip-twisting happening right now.”

 

“It’s not scandalous. It just comes from a different culture, with different proscriptions governing deportment. If Sheen were here, he’d tell you all about it.”

 

“Right…because Sheen’s a reliable source of information on the subject of ‘deportment’.”

 

“You’re being close-minded,” he huffed. “The Remolino de Polvo is perfectly respectable. It’s all the rage in The Port of Mazatlán.”

 

I’m sure it is, she thought. In the brothels. Whatever…I guess we’re doing this.

 

“Uh-huh,” she drawled, as her hips swayed in time with his. “So what you’re saying is, you’re not a shameless lech – you’re just a man of culture.”

 

“Exactly. Culture, sophistication, intelligence…”

 

“Modesty,” she added.

 

“Modesty. Now you’re getting it. Come on, Vortex...faster!”

 

He stepped away and twirled her, then yanked her back, and Tex couldn’t help it – she laughed. How could she not? Here they were, on the edge of the world, treating this racy little number like it was a genteel promenade. It didn’t matter who he was, or who she was, or what Sword of Damocles hung above their heads. The night was spinning – fire and music and sweat and pumping blood, all around her, all within her.

 

“I have to admit,” she said, adjusting her grip, “I did not think you had this in you. You continue to surprise me.”

 

“What’s this?” He sniffed the air. “Do I detect the scent of…praise wafting in my direction?”

 

She sighed. “Here we go.”

 

“Keep the compliments coming, my sweet,” he exhorted. “Every time you flatter me, I siphon away a little more of your power. Soon I’ll be unstoppable.”

 

“Why did I open my big mouth? Why?”

 

“Don’t be like that. Here, I’ll return the favor: now that you’ve deloused yourself, you’re surprisingly easy on the eyes.”

 

Tex couldn’t believe her ears. “Are you flirting with me?”

 

“No. I’m offering positive reinforcement. An experiment, aimed at modifying your behavior, so you’ll continue bathing regularly.”

 

She shook her head. “Only you could turn a compliment into an insult with such weaponized efficiency.”

 

“Many talents,” he reiterated. “Your turn.”

 

My turn?”

 

He nudged her slightly. “Your turn. Lay one on me.”

 

“Fine,” she puffed. “How about this: you’re a serviceable teacher, when you aren’t gargling your foot. I learned a lot today.”

 

“I could say the same about you.”

 

He spun her. When they came together again, he slowed their pace, and she effortlessly flowed into the new rhythm.

 

“That doesn’t count as yours,” she said. “Give me a new one.”

 

“Okay.” He paused, mulling it over. “You remind me of a cat.”

 

“What?” she protested. “How is that a compliment? You’re a dog person.”

 

“Not true. I like both kinds of pets.”

 

This rankled her, and she tried to wriggle away from him, but he held her fast.

 

“Ah. So that’s what I am to you,” she struggled. “A pet. More insults.”

 

“Not so,” he insisted, as he fought to pull her closer. “You’re more like…a feral cat that showed up on my doorstep. I figure, if I keep feeding you scraps, you’re bound to warm up to me eventually. You might even let me scratch you behind the ears.”

 

Tex’s hair stood on end. She stopped battling him.

 

“I don’t know,” she evaded. “Food is only so tempting, and I have very sharp claws.”

 

“Perhaps some toys, then,” he offered. “Let’s see: a ball of yarn. A legal tome for you to shred. A frankly irresponsible quantity of catnip.”

 

Tex laughed. “A decent start,” she said, “but still not good enough.”

 

“All right. How about this: boxes. All of them.”

 

“............You have my attention. Go on.”

 

He gave her another spin. “You can have the run of the house,” he continued. “The rug in front of the fireplace is yours, naturally. The desk…the windowsill…the rocking chair, too, whenever I’m not using it.”

 

Tex warmed to the theme.

 

“Maybe I’ll sit on your lap,” she flirted. “In the evenings, when it’s just the two of us.”

 

He smirked. “Maybe you will.”

 

The hair at the nape of his neck was feather-soft. Without meaning to, she began to play with it. He bumped up against her.

 

“Where will I sleep?” she asked him coyly. “Somewhere cozy, I hope…say, at the foot of your bed?”

 

“Nope. Cat basket on the floor. You’re not allowed on the bed; you’ll shed all over the comforter.”

 

“What?!” she cried, incensed.

 

He pretended to reconsider. “Unless, of course, you’re one of those hairless cats…want me to check and find out?”

 

She almost shoved him. He laughed at her.

 

“I don’t want to be a cat anymore,” she pouted.

 

“Then what do you want to be, Deputy? The choice is up to you.”

 

I want to be yours, she thought.

 

The intrusive impulse shocked Tex so thoroughly that she halted mid-step, and he blundered into her. It did not help matters.

 

“Crisis of conscience, Vortex?” he inquired. “Shall I provide you with some counsel?”

 

“No, I…I think we should…” she stammered helplessly. All at once, she was under siege. The movement of his hips. The low, engaging tenor of his voice. The subtle dampness of his skin beneath her touch. They were a hair’s breadth away from something far more intimate, and she realized how easy it would be to allow him that transgression. She tried to withdraw, but he followed.

 

Help me, she thought, but there were no faeries left to bargain with. For better or for worse, the night belonged to her.

 

“It’s never too late to switch careers,” he pointed out. “You have the aptitude for it.”

 

Tex floundered. He reversed their direction. As he pulled her toward him, his fingers tugged at the place where her waistband met her shirt. She began to feel lightheaded.

 

“I think we should stop,” she said.

 

He trotted to a halt, and so did she. They were almost chest-to-chest on a small ridge.

 

“What’s the matter?” he asked, panting.

 

She took a second to compose herself, and as soon as she did, she regretted adjourning prematurely. She seized on the first lie she could muster.

 

“Pebble in my boot. Hold on a second.”

 

It was a dubious excuse, but he accepted it. She freed herself from his embrace and fished around for the nonexistent rock. When she straightened, the moonlight fell upon them both, and she caught him looking at her in a way that both thrilled and terrified her. It dawned on Tex how spectacularly careless she had been. Boundary after boundary had been crossed, and she had not even seen it.

 

“Ready for another round?” He offered her his hand.

 

Tex could not take back her error, nor could she intuit the scope of his intentions. All she could do was rise to meet the moment, now that it was here, and she refused to sully herself with cowardice. She strode toward him, and he confidently pulled her back into his arms. The lion’s den was warm, and terribly inviting.

 

“I think I remembered more of the steps,” he told her. “Some criss-crosses, and a turning sequence.”

 

She perused his face. It would be foolish to lie to herself by pretending that he was unappealing. He was handsome enough, in his way, but that wasn’t what enticed her. It was the paradox that he presented. He was familiar; he was safe. He was also neither of those things.

 

All my money for your thoughts, she mused.

 

“Can I improvise a little?” she asked.

 

“I don’t see why not. But mind your feet – I’ll be adding in more spins.”

 

He nudged her backward, and she wordlessly began her retreat. Again, they found their rhythm easily. He guided her through the new steps – they covered much more ground this time. She whirled, he attended her. Their soles skidded on the increasingly rough terrain; clouds spiraled underfoot and overhead. Tex was miles past the point of exhaustion, but she pressed on anyway, diving headlong into recklessness.

 

“Hey now,” he protested, as she began to wrestle with him for control, “don’t start that. I can’t do the Remolino de Polvo in reverse.”

 

“I can. Sounds like a skill issue.”

 

“Just dance the part you’re meant to dance, Vortex. It’s bad form to steal the lead.”

 

“So fight me for it, lawman,” she goaded.

 

His fingers tightened around her swaying hips. “You’re always like this,” he complained. “You’re the most incorrigible person I’ve ever met.”

 

“So why do you keep grinding up against me, then? Don’t act like you don’t know what you’re doing.”

 

He considered. “To impress you,” he suggested.

 

“Unlikely,” she shot back. “Try again.”

 

“Because you're dangerous,” he said, and that was probably the truth.

 

“Is that what you’re getting out of this?” she accused. “Some kind of cheap thrill?”

 

“What? No. What on earth gave you that idea?”

 

Bitterness filled her. “You just admitted it.”

 

“No I didn’t!”

 

“A bit of fun with the soiled dove away from prying eyes – that’s all men ever want from me.”

 

“Don’t you dare lump me in with those degenerates!” He spun her forcefully, moved, and spun her again. Gravel went flying. “That kind of callousness disgusts me. Point me toward anyone who treats you like that, and I’ll string them up by their ankles.”

 

It took her a second to regain her balance. I’ve insulted him grievously, she thought. Why do I keep insulting him?

 

“I don’t need you to take care of me,” she bristled, even though she yearned for him to shield her.

 

He rolled his eyes and dragged her closer. “Ugh. For the love of God, woman, stop trying to pick a fight with me. I’m not going to let you push me away.”

 

Tex felt like she was drowning in the mire of her psyche. In these uncharted waters, warring leviathans battled for dominance: desire, hope, insecurity, fear. His words offered clarity, but they also came too late to forestall her downward spiral. The urge to sabotage their shared connection was almost overwhelming.

 

Spurn him, screamed fear. Strike first, so he can’t strike at all.

 

The outlaw gritted her teeth to keep from lashing out. It was no small task to master such a ruinous compulsion, and she could not devote her full attention to it. Things were happening too quickly for her to process. She had to slow the onslaught. She disengaged and circled around him.

 

“What do you mean by ‘dangerous’?” she asked. She could not let it go.

 

“A poor choice of words. I meant to flatter you, not denigrate you. I’m sorry if I caused offense.”

 

Her thoughts careened in a dozen different directions. Was it just a thoughtless comment, then? She could not trust her own judgment.

 

“Do you have a taste for danger, Sheriff? For dangerous women?”

 

She returned to his embrace, and his palm slipped onto the small of her back. It galled her that he could touch her with such casual insouciance.

 

What does he want from me? she thought. The ambiguity was agonizing.

 

“I Plead the Fifth,” he said.

 

Tex lost control, however briefly; she looked down at his body as they moved. It was a grave mistake. She imagined him pushing her down onto the bed, then climbing on top of her – his mouth on her neck, his hands in her hair, her own startled breathlessness. She would accept him, naturally. Even if he could never love her.

 

She slammed her eyes shut. It was an ugly truth to learn about herself – that she would consent to exploitation, if it supplied the illusion of care. No sooner had she come to this conclusion than another, likelier outcome presented itself: outright rejection. It occurred to her in a flash of paranoia that if she did not affirm her partiality, he might cut his losses and abandon her. She all but threw herself at him.

 

“Whoa,” he exclaimed, as she engineered multiple collisions. “Hello. Has, uh…has the prospect of ‘culture’ developed some appeal?”

 

“You’re going straight to hell, I hope you know that.”

 

“Guess I’ll see you there,” he retorted. “Shall I look for you in the tar pits when I arrive?”

 

She twirled provocatively. “As if I’d be confined to the lowly reaches. By the time you make it yonder, I’ll be sitting on the throne, commanding the infernal legions.”

 

“Oh, will you, now?” he grinned. “And, uh…what will you be wearing?”

 

“Not much. Red leather boots...a smattering of lace...a corset made from human bones.”

 

He started cracking up. “Stop,” he joked. “You’ll make me swoon.”

 

Let’s see you look at Betty now, she thought.

 

"What's your stance on cronyism?" he inquired, as she ogled him openly. "Will I get special privileges? I am a favorite of yours, after all."

 

Their legs touched. “If you please me,” she told him.

 

“And how can I please you, oh mighty Queen of Perdition?”

 

I want wrath, and avarice, and lust. Give them to me – no apologies, no remorse.

 

“Fan me,” she said. “With one of those oversized palmetto leaves. And feed me grapes.”

 

“Can I feed you with a slingshot? I don’t want to get too close.”

 

She scoffed. “Not a chance. Either you cram them into my shark-toothed maw, or it’s back to the pits with you.”

 

He laughed; Tex didn’t. Their banter restored some semblance of normalcy, but it could not quell the tempest raging inside her. She felt profoundly vulnerable every time he touched her, yet she continued to hack away at her own boundaries.

 

“Hey,” he prompted. “Are you okay? Slow down.”

 

The moon leered down at them; rocks, brambles, and shallow furrows all conspired to end their bacchanalia. They coursed back and forth, back and forth, responding to each other’s every movement. A cloud blotted out the light. Now, he was the center of a wheel, and she was a selkie, a succubus, a huntress in a faerie ring. Now, he was –

 

Tex’s heel landed in a divot, and she pitched backward, sky wheeling overhead. Had she been alone, she could have salvaged things; she had uncanny reflexes, and she would have twisted fast enough to spare herself real injury. The Sheriff didn’t know this. He acted reflexively, throwing himself forward to catch her. His fingers missed the collar of her shirt, and instead, he snagged the bandana that she wore around her neck. Her head snapped back with a sickening crunch, and she gasped in pain as the noose tightened. Time slowed to a crawl.

 

She saw him then, as her vision narrowed: he was a void, a shadow – a starless silhouette sent by providence to carry out her sentence. He was her killer. He was extinguishing the world.

 

“Neutron!” she pleaded, clawing at her throat. “You’re…choking…me!”

 

He released his grip immediately, and Tex crashed to the ground. She thrashed around like a fish, then rolled over and propped herself up on her hands, gasping for breath. He fell to his knees beside her.

 

“Jesus, Vortex, I’m sorry!” he cried.

 

She tried to right herself, but she was coughing violently. Tiny flecks of light swam in front of her like fireflies. The bandana. She tore at the fabric, fingers blindly searching for the knot.

 

“Stop!” he shouted. “Stop!

 

He tried to pull her hands away from her neck, and she fought him like a wild thing, kicking and scratching. He was going to kill her. He was going to –

 

The Sheriff threw his arms around her, and she stopped struggling. His breathing rose, and fell, rose, and fell, and slowly, she came back to herself. She was shaking like a leaf, she realized, and tears – unfamiliar after so long – stung the corners of her eyes. She slapped a hand over her mouth to stifle a sob. What was happening to her?

 

“Hey,” he soothed. “You’re okay. Shh. I’m not going to hurt you.”

 

He pulled her close, knees scuffing on the gravel, and her breathing slowed. Gradually, she was able to take stock of things. It was not the first time that she’d been strangled; she had endured far worse attacks from both enemies and colleagues, and she’d made them pay for it. Tex walked away from every altercation with blood on her lip, and even more on her knuckles. It was nothing. Sometimes, she even liked it.

 

But this was different.

 

To think that he could hurt her, that he could be the one to snuff her out, after what they’d just been doing – there were no words for it. It was a nameless, black terror; a swirling morass that was far worse than any hellfire her imagination could produce. It made her want to curl into a ball.

 

“...going to untie it. All right?”

 

The Sheriff’s voice….somewhere.

 

“Is that okay?”

 

Tex nodded, and she felt the roughness of his shirt against her cheek. He pulled back just far enough to get a better look, and his fingers tickled as he worked upon the knot. It occurred to her, distantly, that this was all rather embarrassing.

 

“I’ve almost got it,” he murmured. “Just a second more…”

 

The fabric started moving, and after a pause, he slid the bandana off her neck. She clasped a hand around her throat. She was going to have one hell of a bruise tomorrow.

 

“I’m sorry,” he apologized, sounding helpless. “It was an accident.”

 

Tex sighed. Sniffling, she scooched back and sat up on her own, and they faced each other, resting cross-legged on the dirt.

 

“It wasn’t your fault,” she told him.

 

In the distance, a coyote howled, and there were other sounds, too – sounds that belonged to some other night. Music. Laughter. Voices.

 

“Tex…” he began. “What was done to you?”

 

She rubbed her nose. “Nothing I haven’t done to someone else.”

 

They fell silent. Tex could feel him staring at her, but it was too dark to make out his expression. It didn’t matter, really – the moon was gone, and all of her emotions had gone with it. Suddenly, she felt very tired.

 

“Let’s get you back to camp,” he said.

 

She allowed the Sheriff to help her to her feet. He took her arm and led her away from the expanse, back toward the music and the firelight. Maybe things would be better there. Libby was there, and Libby could fix things for her. After a short walk, the lawman eased her down into a vacant chair; it looked familiar. She gazed off into space, feeling weightless and gauzy, as he rushed off toward the dance floor. Tex was dimly aware of events going on around her – Miss Folfax and Mr. Neutron, conversing with their heads together – Mr. Neutron pointing toward her – Libby gathering up her skirts and hurrying her way.

 

You did this, her inner monologue derided. You let him in.

 

Instinct told her she ought to find a place to hide and lick her wounds, but she simply didn’t care enough to try.

 

“You’re such a lummox, James,” came Libby’s scolding voice. The barkeep was beside her, peering at her throat. “Help me get her up.”

 

“I’m fine,” the outlaw croaked. Her voice was so garbled that Libby couldn’t understand her.

 

They both put an arm around her and hoisted her to her feet. It was too much effort to fight them, so Tex just let them bear her weight.

 

“Should we take her to the cabin?” asked the Sheriff.

 

Mumbling.

 

“…I think so. A cot and table, maybe. I’m not sure what else.”

 

I’m right here, she thought. But was she?

 

They brought the outlaw up the hill, stumbling now and again on the uneven soil. When they reached the top, Libby handed her off to Mr. Neutron.

 

“I’d like to go to bed,” Tex murmured.

 

Libby fiddled with the latch, and it clicked open. Beyond, the homestead lay silent, occupied by a black abyss. The Sheriff fished around in Tex’s pocket and located her lighter.

 

“Here.” He passed it to the barkeep.

 

A second later, a flame punched through the darkness. Three faces huddled around it, jaws and noses chiseled into planes. They moved as one; their limbs were everywhere.

 

“Where’s the lamp?”

 

Scuffling. All at once, Tex couldn’t bear the feeling of the Sheriff’s arm around her, and she wrenched herself away.

 

“Get off of me!” she shouted.

 

“All right, all right.” He backed up a couple of steps, palms raised.

 

Tex glanced around. There wasn’t much furniture to speak of, but pressed against the far wall, she could just make out the shape of a cot with a blanket on it. She shambled over to it and collapsed.

 

“Go away,” she demanded, words muffled by the pillow.

 

“But…”

 

“NOW!”

 

A thump as the lawman tossed her lighter onto the mattress. Then the door creaked shut.
 

 

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Well that escalated (.-.)
...

I wasn't going to do a dance chapter initially because I was afraid it would come across as cheesy, but then I figured out a way to make it fucked up, and I was instantly on board again.
 

Poor Tex is such a mess.
 

HISTORICAL SHIT AND BULLSHIT SHIT

- The phrase "like a cartoon villain" sounds decidedly modern, but it's actually a lot older than you might think. The use of the word cartoon to describe a series of images, usually humorous in intent, dates to 1843, when Punch magazine applied the term to satirical drawings in its pages. Political cartoons are older still. They got their start in England in the 1700s, and by the mid 1800s, major newspapers in countries all over the world featured caricatures lampooning the political villains of the day. Thomas Nast, an immigrant who came to be known as "the father of the American cartoon", was partially responsible for bringing down Boss Tweed and his infamous Tammany Hall political machine. After escaping from a NYC jail, Tweed fled to Spain, where he was re-arrested after local police recognized him as the guy from Nast's cartoons.
- The 'Remolino de Polvo' did not, in fact, exist, but I did draw inspiration from real history. You've heard of the Tango, right? The Mambo? These iconic styles derived from earlier partner dances invented in Latin America during the 1800s – the Cuban Habanero (later the Danzón), the Argentine Milonga, and the Brazilian Maxixe, to name a few. Combining aspects of European, African, and Indigenous traditions, they were an unstoppable tidal wave of titillating offensiveness. Because pelvic movements were included in these dances (whether soft sways as in the Danzón, or body-to-body grinds and leg-entanglement as in the Maxixe), the straight-laced types (and the Catholic Church) were NOT pleased. I wanted to give the impression that Sheen made up a dirty dance and then passed it off as a real thing people were doing overseas. The Port of Mazatlán is a real place, though, and it was arguably California's most important trading partner during the Gold Rush, which began in 1849.
- Literary References: The Biblical book of Daniel recounts the story of a Jewish man who served as a high-ranking official in the court of King Darius the Mede. Daniel's colleagues resented his success and favor before the King, so they hatched a plot to get rid of him. They tricked Darius into passing a 30-day decree which required all subjects to pray solely to the King. Anyone caught praying to another god or man would be fed to hungry lions. Daniel, as expected, refused to abandon his faith, and the other advisors turned him in. The law could not be changed, and the horrified King Darius (who genuinely loved Daniel) was forced to throw him into the lion's den. Luckily for our protag, God protected Daniel, and he was delivered from their claws unharmed. King Darius was like "dude, your God's AWESOME, I should totally follow Him". Then he threw the scheming advisors, along with their wives and children, into the den to be eaten instead. Old Testament God was really big on the whole "collective punishment" thing.
 

Vocab:
* A Jeremiah - a buzzkill
* Sword of Damocles - a parable popularized by the Roman philosopher Cicero, meant to illustrate how those in power always labor under the specter of anxiety and death. Nowadays, the phrase is commonly used as a catchall term to describe a looming threat.
* Soiled Dove - a woman of ill-repute
* Selkie - a seal woman. These Celtic faeries were said to shapeshift between their seal and humanoid forms by means of a removable seal skin. A human man could coerce a Selkie into marrying him by stealing her skin-changer and hiding it from her, thereby preventing her return to the sea.
* Succubus - a female demon that seduces mortal men
* Faerie Ring - a circle of mushrooms that, in European folklore, was associated with supernatural revelry and danger. Numerous legends focus on mortals entering a faerie ring and suffering the consequences.

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CRACKS KNUCKLES OKAY, LET'S DO THIS.  This is gonna be effin' long so sit your ass down and be prepared for a TON of Katie enthusiasm. (really, this is long.) 
 
"It was striking, with a bone-white body, scarlet tuning pegs, and a rose-encrusted sugar skull painted on the base. He strummed it feverishly, pearls of sweat shining on his brow." This guitar sounds gorgeous. 
 
"The hell? How many cursed instruments does this man have? she thought." This made me chuckle. But he is quite a collector, isn't he? 
 
"She discovered him sitting beside a stack of dirty cups, glowering at the dance floor like a cartoon villain. She flopped down next to him. “What crawled up your ass and died?” she asked." OK, first of all, that description of him sitting there glaring was so VIVID. Dang. Second, I absolutely DIED at her opening line here—so very Tex. 
 
"He stuck up his nose and crossed his arms. “None of your business, Vortex. Go away.” “Ehh. I just sat down.” “So? Get up again.” Oh, these two are so ridiculous.  He's being so short with her, and she's just poking the bear.  She yawned and glanced over at the crowd of revelers. It did not take her long to identify the source of his consternation. At the far end of the procession, she spotted Betty, smiling and chatting as she threaded through the line. Oh, you have got to be kidding me." Sounds like someone is having some feelings. 
 
“Are you pissy because the church mouse is dancing with someone else?” she asked.  When he didn’t answer, she leaned over and scrutinized his face. He responded by angling even further away, until he was nearly falling out of his chair. “Oh, for the love of – you are, aren’t you? God, that is just sad.” I love that he actually tries to wiggle away here physically.  Neutron, you silly goose. You aren't getting out of this that easily.
 
“She’s dancing with Butch!” he burst out, throwing his hands in the air. “Butch! Of all the men in town to pick. I’d be happy for her if she was up there with Ike, or Wendell, or…anyone else, really, but Butch? He’s done nothing but make an absolute fool of himself, day in and day out, since the moment he arrived. It’s unconscionable.” Aww. :( he's so jealous and upset..  
 
“Fat chance. Betty never dances – at least, not with any of the men. She says it's 'immoral' for a married woman to be dancing with someone other than her husband.” oh boy. 
 
"He glared at her. “What would you know? It’s not like you’re an authority on the subject of dancing etiquette.” “Pfft. And you are?” “More than you,” he shot back." These two have such a lightning-fast give-and-take, push-and-pull, and it's wonderful. (and yes, I am writing this review after reading the chapter, so this metaphor was on purpose.) 
 
The image of Tex bumping shoulders with a scowling Neutron is just one that makes me smile. It's… almost affectionate. :)
 
“The poop ring?” Vindication." Great minds think alike!
 
 “Ah, yes,” she shot back sarcastically, “that most dreadful of events: a bunch of hoity-toity women lining up to curtsy for you.” He made a face. “The women were the worst part. All that fawning, and flattery. Not a single person there knew how to be sincere. I was a walking, talking diamond ring to be obtained by any means, and I detested every minute of it.” That sounds absolutely terrible.  Never being able to trust anyone, always a pawn in a game that you really don't want to play. 
 
“Hmm.” Tex examined her nails. “It’s a shame those women never got to know you. I think they would have been entranced by your…eloquent carpentry lessons.” PFFT. AND WHAT WILL YOU ALLOW HIM TO NAIL, DEAR SWEET TEX? 
 
“Surely there’s at least one dance you enjoy,” she said, from her new seat on the ground. He darted toward her, and she dodged left, circling round the chair. “Come here!” he shouted.“The waltz?” she suggested. He tried to smack her again. “The grand march?” He took another swipe. She reversed directions, and he tried to grab her by the coat. He missed by an inch. He stumbled, and she threw her body toward him and rolled across his back. Nimble as a cat, she was already running when her feet hit the ground on the other side. She took off into the dark. “Catch me if you can!” she called. “You are such an asshole!” he laughed, and gave chase." I am such a sucker for how EASY this exchange is. It is playful and teasing, yet there is something more there, just at the edges—a challenge. 
 
"As the firelight receded, Tex reduced her speed, and Mr. Neutron caught up to her. He tugged her ponytail, and she rewarded him with a delighted squeak. The pair matched strides beneath the canopy of starlight. Out here, the universe was boundless – anything might happen. The outlaw gazed up at the sky, luxuriating in the tranquil air. They chatted amiably, rehashing the day’s events as they meandered. Each took solace in the other’s company: his bad mood dissipated, and her fretful mania began to ebb away. She kicked a pebble at him, and he nudged it back; jokes and gibes flowed freely. The night had lost its fangs." MARA??!!!! MARA. MORE FLIRTING. You are trying to put me in the ground, aren't you? And the description of the night, the atmosphere of possibility, and then that last bit there, THE NIGHT HAD LOST ITS FANGS? DAMN YOU. 
 
"He looped an arm around her waist, and it felt like such a natural part of the conversation that Tex barely even noticed. “Unparalleled…and probably illegal,” he muttered. “So arrest me, Sheriff,” she vamped. “I’m completely helpless.”  The TOUCHING. The flirting. The BANTER. That familiar challenge. I'm spellbound and enamoured with everything happening here.
 
“Maybe,” he shrugged. “Who knows? I can’t be trusted to tell the truth anymore, now that I’m a villain.” “Finally. At long last, my diabolical plans have come to fruition – let me savor your corruption like the fine wine that it is." I have a feeling the corruption is just starting. More seriously, though, I really liked the way you worded this. His corruption, being something that she metaphorically devours, is DELICIOUS.
 
 “How low are we talkin’?” “Subterranean.” “Heh heh,” she exulted, playing with his lapels." Arms around waists? PLAYING WITH HIS LAPELS? Good lord. These two have enough sexual tension to set an entire town on fire. (please don't actually set their town on fire)
 
“It is. It’s the antithesis of all those pompous, dreary shuffle-steps my parents forced upon me.” Good!
 
“Not true. Wrap your arms around my neck.” Tex blinked. “What?” Her sheer surprise here is golden. 
 
“That’s how it starts. Wrap your arms around my neck. And do it like you mean it, or this won’t be any fun.” She squinted at him suspiciously. “I don’t know…” “Oh, for heaven’s sake…your hands are already on my chest. Just move them upward.” “Fine,” she relented. “Now what?” He slid his palms down her sides, shifting his grip from her waist to her hips. She almost jumped. “Whoa,” she blurted. “That is very close to…the revolvers.” “Stop being so dramatic. Let me try to remember how this goes. It’s tricky without the proper music.” Tex clung to him distractedly while he ruminated. A tiny sun burned within him; it warmed her cool skin."  Everything about this is perfection. The way he's so irritated with her and is just like.. move your damn hands. And then her reaction when his hands go to her hips? HELLO. AND THAT DESCRIPTION OF THE TINY SUN INSIDE HIM WARMING HER?! SLAYED ME ON THE SPOT. 
 
“Slow down,” she urged. “I can’t see a damn thing, and you’re dragging me all over.” “Forget your eyes. Pay attention to my body.” *wiggles eyebrows suggestively* lol sorry. 
 
 "She took his advice. After a series of halting, uneven paces, they got a sense for each other’s rhythm, and things started falling into place. He was measured and steady, she was fleet-footed and evasive. When he advanced, she withdrew; when he retreated, she pursued. Back and forth, push and pull. Once she understood the dynamic, it was easy to follow his lead." Push and pull, give and take, their dynamic perfectly echoed in physical movement. 
 
“What are you doing?” she burst out. “Dancing, Vortex,” he said calmly. “I move my feet, and you move yours. Shall we review any other basic concepts?” LOL 
 
“Right…because Sheen’s a reliable source of information on the subject of ‘deportment’.” Somehow, I doubt that.
 
"He stepped away and twirled her, then yanked her back, and Tex couldn’t help it – she laughed. How could she not? Here they were, on the edge of the world, treating this racy little number like it was a genteel promenade. It didn’t matter who he was, or who she was, or what Sword of Damocles hung above their heads. The night was spinning – fire and music and sweat and pumping blood, all around her, all within her." MARA. MARA. I need to SHAKE YOU. (GENTLY)  GOOD LORD. EVERYTHING ABOUT THIS. I AM SCREAMING. I can't even properly VOICE all the things happening here that I love. 
 
“Keep the compliments coming, my sweet,” he exhorted. “Every time you flatter me, I siphon away a little more of your power. Soon I’ll be unstoppable.” MY SWEET?!?!??! NEUTRON. HOW MANY NICKNAMES DO YOU HAVE STUFFED IN THAT HEAD OF YOURS?!'
 
"Don’t be like that. Here, I’ll return the favor: now that you’ve deloused yourself, you’re surprisingly easy on the eyes.” Tex couldn’t believe her ears. “Are you flirting with me?” “No. I’m offering positive reinforcement. An experiment, aimed at modifying your behavior, so you’ll continue bathing regularly.” mhmmm. mhmm. 
 
“Okay.” He paused, mulling it over. “You remind me of a cat.” Interesting comparison, I'm listening. 
 
"Not so,” he insisted, as he fought to pull her closer. “You’re more like…a feral cat that showed up on my doorstep. I figure, if I keep feeding you scraps, you’re bound to warm up to me eventually. You might even let me scratch you behind the ears.” Yeah, I'm starting to see the similarity here.
 
“I don’t know,” she evaded. “Food is only so tempting, and I have very sharp claws.” I am VERY certain she does. 
 
"He gave her another spin. “You can have the run of the house,” he continued. “The rug in front of the fireplace is yours, naturally. The desk…the windowsill…the rocking chair, too, whenever I’m not using it.” Tex warmed to the theme. “Maybe I’ll sit on your lap,” she flirted. “In the evenings, when it’s just the two of us.” He smirked. “Maybe you will.” GOOD LORD.  THE TENSION IS SO THICK I CAN TASTE IT.  
 
"The hair at the nape of his neck was feather-soft. Without meaning to, she began to play with it." playing with his hair??!?!?!?!? HELLLO!?!?!?!?
 
"He pretended to reconsider. “Unless, of course, you’re one of those hairless cats…want me to check and find out?” Neutron!!! so scandalous. ;)
 
"Then what do you want to be, Deputy? The choice is up to you.” I want to be yours, she thought."  AND THERE IT IS. THERE IT IS, FOLKS. AND IT TOOK ME OUT. 
 
"Crisis of conscience, Vortex?” he inquired. “Shall I provide you with some counsel?” “No, I…I think we should…” she stammered helplessly. All at once, she was under siege. The movement of his hips. The low, engaging tenor of his voice. The subtle dampness of his skin beneath her touch. They were a hair’s breadth away from something far more intimate, and she realized how easy it would be to allow him that transgression. She tried to withdraw, but he followed. Help me, she thought, but there were no faeries left to bargain with. For better or for worse, the night belonged to her." Oh, my friend. The way he's teasing her, the way she's unraveling at the seams like a poorly stitched doll, the way she begs for help, only to discover there are no magics that can save her from this man. 
 
"Tex floundered. He reversed their direction. As he pulled her toward him, his fingers tugged at the place where her waistband met her shirt. She began to feel lightheaded. “I think we should stop,” she said." He trotted to a halt, and so did she. They were almost chest-to-chest on a small ridge." She's LIGHTHEADED?! HELLO?! 
 
"When she straightened, the moonlight fell upon them both, and she caught him looking at her in a way that both thrilled and terrified her. It dawned on Tex how spectacularly careless she had been. Boundary after boundary had been crossed, and she had not even seen it." ALL the boundaries have been crossed. Okay, maybe not all… but yeah. It's much too late, girl. 
 
“Ready for another round?” He offered her his hand. Tex could not take back her error, nor could she intuit the scope of his intentions. All she could do was rise to meet the moment, now that it was here, and she refused to sully herself with cowardice. She strode toward him, and he confidently pulled her back into his arms. The lion’s den was warm, and terribly inviting." the gesture of offering his hand, like he's going to pull her into something else, pull her TOWARD something else. THE LION'S DEN WAS WARM AND TERRIBLY INVITING? GET OUT. 
 
"It was the paradox that he presented. He was familiar; he was safe. He was also neither of those things." Oh, I just really really liked how you expressed this. 
 
“I can. Sounds like a skill issue.” "Just dance the part you’re meant to dance, Vortex. It’s bad form to steal the lead.” “So fight me for it, lawman,” she goaded. His fingers tightened around her swaying hips. “You’re always like this,” he complained. “You’re the most incorrigible person I’ve ever met.” “So why do you keep grinding up against me, then? Don’t act like you don’t know what you’re doing.” He considered. “To impress you,” he suggested. “Unlikely,” she shot back. “Try again.” “Because you're dangerous,” he said, and that was probably the truth.“Is that what you’re getting out of this?” she accused. “Some kind of cheap thrill?” “What? No. What on earth gave you that idea?” Bitterness filled her. “You just admitted it.” “No I didn’t!” “A bit of fun with the soiled dove away from prying eyes – that’s all men ever want from me.” “Don’t you dare lump me in with those degenerates!” He spun her forcefully, moved, and spun her again. Gravel went flying. “That kind of callousness disgusts me. Point me toward anyone who treats you like that, and I’ll string them up by their ankles.” It took her a second to regain her balance. I’ve insulted him grievously, she thought. Why do I keep insulting him? “I don’t need you to take care of me,” she bristled, even though she yearned for him to shield her. He rolled his eyes and dragged her closer. “Ugh. For the love of God, woman, stop trying to pick a fight with me. I’m not going to let you push me away.” I'm sorry this was such a long quote, but I couldn't pick it apart because it's the entire thing; how it works together, every beat is so well-placed. The argument is chefs kiss! Also, the way they keep missing one another (misunderstanding one another), and yet remain so physically close, is tragically poetic. 
 
"Tex felt like she was drowning in the mire of her psyche. In these uncharted waters, warring leviathans battled for dominance: desire, hope, insecurity, fear. His words offered clarity, but they also came too late to forestall her downward spiral. The urge to sabotage their shared connection was almost overwhelming. Spurn him, screamed fear. Strike first, so he can’t strike at all." Oh, Tex. :(
 
“Do you have a taste for danger, Sheriff? For dangerous women?” She returned to his embrace, and his palm slipped onto the small of her back. It galled her that he could touch her with such casual insouciance." BOY. BOY. YOU ARE ONLY MAKING THINGS WORSE.
 
 "Tex lost control, however briefly; she looked down at his body as they moved. It was a grave mistake. She imagined him pushing her down onto the bed, then climbing on top of her – his mouth on her neck, his hands in her hair, her own startled breathlessness. She would accept him, naturally. Even if he could never love her." GOOD LORD. This is both extremely hot and heartbreaking at the same time. How are you managing to do both at the same time?!
 
 “Not much. Red leather boots...a smattering of lace. A corset made from human bones.” He started cracking up. “Stop,” he joked. “You’ll make me swoon.” Let’s see you look at Betty now, she thought." Betty does sort of pale in comparison to the firebrand that is Tex. 
 
this banter is delicious. i'm eating it up.
 
"I want wrath, and avarice, and lust. Give them to me – no apologies, no remorse. “Fan me,” she said. “With one of those oversized palmetto leaves. And feed me grapes.”  It's almost like she wants everything. To drown in it. Also, grapes are incredibly sexy. :) I'm sorry, I had to. 
 
"He laughed; Tex didn’t. Their banter restored some semblance of normalcy, but it could not quell the tempest raging inside her. She felt profoundly vulnerable every time he touched her, yet she continued to hack away at her own boundaries." just. ugh. i am running out of ways to say this is incredible. So. THIS IS INCREDIBLE.
 
"The moon leered down at them; rocks, brambles, and shallow furrows all conspired to end their bacchanalia. They were coursing back and forth, back and forth, responding to each other’s every movement. She circled around, and a cloud blotted out the light. Now, he was the center of a wheel, and she was a selkie, a succubus, a huntress in a faerie ring. Now, he was –Tex’s heel landed in a divot, and she pitched backward, sky wheeling overhead. Had she been alone, she could have salvaged things; she had uncanny reflexes, and she would have twisted fast enough to spare herself real injury. The Sheriff didn’t know this. He acted reflexively, throwing himself forward to catch her. His fingers missed the collar of her shirt, and instead, he snagged the bandana that she wore around her neck. Her head snapped back with a sickening crunch, and she gasped in pain as the noose tightened. Time slowed to a crawl. She saw him then, as her vision narrowed: he was a void, a shadow – a starless silhouette sent by providence to carry out her sentence. He was her killer. He was extinguishing the world." WELL, FUCK. I literally have no better way to say this than just.. OH FUCK.  The MOOD SHIFT. THE FEAR. THE HELPLESSNESS. I FELT EVERY SINGLE SECOND OF IT. 
 
“Stop!” he shouted. “Stop!" He tried to pull her hands away from her neck, and she fought him like a wild thing, kicking and scratching. He was going to kill her. He was going to – The Sheriff threw his arms around her, and she stopped struggling. His breathing rose, and fell, rose, and fell, and slowly, she came back to herself. She was shaking like a leaf, she realized, and tears – unfamiliar after so long – stung the corners of her eyes. She slapped a hand over her mouth to stifle a sob. What was happening to her? “Hey,” he soothed. “You’re okay. Shh. I’m not going to hurt you.” He pulled her close, knees scuffing on the gravel, and her breathing slowed. Gradually, she was able to take stock of things. It was not the first time that she’d been strangled; she had endured far worse attacks from both enemies and colleagues, and she’d made them pay for it. Tex walked away from every altercation with blood on her lip, and even more on her knuckles. It was nothing. Sometimes, she even liked it. But this was different. To think that he could hurt her, that he could be the one to snuff her out, after what they’d just been doing – there were no words for it. It was a nameless, black terror; a swirling morass that was far worse than any hellfire her imagination could produce. It made her want to curl into a ball." Once again, I FELT HER sheer terror here so clearly. Oh, the way he tries to comfort her by pulling her close, and then those last few sentences there… WRECKED ME..
 
"The Sheriff’s voice….somewhere." Oh, my girl.
 
"Tex…” he began. “What was done to you?” She rubbed her nose. “Nothing I haven’t done to someone else.” OOOOF.
 
"Libby was there, and Libby could fix things for her. " This made me feel things. That she's come to think of Libby as a safe space, as someone who can help GROUND her. MMM. Yeah. That's the good stuff.
 
“You’re such a lummox, James,” came Libby’s scolding voice. " You tell him, Libs. 
 
"I’m right here, she thought. But was she?" Destroyed me in eight words.  UTTERLY.
 
"Scuffling. All at once, Tex couldn’t bear the feeling of the Sheriff’s arm around her, and she wrenched herself away.“Get off of me!” she shouted. “All right, all right.” He backed up a couple of steps, palms raised. Tex glanced around. There wasn’t much furniture to speak of, but pressed against the far wall, she could just make out the shape of a cot with a blanket on it. She shambled over to it and collapsed. “Go away,” she demanded, words muffled by the pillow. “But…” “NOW!” A thump as the lawman tossed her lighter onto the mattress. Then the door creaked shut." And this ending. :(  everything feels so raw and fresh, like a newly opened wound. JUST DAMN. 
 
Okay, I will try to keep this end bit short since this got so effing long. Really, I'm sorry. :S But Mara. I don't know what you are talking about. Everything about this was … so good. The easy banter! THE CHEMISTRY. Only to utterly destroy it, a flame doused by a good deal of water. It hurt me. But in a good way.  

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Posted 26 September 2025 - 12:44 AM

Second, I absolutely DIED at her opening line here—so very Tex.

 

"What crawled up your ass and died?" is very much a saying in my family. My grandma, mom, and I use it all the time >.<
 

Aww. he's so jealous and upset.

 

Wouldn't you be upset if an attractive woman said "I can't dance with you 'cause I'm married", only to have her turn around and dance with objectively the worst man in town? (Tex is correct that she's doing it out of charity, but he doesn't know that). 

 

These two have enough sexual tension to set an entire town on fire. (please don't actually set their town on fire)

 

...Katie. 

 

GOOD LORD.  THE TENSION IS SO THICK I CAN TASTE IT.

 

I just love how smug he is about it all. His roast game is strong tonight  :onfire: 
 

I'm sorry this was such a long quote, but I couldn't pick it apart because it's the entire thing; how it works together, every beat is so well-placed. The argument is chefs kiss! Also, the way they keep missing one another (misunderstanding one another), and yet remain so physically close, is tragically poetic.

 

Homegirl really does believe she's so fundamentally unlovable that the only explanation for his flirting must be that he wants to use her for sex.
 

Everything about this was … so good. The easy banter! THE CHEMISTRY. Only to utterly destroy it, a flame doused by a good deal of water.

 

Poor Tex. She was having such a great time, until she realized what was happening. She really is her own worst enemy. Just crashed and burned completely because she psyched herself out so badly. 

 

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Posted 26 September 2025 - 12:54 AM

"What crawled up your ass and died?" is very much a saying in my family. My grandma, mom, and I use it all the time >.<
 

 

LOL :P

 

 

Wouldn't you be upset if an attractive woman said "I can't dance with you 'cause I'm married", only to have her turn around and dance with objectively the worst man in town? (Tex is correct that she's doing it out of charity, but he doesn't know that). 

 

 

I will tell you my original comment there was longer, I went back and edited after I saw how ridiculously long this had gotten. :)

 

 

...Katie. 

 

*grumbles* 

 

Poor Tex. She was having such a great time, until she realized what was happening. She really is her own worst enemy. Just crashed and burned completely because she psyched herself out so badly. 

 

 

YEAHHHH. :S I want to just.. like.. wrap her up in a tight hug. 


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Posted 26 September 2025 - 01:25 AM

 MY SWEET?!?!??! NEUTRON. HOW MANY NICKNAMES DO YOU HAVE STUFFED IN THAT HEAD OF YOURS?!'

 

As many as I can come up with. 

 

“You remind me of a cat.” Interesting comparison, I'm listening.

 

C'mon, she is TOTALLY A CAT (also the queen of hell, apparently). This needs to be a drawing.

 

This is both extremely hot and heartbreaking at the same time. How are you managing to do both at the same time?!

 

A lifetime of romantic dysfunction >.<

 

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Posted 26 September 2025 - 01:27 AM

As many as I can come up with. 

 

all i can say is keep 'em comin. i'm eating 'em up.

 

Yeah, Tex is very much a cat. You've convinced me. 


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Posted 26 September 2025 - 04:10 PM

mara. this chapter was so good i had to come back and read it AGAIN this morning. 


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Posted 26 September 2025 - 07:32 PM

I still need to fix the portion between [Tex felt like she was drowning in the mire of her psyche] and [“Whoa,” he exclaimed, as she engineered multiple collisions]. I really don't like the way it's written, but I also can't figure out exactly how to strengthen it. I'll give it like a week, and then come back to it I guess.

 

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Posted 26 September 2025 - 08:02 PM

I, for one, disagree. I think it works just fine. :) But I realize this is probably not helpful, I mostly just wanted to remind you that you are awesome and i adore this fic. And I see you updated on A03 too. *GRINS* 


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Posted 28 September 2025 - 01:34 AM

The Sheriff the whole time he's dancing with Tex:

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Posted 28 September 2025 - 01:52 AM

lol fair.

I gotta say… he really was laying it on thick in this chapter and I loved it. :)
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Posted 28 September 2025 - 03:16 AM

lol fair.

I gotta say… he really was laying it on thick in this chapter and I loved it. :)

 

In his mind, she started it.  >.< (She kind of did...unintentionally).

 

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Posted 28 September 2025 - 03:21 AM

Oops. :)
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