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[curiochibi]

Here it is!
I'll try to keep an even balance between this one and GB with regards to updates.

WARNING: This fanfic contains some blood (but it's very minimal) and violence (if you call kicking and scratching violence). Reader discretion is advised.

Prologue

"Oh, no."
I clapped my hands over my mouth and restrained the urge to lunge to Jimmy's side.
He placed two fingers alongside his neck, like he was feeling his pulse. But when he took them away, the tips were crimson with blood. Jimmy looked at me in disbelief. His expression betrayed his thoughts: How could you, Cindy? How could you?
He collapsed a couple seconds later to the lab floor, and I watched in horror as his skin paled all over.
It's gonna be okay, Cindy. He lost a little blood; that's why he's pale. You probably didn't do anything. I told myself.
But I was lying. I knew I was lying.
Jimmy's hair started darkening in color, and his skin grew even paler.
That's nothing. I crawled over to his side and placed a hand on his chest to check for a heartbeat.
Jimmy's eyes opened partially, and I saw his irises slowly change from blue to liquid gold.
That was it. That was the final sign.
That and the fact that he'd lost his heartbeat.

Jimmy was now a vampire.

[Beks]

oooo! Can't wait for more! :wub:

[Fire Pearl]

Prepare ....

One....

Two....

Three...

OH MY FREAKING GOSH!!!!! A VAMPIRE STORY!!!!

YOU HAVE NO IDEA HOW MUCH I LOVE YOU FOR DOING THAT!!!!

Oh :uhoh: am I excited!!! Wah!!! You just HAVE to continue SOON!!!

[N!no]

WOW!!! so unexpected

gr8 job!! :thumbsup:

[CraazyOne]

Oooh, sweet opening. I love how the prologue was short and simple, yet captivating and exciting all at once. You totally drag your readers in with just a few short sentences...I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes. :D





~Rachel~

[ShadRose17]

.. VAMPIREEEEEEEEEEEEE *explode* OHHHHHIOSDJFJDKFHDGDHF MOREEEE.

[curiochibi]

LOL

[Urvy]

Wow, a vampire fic? I'm doing one too, only its a crossover with Ghostbusters.

[Kaytron]

YES!!!!!!
MUAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!
NOW JIMMY CAN JOIN US IN THE CIRCLE OF VAM--

Everyone: :blink:

*realizes what she just said*
Vam... vamtriquolism.... ya, we'll go with that....

Everyone: Oooohhhh ^_^
Kaytron: phew, that was a close one.

^Kaytron^ :ph43r:

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

Gah, that opening is amazing!! Too bad she never got around to writing more of it; it had me on the edge of my seat, metaphorically speaking! I might just write something like this sometime, starting with a premise close to this! Count on it!

[SheWolf]

I thought it was really good, too, but it was from 2008 so I think that's all we get.

 

Gah, that opening is amazing!! Too bad she never got around to writing more of it; it had me on the edge of my seat, metaphorically speaking! I might just write something like this sometime, starting with a premise close to this! Count on it!

You totally could!

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

Yeah, I sure could! Though I wouldn't just do it the exact same way, cuz that would taking credit for someone else's work, and I don't think she'd want me continuing what she started for her, either... I bet I could come up with something uniquely my own, yet still follows the same concept... I think I'm already starting to think of my own ideas for something of this nature...