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[Jimmygang 005]

Well hers goes nothing, my first writing work, and it’s about my OC self Neutron Knight Character The Black Knight and his origins, read here and here to know about the Neutron Knights and there kingdom. This is the first ever fanfaction I write in my life so pleas be kind in review I know I may sucks, but it’s my first try so yeah have fun with it or making fun from it or what ever.




Neutron Knight Origins: The Black Knight.


I don’t like looking back to the past, my past, it’s really a vary dark one, war that word is my life, I was porn to a family that ran way from wars in my home country, to find them selves in other war zone, there’s nothing happy about my childhood nothing I can remember.

I was porn in the 100 day’s war, between the Green Mountains (my home land) and the Space nations whom ware led by there Evil lord Meldar who’s back then tried to take over our land to make it his start point to attack the earth, the Neutron Knights wear send to my homeland to help us fighting the Space nations they were send by King Paulsen the King of Retroville back then and a lot of them and our soldiers ware killed while they ware fighting like brave warriors.

my family ran way from the green mountains when I was 9 months old, after the Space nations interred two of our defense walls, and King Paulsen was vary sick. We ware losing hope, my family along with many others families and people ran way, to the deserts behind the mountains, but even that place wasn’t save, monsters of the night and thefts, only the stronger well survive, I was strong enough to live but my new baby brother was not. I lived 8 years in heck, every day I was prying for me and my family to stay alive by the end of the day.

one day he came the man who changed my life for ever, he was a tall man, with blond short hair and mustache dress all in black with big black glass covering his eyes holding a red blood like color sword, with a black armor that had a red and white atom symbol. Everyone was wondering who was he? Is he a Neutron Knight what is he doing here. Out came the oldest man from our grope, the stranger removed his glasses for the old man we all could see his big blue eyes and a scar on his left eye, the old man looked at the stranger and then he Suddenly hugged him like he never hugged anyone before, “welcome back Hussein, My sun” said the old man. And then everyone one looked at each other when I saw there faces all of them looked like they saw a ghost or man who came back from the death, I simply asked my mother: "who’s that mom?" She picked me up and side: “this is our hero my boy, Neutron Knight Hussein, people like to call him The Black Knight”

“The Black Knight, I think I like the sound of that”




So, what you think?

:) Khalid :)

[ssj4majuub]

Niiiice.

[RocksmySocks]

What an exciting beginning, Khalid!

Nice work! :thumbsup:

I can't wait to see what comes next. :D


- Rat Lady :ahoy:

[CraazyOne]

Oooh, at story about Black Knight, awesome! Great beginning, Khalid. ^_^






~Rachel~

[ssj4majuub]

I wonder...

Hey, Khalid, if you're doing one of these, should the rest of us too?
Just a quick question.

[Jimmygang 005]

Thanks every one your support is really helpful, and as for your question Isaac, no you don’t have to write the origin story of your Knight character, but if you would like to do it then fine do it that would be cool, every neutron knight is welcome to write a story about the origin of his/her NK character and oh yah I would put the second part tomorrow ;)

:) Khalid :)

[ssj4majuub]

I think I might.

I'll try to get it up sometime this week, but it'll likely be a oneshot.

[Beks]

That was cool, Khalid! I can't wait to see the next part! ^_^

[Jimmygang 005]

Every one update there story now it’s my time to update my story, first I’m sorry for being so long at update it and second I’m sorry for my bad writing I’m trying my best and well this what I can do have fun

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Neutron Knights origins: Black Knight part 2:

I was looking at him the Black Knight for all day long, I always heard about the neutron knights but I never saw one of theme.

“are looking at some kind of art piece?” a wired sound side when I looked back it was nothing more than the only friend I had in life, his name was Omar he was at my age (8 years old) brown long hair red eyes, kind strong arms and body looking for someone in his age, we knew each other since we ware 5 and we even called each other brothers.

“No” I side “it’s just I never saw a Neutron Knight before that all”

“Well you just saw one, happy now” Omar side that and set next to me “Neutrons Knights yah right”

“What you mean?”

“I mean if they are as strong as they say then why they couldn’t defeat Meldar, I wonder if this Black Knight guy is even strong, I think he just some kid of a loser with good looking suit”

“Don’t say that, they are strong, very powerful, and I heard many stories about the Black Knight, stories show how powerful he is”

“Oh really, well that sound cool”

“Yah, but hay bro, you really like to talk about power aren’t you”

“Well bro what can I say I just like being powerful?”

As he finished saying that, the Black Knight stands from his seat and side: “my friends, I thank you all for your hot welcome, and I came here to give you a massage from our king” as he side that he show a small devise and when he push a button that was in the serves of the devise, a light came out, then the light show a well dress man seating on what look like a Throne, the man looked kind weird and the background light image looked even weirder, then the throne begin to move in circle and a strange music begin to play

Baump bump bump

“Now this is the story all about how
My life got flipped turned upside down
I'll like to take a minute just sit down James
I tell you how I became the weird King of Retroville”

Bump bump bump

“In Northeastern duke town born and raised
In the palace is where I spent most of my days…”

“OPPS!!!” side Black Knight while he was pushing other buttons on the massage device “wrong massage, sorry abut that, you see his majesty is trying to be a comedy actor and well …” he looked at the crowed who give him the WTF look “ahm ok then aaahhh yah here you go…”

Other video appeared and this time the king looked and side:

“My dear people of the green mountains, as the King of Retroville I would like to thank you all for your support, you had been through many bad things, but still you show unlimited courage, I can sure you that your land well be back to you soon this my promise to you have fate in Justice”

When the massage was over, the black knight looked at his people and side: “we are putting plans to attack the Space nation in the green mountains, the plan need time and good fighters, we need your help, the Green mountains is your land after all, my land” then a grope of young men stand up showing there well to fight.

Omar stand up he looked at me and side “hey bro aren’t you tired, from being weak?”. I look at him, remembering all my bad memory then I answered: “of course I’m” then he show a wired creepy looking smile and side “well bro it’s time to become strong, and the neutron knights are the devise"
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Well I hope you like it


:) Khalid :)

[CraazyOne]

Ooooh, cool, Khalid! :D Great job!





~Rachel~

[Jimmygang 005]

Well thanks Rachel, may I ask you something do you think the song part was funny or just stupid, I think I shouldn’t put that part :unsure:

:) Khalid :)

[CraazyOne]

Hehe, well, I found it rather funny, but I guess in the end it's your choice if you want to lighten up the mood with some humor or not. Maybe you'd rather keep it all serious...? I think either way it works. :D





~Rachel~

[Jimmygang 005]

Well I want some funny things happening around my story, and oh yah I read your NK story it’s cool and wonderful just one thing I just want to tell you that Queen Mara is not that old in the kingdom there ware other kings and Queens before her, as for your story time it’s a queen but you can decide witch queen you want you story time to happen in queen Mara or the one before her Queen kohirihiri , I don’t mean to destroy your story I just want to light you up with this information


:) Khalid :)

[CraazyOne]

Well I want some funny things happening around my story, and oh yah I read your NK story it’s cool and wonderful just one thing I just want to tell you that Queen Mara is not that old in the kingdom there ware other kings and Queens before her, as for your story time it’s a queen but you can decide witch queen you want you story time to happen in queen Mara or the one before her Queen kohirihiri , I don’t mean to destroy your story I just want to light you up with this information


:) Khalid :)

Oh, I hadn't realized I'd put "serving the queen for 20 years"! :blink: Yeah, this is back in the past, and I'm assuming the stuff we're RPing now is in the "present"... i.e., Mara's 18 in our RP topic like she is now?

Anyway, I fixed it. I just changed it to "serving the kingdom for 20 years". So he's been serving other kings and queens in the past... Mara is on the throne now in my story, but she's a new queen and only 16...

Does that work better?




~Rachel~

[ssj4majuub]

SWEEEET

Dude, that was awesome. Original, and the comedy actor thing was hilarious.

[Jimmygang 005]

@Rachel: Yah that better now, and I’m really sorry for not telling you before, those are the information you need to know the RP topic neutron knights who are knights in your story time are: black knight (me), rat lady,Flank and writer woman As for the king and queens you lived thro let me see you are 18 rights? Then: King DeCarlo (the one who was singing in my story) then Queen Kohirihiri and Queen Mara and for the grand father thief part if it happened when he was young then most likely it was in the time of Queen Scales (at the end of queen Scales period) sorry for not telling you before and I hope those information well be useful.

@Isaac: Thanks I’m glad that you found it funny ^_^


:) Khalid :)

[CraazyOne]

OK, thanks for the info, Khalid! That does make things easier.





~Rachel~

[RocksmySocks]

Great new chapter, Khalid!

I thought the song was pretty funny! :lol:

And Omar is definitely a bad apple...he's pretty creepy, even as a kid.

[Jimmygang 005]

Hers my black knight story update, sorry for taking so long I had many things to do, hope you well like it

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It has been like 8 hours or more, me and Omar ware hiding inside a small box that was put on one of the camels of the black knight and the other young man who went with him to fight, I was so tired and I couldn’t even breath, it was so hot inside.

“Why we are doing this again?” I asked Omar.

“So we can be one of them”

“We should ask our families first”

“Your family, I don’t have one remember”

“Yah sorry”

“That ok who need theme any way”

“I do”

“ohh.. Poor thing, should I call your mama?!” Then Omar began laughing.

“Would you just keep quiet they may hear us”

Then the tribe stopped, and we begin hearing some Horses coming and a voice came and side:

“Slame, brothers”

The next thing I know is hearing the voice of the black knight laughing, and saying “well what you know now you become one of us red”

Then I decide to take a look from out the box to see, what is going on, and when I did I saw a grope of Bedouins, but one of them was different, young his skin was so white no way he was living in the desert, long black hair and an armor with what looked like an atom simple on it, other neutron knight!

I just want back in

‘Hey Omar there is other neutron knight out there!”

"Charm!"

I heard something being said after that

“I must say that Bedouin thing wasn’t so bad after all, they are nice people, as long as you stay way from there women, anyway so those are the warriors black knight”

“yah” side black knight “they need more training, but they are brave men I’m sure that they well do a great job, by the way red any word from kohirihiri and Ally yet”

“Yes, every thing wants fine with them, no problems until now”

“That great, let’s rest here then we can move on”

I had no idea what they ware talking about, but it looked like that they are planning to do something big

“What do you think they well do Omar?”

“How should I know, but what ever it is I don’t think I really care”

The next thing we know that the box was moved and opened, it was that other long hair knight

“What the…” the Neutron knight side as he saw us, then he grabbed both of us

“Who the hek are you kids and what are you doing here?!”

Omar just kept straggling “put me down”

“What’s going on here?!” asked the black knight who just came in, “and who are those kids?!”

“Let us go first, then we tell you who we are” side Omar with an angry voice

“Wow what strong mouth for a small kid” side the long hair Neutron Knight then I just looked at him and side “first we are not weak and small Mr. Long hair guy, and second we are here because we want to be a neutron knights”

“First the name is red storm and second you two are too young to be knights”

“Look whose, talking how old are you 15 or something Mr. teen knight”

“Well you…”

“flanck that enough” screamed the black knight “let go of them”

“But black knight…”

“I side let go” then red storm let go of us and the black knight came to us and asked “why you two want be one of us?” me and Omar looked at each other then Omar side “well because we want to be more powerful and being able to help people” the black knight just looked at him and side “oh really, but you don’t need to be powerful to help people” then I simply added “but we want to help others , we want to make differs in a way or other I mean that what you neutrons knights do, help people, give them hope me and my friend here want to do the same”

“Hmm, sound good to me you two kids really have a strong well, I like that, but still you two are too young”

Then Omar side “too young? We want to help people, if you don’t want to make us a neutron knights then at lest train us so you can do something”

“Train you?!”

“Yah, me and best buddy Khalid here, came from a hard place to live and we saw may people needing our help, but we ware not strong or able to help them, by training us we well be able to make differs”

The black knight remove his glass looked at us and side “you know you two kind remained me of my self when I wanted to become a neutron knight, what’s your names?”

“Omar”

“Khalid”

“Nice to meet you Omar and Khalid and I think I well train you both by my self, but I cant proms you that by the end you two well become Neutron knights”

Me and Omar ware so happy and enjoyed that we jumped from happens the black knight smiles at us then he looked at red storm and told him to give us some food and water.

at that night me and Omar ware laying staring at the stars, I was thinking about what we told the black knight that made him agree to make us his students, I really wanted to help people that we couldn’t help before, give a new hope to my people, free my country and many other good things I wanted to do.

“Hey Omar remember what we side to the black knight about helping our people and stuff”

“Yes I remember, I also remember how stupid was Mr. Black knight when he believed us”

my thoughts stopped there I was shocked about what Omar side “wait, Omar you didn’t mean what you side?!”

“What, heck no, don’t tell me you ware serious about what you side”

I didn’t know what to say but I didn’t want to upset him so I side “no of course not”

“Good bro, love and care for the others, yah right, what love gives us other than weakness and misery?”

“So what’s the plan then?”

“Simply bro, take our training from Mr. nice guy, then we leave him and his stupid knights friends, and we use our talent for our good”

“Ok, but I don’t think people, well like us for that”

“LIKE LOVE, mark my words bro, love is for the weak and we are not weak I’m not weak and I don’t need love and care from others, and the same ably to you did love and family care helped you all this time in the desert did it save your brother?!”

Remembering back my dark history, and how family care and love didn’t help I just thought that Omar was right

“No it didn’t and you are right bro, love for the weak and I’m not weak not anymore”

“Now that my dear brother that I know”

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So what you think? :unsure:


:) Khalid :)

[RocksmySocks]

Great new chapter, Khalid! I am really loving this story. Omar is one tricky dude.

And look, we got to meet Red Storm! :lol: Awesome!


-Rat Lady :ahoy: