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Posted 27 October 2007 - 04:02 AM

Ya, this story took me a LOOOONG time to write, and it isn't even HALF of the whole story. It's one part out of like, two or three ROFL. And yus, it's Halloween-themed for October (the fanfiction challenge group). :rock:

You have no idea HOW much it would mean to me if you read and replied. < 333 Please do! <-- See, I begged! ;___; Now succumb to my childish pleas!

P.S. I probably have a bunch of typos in there :ph43r: , so I'll correct them later on. If I don't see any, please alert me! This is kind of a type-through of the rough draft on paper LOL. Please and thank you!

P.P.S. They're supposed to be a little older in this haha. About fourteen or fifteen.

Phantom of the Halloween Party

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If you were to somehow magically acquire the power to fly, and you hovered over Retroville, you would see something of astounding contrast. To the right, a city bustled noisily; car horns honked, building lights flashed, and Halloween displays stuck out every once and awhile in local costume and party shops. However, the city faded little by little into what was a thick forest, a green cluster of leaves sprinkled an array of red, oranges, and yellows. A cold front had rolled in a few weeks before, replacing Texas's usual warm, oven-like heat with a slight chill. The forest, from above, looked tranquil... almost.

Zooming into the middle of the forest like you would with a camera, nestled between the trees, was a placid lake on which the full moon shone. Whispy clouds passed ever so slightly above in the black sky. The area was calm, an eeire silence filling the air. Only whistling of wind could be heard. At least until...

"SOUND CHECK! Is this thing on??" Pause. The voice continued, "Hey Puff Mama, I see you over there! And must I say, you look quite radishing tonight!" (what turned out to be) the UltraLord fanatic said from the microphone on stage.

"It's RAVISHING, you dope! Learn English," yelled Cindy Vortex, rolling up the pant leg to her costume. Dipping her bare foot into the crystal water of the lake, she grimaced and took it out. "That was a lot colder than I thought it would be." Libby lifted an eyebrow.

A breeze rustled the treetops. "Okay, we've taken a long enough break," Libby insisted. "Let's get back to decorating! We still have a few last things to do before the guests show up!" So far they had gotten the stage and instruments ready for Greystar to play and Sheen to DJ (after a few almost guitar-smashing accidents from said hyperactive boy as a result from consuming too much candy), spiderwebs spread out, ominously candle-lit jack-lanterns glowing from various areas, and tons of other decorations. They had even scared Carl with a large rubber spider (which ended up with him knocking the whole refreshments table over and sending Cindy go to the grocery store on an emergency run).

As Cindy and Libby set off once again, Libby taking a large "crystal" (plastic) ball with a robotic fortune teller's head inside and placing it on the refreshment table, the African American girl brought up a subject that obviously set of the temperamental blonde: "Girl, tell me again why you invited but Jimmy to your party?" The full-body skeleton Cindy held jerked in her hands.

"What do you mean by that?" The bones rattled a little.

"You know perfectly well what I mean," Libby said flatly. "Look at what you're wearing! A scientist costume? Do you have the Jimmy blues, or what?"

Cindy replied, "You're being ridiculous!" A deep scowl was set in her face and she placed her hands on her hips, causing the skeleton to fold over. "Why would I want Neutron here? He'd wreck the party for sure. I'm glad I didn't invite him!" They stood there awkwardly fro a second or two before Cindy spoke up once again, "The guests should be arriving soon, so I think I'll go greet them with Carl! It IS my party, after all!" Her nervous laughter rang like broken bells.

Libby stared at her with bemused eyes. "Right. You go ahead and do that." Her thoughts, however, were: 'What a liar! The guests don't even start arriving for another fifteen or thirty minutes.' She sighed and went back to the table, flicking on the switch for the fortune teller. Her plastic head moved at odd, sharp angles, and she slowly spoke a rhyme:

'Though while you think you're having fun
you may be in for a surprise...
This evening is meant for frights and scares
so be alert this Halloween night.'


Her eyes glowed and she cackled before buzzing and shutting off. "Creepy," Libby said, looking around nervously and flipped the switch to shut it down.

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About half an hour later, clusters of teens emerged from the trees. It wasn't long before the party sprang into life; witches, ghouls, and goblins dancing to Halloween music. Everyone seemed to be active and having a good time, except for the socially challenged, who clung to the refreshment table for dear life.

Nick (dressed as John Travolta from Grease) seemed to be the life of the party, flirting with girls by giving them piggy-back rides. On one attempt he gave Brittany (dressed as Sandy, incidentally) a piggy-back-skateboard ride, which hadn't resulted so well. Nick had not broken anything, but Brittany didn't end up as lucky. She took an emergency trip to the hospital.

Thriller by Michael Jackson had just ended (Libby led the dance), and Sheen put on an all time classic: Monster Mash. Everyone seemed to be having the time of their lives. The energy from the party was so intense and sensational. HER party.

... But then why was Cindy so miserable?

Taking a long gulp of punch, her thoughts drifted towards the genius. In fact, he hadn't left her thoughts (sadly) since a week ago, when she handed out the invitations to her Halloween Bash.

Cold blue eyes met contact with green. "And the last invite goes to... Butch." Cindy's smirk could've lighten an evil, malicious person-eating Christmas tree. Everyone in the grade had received an invitation except for Jimmy Neutron. He glared at her, and as they exited the campus for the day, her "rival" approached her.

"You're going to regret not inviting me, Vortex." To be truthful, a little guilt had welled up at that point, but her pride made her ignore any other emotions.

"Whatever, Neutron. Have a fun, lonely Saturday."


Cindy crumpled the empty plastic cup and tossed it aside. 'Stop thinking about it,' she coaxed herself, waving off the memory. 'It's not like I should care about him. He's showed me up so many times that he got what was comin' to him!' Pushing the guilt aside, she strode over to where Libby was dancing. She would force herself to have fun if need be. For almost a whole minute of the party, she forgot about Jimmy Neutron. Her mind was clean as a slate and she felt free. At last!

They did the mash
They did the monster mash
The monster mash
It was a graveyard smash
They did the ma--


Out of no where the song was cut off and the record playing it came to a hault with a screech. After a moment of silence, loud organ pipes bursted into sound. It took Cindy a minute to recognize the song, but the title, 'Phantom of the Opera' came to mind. A light fog grazed the ground and around Cindy's ankles. "Ooh, cool effects!" gasped Brittany from her new wheelchair.

In sleep he sang to me
In dreams he came
That voice which calls to me
And speaks my name
And do I dream again?
For now I find
The phantom of the opera is there,
Inside my mind...


"But I didn't start those," Cindy said with wide eyes. Scrambling towards and jumping onstage, she took Sheen by the collar of his werewolf costume and shook him. "What did you do, Ultrafreak?" A smile stretched across his face.

"Nothing." Cindy looked over to the DJ booth only to discover it had been turned off. The music was still booming as loudly as ever, though, and from where Cindy did not know. A gasp rippled through the crowd behind her. Cindy swung around to see everyone staring up in a mixture of awe and confusion.

A rocket whizzed by, leaving a trail of smoke-letters, and then exploding. Red fireworks glittered in the dark sky just as a cloud passed over the moon. "BE PREPARED," it spelled, and then extinguished.

"What's that supposed to mean?" a girl cried.

"Maybe it's just part of the party..."

Shrieks of malicious laughter echoed from all around. "What's that?" Everyone instinctively scooted closer to each other. It was then it started. One bony foot stepped stiffly from the shadows, and a whole skeleton emerged from that. Another one followed, and another, and more until there were dozens of them herding around the party-goers, whom had scooched so far in that they were squished in a packed circle.

Round and round the figures danced, an evil grin twisted at their teeth. Although hollow, the pits of their eyes danced with glee. "Okay, that's it, I'm outta here!" shouted Nick, dashing through the crowd and trying to push aside the skeletons. Their flesh-bare fringers clawed at his clothes, and he found it hard to escape with the skeletons trying to hold him down. They hung onto him in a wave, and slowly he was drug further down, until suddenly he was clean out of sight.

The herd of bones backed off, but the spot where Nick was supposed to be was empty.

"Oh my god, he's gone! What happened to Nick?!"
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Posted 27 October 2007 - 04:12 AM

OMG, this has just made my weekend (even if it isn't finished yet)!! Ahh, Halloween and J/C? Seriously, this is really perking me up. :D


Krista, you are such an EXCELLENT writer! :thumbsup: Can't wait to read the (sure to be awesome) rest of this! ^_^
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Posted 27 October 2007 - 04:15 AM

YAYAYAY!! Thank you SO much for replying, Chica! *Tackles and bear hugs* Chocolate anyone? XD

And I'll hopefully have it up soon. I want to get it done before Halloween is over! Thanks SO MUCH again for the comment. I haven't written any decent fanfiction in ages so every compliment means mucho. x3~

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Posted 27 October 2007 - 05:03 AM

Wow, Krista, that was quite impressive! You captured the scene so wonderfully and perfectly that I could see everything as I read. You've definitely improved much since I've last seen you write. The theme was so clever and very Halloweenish! I like where it's going so far, and I can't wait to see you finish the rest.
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Posted 27 October 2007 - 06:29 PM

Wow, Krista! That was like, amazing. Seriously. I CAN'T wait to hear more! You did, capture everything quite impressive and nicely. ^_^


Write more! Heck, maybe I'll read it all on Halloween, get scared to death, and lock myself in my closest! Woot! :dance:
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Posted 27 October 2007 - 06:33 PM

Mandieluv! =D I'm happy you replied! *Gives you a whole bag of candy* Share it with Sarah. You know how she goes nuts. ;] *Huggle* You need to give me some of YOUR writing so we can have one big reading fest sometime! Thanks again for commenting!

Hugh: You embarress me because I know you're an awesome writer and my stories are nothing to yours. N-O-T-H-I-N-G. :lol: Thank you for being nice, though. < 3

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Posted 27 October 2007 - 08:53 PM

Daaaaaang Krista! Now you've landed ME with a cliffhanger! :grr:

Gee, I wonder why? ;)

I'm so looking forward to reading the rest of this! I love the mood created by the addition of song lyrics, esp the phantom of the opera. The lines you chose were very effective yet subtle ^_^

My only suggestion (and it's a minor one) is for something Sheen says. He should say "Hey Puff Mama, I see you over there! And must I say, you look quite radishing tonight!" instead of "ratishing tonight". The pronunciation is the same, but when it's spelled "radish" it adds the extra comedic element of referring to Libby as a vegetable. And that's my Sheenological analysis. :thumbsup:

Thanks for posting this!

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Posted 27 October 2007 - 10:05 PM

Wow, that's very nicely done. And the moving picture was a very nice touch. There aren't enough Halloween JN fics. It's great to see a new one of those. :)
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Posted 27 October 2007 - 10:29 PM

Ooh SCORE, I got a review from Mara! I feel honored, your royal majesty. *.* I'll be sure to go back and edit it to radishing. I bet Libby loves to be called a vegetable by Sheen. It makes her feel speshul. ;] ... Sheenological lol. Mara, are you an expert with his language?? If so, ALL HAIL!

rumorgirl: It took me forever to find it. I was originally looking for half a mask or something, but I liked the moon because it fitted the description I had put in. XD And I was wondering why no one had done a JN Halloween fanfiction yet! :ph43r:

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Posted 28 October 2007 - 02:02 AM

Nice job so far, good timing for the theme, too, I like where you're going with this.

Also, Mara, I cracked up when I saw your sig image. Do you draw them yourself, by the way?
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Posted 28 October 2007 - 03:16 AM

KRISTA!!!

You are too good for your own good. Srsly, some evil idea-stealer is gunna suck your brain out sometime soon.

And I'm glad you didn't PM me the 2nd part yesterday, it's much better to read right now when it's dark and the TV was mysteriously spazzing out. :blink:

AWESOME!!
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Posted 28 October 2007 - 06:02 AM

SUNNYYYYY! *Flytackles* I was wondering when you'd comment! I was waiting for yours foreva. Squee! And someday some evil ninja idea-stealer will suck out YOUR amazing imagination. Frsrsly.

Yay for mysteriously spazzing TV's! :thumbsup:

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Posted 29 October 2007 - 12:16 AM

oooh, Halloweeny JN! I love it! I was thinking about doing a Halloween themed fanfic! I love this already! I hope you finish it soon!
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Posted 29 October 2007 - 02:12 AM

That was so great, Krista! Lovin' the Halloween theme. The little spooky atmosphere you've got is really awesome. I can't WAIT for the next part!
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Posted 30 October 2007 - 12:55 AM

I'm jealous.
That was totally awesome!!! It makes my writing sound like "Luv conkers al but majik is culler".
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Posted 30 October 2007 - 02:24 AM

SUNNYYYYY! *Flytackles* I was wondering when you'd comment! I was waiting for yours foreva. Squee! And someday some evil ninja idea-stealer will suck out YOUR amazing imagination. Frsrsly.

Yay for mysteriously spazzing TV's! :thumbsup:

**is flytackled** Yeah, sorry. It was Saturday night, chaknow. And notheywon't. Cuz my ideas SUCK compared to yours. Actually, my ideas compared to CORN.

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Posted 31 October 2007 - 12:20 AM

APFFT. Yeah right, Rachyrach. Your ideas are so amazing and original! I wish I could think of twice the cool things you do! :rock:

Thanks for all the nice comments, guys! They make me feel warm and fuzzy... and stuff. XD I'm going to finish the rest of this story even if I have to do an all-nighter. I really got set back, though (I had to rip out a page I was so frustrated). I couldn't think of a way to portray the phantom... as in, if I should have him there in real life, on a recording, etc. But now I do (thanks to someone's siggy, whether you believe it or not). I saw it randomly and was like OMG I SHALL CHOOSE THIS ROUTE ON MY PATH OF LIFE. *Pulls out pencil*

I'll tell you whose siggy later after I post the next section. I don't want to give it away! Anyway, again, THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THE NICE REVIEWS! All of you pwn.

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Posted 31 October 2007 - 04:21 AM

How do you multiply NOTHING by two? :D

Recording for sure, IMO.

OOOH I WONDER WHOSE SIGGY!
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Posted 31 October 2007 - 11:12 PM

I wonder if it was mine? ;)
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Posted 01 November 2007 - 12:03 AM

Oooh, probably!! :D
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