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[sunnstar]

Hey guys! I have a brand new fic called The Hunt -- I'm also posting it on Nick but I thought post it here too... anyway... please give comments!!

Chapter 1

“Sheen—Sheen—SHEEN!” Ms. Fowl screamed. She had been showing them a documentary on trees and trying to wake Sheen up from his deep sleep. Sheen was just about to yell at her when the door opened.
“Hello everybody!” Principal Willoughby announced cheerily. “I need to see Jimmy, Cindy, Sheen, Libby, and Carl in my office, pronto! Ta-ta!”
“Thanks Nerd-tron, what did you do now?” Cindy moaned. Her boring-movie-nap had been so good.
“Nothing!!” Jimmy exclaimed defensively, raising his head from his desk. “Well aside from launch another toaster into the Milky Way and accidentally hit a small meteor, sending it to Uranus . . . but Willoughby doesn’t know that!”
“Hey Jim, did you get any chocolate from the Milky Way that you brought to school?” Sheen wanted to know. His “sugar radar” had woken him up, and Milky Ways were his current favorite chocolate.
“What? No, the Milky Way is all rock, and the occasional twenty percent off toaster, and has nothing to do with actual milk . . . or the chocolate.”
“How do you know?” Carl demanded. His bargain-hunting ears had heard the words “twenty percent off” and sent off alarms in his brain, which revived him from his mid-class snooze. “Have you every actually been there?”
“Yes, several times,” Jimmy retorted. “Actually nine times—seven of which you were there, one of which was yesterday.”
“Oh, no wonder there’s pebble in my shoe! I thought I slept-walked into the Candy Bar again—you know the Rocky Road has actual rocks?” Carl said.
“Um, guys, can we go to the office already? You know Willoughby, he’ll probably burst right back in here in ten seconds if we’re not there like, now,” Libby pointed out. She stretched, yawned, and rubbed her eyes.
The five of them left the room. Sheen came back in and cut the TV cord at the plug, gave a thumbs up to the room of half-conscious students, and almost left the room when Ms. Fowl sat up.
“I like . . . banana and raspberry,” she murmured in her sleep. She fell back on her desk again, snoring.
Sheen took a bow.
“What do you think Willoughby wants us for?” Carl asked worriedly.
“Maybe he wants to tell us that llamas are extinct,” Sheen taunted him.
“Aaaaaah,” Carl screamed, “the horror!!”
Sheen laughed so hard he walked into Willoughby’s office door. Cindy shook her head disdainfully and went inside; the others followed gladly. If only they knew what real horrors would come to follow.

[Ang]

SWEET! :thumbsup: ITS awesome!!!!!!!!!!! If only I had such writing talents.


*bows to your awesomeness*

[AnDrEa]

worse than llamas extintion(sp?)??? this is gonna b huge!!! nice chappie!!! can't wait for chapter 2!!!


o:) Andre o:)

PS: oh and btw you that know everyone, or anybody else, know where's nickforme9 aka Mira???


o:) AnDrE o:)

[Liziana]

I'm lovin' this story. Sheen is so funny.
Can't wait for the next chapter! :thumbsup:

[Ang]

Sun! I don't see your fic on the JN message boards at nick.com! Why not?



Trust me I've looked about 37 times and I don't see it.

[sunnstar]

Sun! I don't see your fic on the JN message boards at nick.com! Why not?



Trust me I've looked about 37 times and I don't see it.

Oh well, it's there, I just checked. Just do CTRL+F and search sunnstar.

Everyone else, thanks for replying! Oh and andrea, what did your PS mean?

Edited by sunnstar, 06 July 2007 - 03:14 PM.

[AnDrEa]

oh! it's just that she's the director and chief of the JN newsletter there on nick.com, and there has been quite a problem there, but don't worryit doesn't matter now, vuz I went to her fic and she said that her computer crashed or something and that she was using other comps, so maybe she wouldn't be there for a while, so now I've solved everything so forget about the PS :D thanks anyway!!


o:) Andre o:)

[Ang]

Ok I'll check it out.

[AnDrEa]

ok I've replied! u said friday and today is Friday! so read it :ph43r: lol seeya!!


o:) Andre o:)

[sunnstar]

Anybody else gunna comment on Chapter 1? ... Anybody?

[girlgenius123]

It sounds very promising to be a great fanfic. Write more now! :wacko:

[sunnstar]

Thanks so much girlgenius123!! I'll post the next chapter either Sunday or Monday. If I don't get very many more replies, then Tuesday. (HINT HINT for the people reading this and not replying... wink wink nudge nudge)

[ShadRose17]

Cooly I like it keep writing.

[Beks]

This sounds like it's gonna be BIG!!! Keep it up! :thumbsup:

[Mara=^.^=]

Nice start Rachel!

I'll have to check it out further on nick.com (if my stupid computer will load it, that is <_< ). I've been having SUCH trouble with the new version of the site.


~*Mara*~ = ^.^ =

[gummiworld]

Rachel, um, this rocks. I can't wait to see what the story line is gunna be. It's gunna be good though, I can feel it! Nice start! Now, I'm gunna go to nick and see if my grand parents computer will let me view posts as I can reply there.

The force is strong with this one :ph43r: ,
Cami v.P.

[gummiworld]

darn it, I can't!

[sunnstar]

Wow guys, thanks! At this rate I might just have to post the next chapter tomorrow... and Cindy_Aurora promised that there would be more replies overnight and wow, she was right! A hot topic after two days! (sorry I'm really really hyper right now... excessive sugar and extreme lack of sugar does that to me) Anyway, tune in for a slightly boring but informative chapter... BTW, on Nick I had this whole "intro" thing involving Mara rolling a drum ;)
do you guys want me to post it here?

*:)Rachel

PS. usually if I find some tiny grammatical error in a chapter I'll edit it and fix it w/o saying "edited" so if you reread a line and it seems different, you're not going crazy... at least I hope you're not... but you could always be hyper, like me **eye twitches**

[Beks]

Yah! New chapter! :D

[sunnstar]

Here's Chapter 2 guys! Read and reply! Oh, and if you want that intro, let me know. (it's pretty funny if I do say so myself) BTW, Chapter 2 is extremely short (I didn't realize that when I split the original in half) so I'm putting Chapter 3 in with it. Funny, those two together is like half of what a chapter in It's a Matter of Life and Death would have been.

Chapter 2

“So, uh, Principal Willoughby, what seems to be the problem?” Jimmy asked nervously.
“Problem? There is no problem! Corki, explain,” Willoughby ordered, snapping his fingers bossily.
“Hello, young movie stars!” Corki Shiatzu said in ever-cool voice, pushing down his sunglasses.
“Excuse me?” Sheen squeaked.
“Movie?” Libby squealed.
“Stars!” Cindy shrieked.
“What are you talking about?” Jimmy wanted to know.
“Well, me and the boys were talking, and we think a boy genius whose brains get him into trouble would make a great movie!” the famous director explained.
“And we get to be in it?” Carl exclaimed hopefully.
“My, my, someone woke up on the dumb side of the bed,” Corki snapped. “Of course you’re in it, who else do you think I’d find to play the nerdy best friend, the good-looking third wheel, the mean crush, and the supa-hip pop diva? The Weird Store?!”
“Whoa, dude, what’s wrong with you?” Sheen said, surprised.
Corki shook his head.
“Supa-sorry, everyone—”
“Who cares, what’s the movie about?”
“There’s an evil scientist that’s trying to blow up the world, and he’ll do it in three hours, and the only way to stop him is to find the inactivation microchip. Meanwhile, the two main characters are having a race to find it in the New Zealand Retroland. The only way to find it is to finish the race first, which is more of a scavenger hunt for clues. Any questions?”
“When do we start filming?” Jimmy asked eagerly.
“Tomorrow morning at nine,” Corki answered in a suave voice.

“I don’t know, Neutron,” Cindy said after school at the Candy Bar. “This whole thing seems a little fishy to me.”
“Oh, that’s my ice cream,” Carl explained. “Sam couldn’t figure out what to put in the Penguin Swirl, so he replaced penguins with little pieces of fish.”
Sheen and Libby gave him repulsive looks while Jimmy argued with Cindy.
“Come on! How could this be fishy? It seems perfectly acceptable to me.”
“Neutron, don’t you remember the last time we tried to make a movie?” Cindy protested. “We all believed that that Quentin Smithee guy was for real but he turned out to be Professor Calamitous in disguise, trying to kill us!”
The two of them get a faraway look in their eyes as they remember that fateful incident, though quite differently: Cindy was under the mistaken impression that she had been the one to “save the day.”
“But this is different,” Jimmy tried to explain. “We all know Corki, we’ve seen him a thousand times—he judged our science fair, for Edison’s sake! What more proof do you need?”
“I’m telling you, I just don’t have a good feeling about this!” Cindy said.
“Cindy, please, just be in the movie, or else we might not be able to do it!” Jimmy begged.
“Don’t you want to be a star?” Libby coaxed her.
“Of course I do!” Cindy said, caving. “But I don’t have to be in it, they’ll find someone to replace me!”
“You mean like Betty Quinlan?” Libby pointed out.
“Okay, I’m in,” Cindy said immediately. “But any funny business, I’m warning you, Neutron, and I’m quitting.”
“Deal.”
Yeah right.