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[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

After a LOT of thinking and pondering, as well as updating my fics now and then, I hereby give you my first oneshot!!!! EVAR!!!!!


The Physics of Attraction


It was a beautiful spring day in Retroville, Texas. Local residents Cindy Vortex and Libby Folfax were at Cindy's house discussing Spring Break plans.

"So, what do you think we should do over Spring Break, Libs?" Cindy asked her 17-year-old best friend, "I'm completely drawing a blank here!"

"Strangely enough, so am I!" Libby admitted, "But I think we should somethin' to make this one worth rememberin' fo' a LONG time t' come!!"

"You're right, Libby, we should!" the 16-year-old blonde agreed, nodding. Then they sat in Cindy's room with their legs crossed and sitting hunched over, deep in thought.

Then Cindy's eyes lit up as she exclaimed, "I know what! Let's have a sleepover that's unforgettable!! But it should involve humiliating a certain teenage genius and his sugar-crazed friend..."

Libby knew exactly who she was talking about. "Ya mean Jimmy and Sheen, right?" she told her.

"Yep! Libs, let's have it tonight, and we'll start with Truth or Dare! Oh, they'll be sooo humiliated...," Cindy muttered loudly while craftily rubbing her hands together and a sneaky grin on her face.

"Yeah!!" Libby exclaimed, and high-5'ed with Cindy.

Later that night, Libby arrived at Cindy's place with sleeping gear in tow.

"C'mon, Libs! I have everything set up in my room, so let's go!" Cindy invited, ushering her up the stairs towards her bedroom.

"Okay, Cin!" she agreed, following her upstairs with her gear.

Once inside, Cindy shut the door behind her and informed Libby, "Now, the real fun can begin once you've got yourself situated!!" She rubbed her hands together in anticipation of the fun night she had planned ahead for the 2 of them.

Libby got herself situated and asked, "So, what should we do first, girl?"

"Let's play Truth or Dare!!! Do you want to ask first or should I??" Cindy suggested.

"You ask me first. I'd like to do somethin'... memorable... to Sheen," she hinted slyly.

"All right," Cindy conformed to her, "Truth or DARE???"

"Dare!!" Libby told her sneakily.

"Okay, Libby! Before I tell you your dare, let's use my binoculars to find out what that moron is up to...," Cindy said, bringing them out and handing them to Libby. She took them and looked through Cindy's side window that faced Sheen's house, seeing that his bathroom window facing her was fogged up. She giggled immaturely as she thought about what she might do.

"So, what's he doing?" Cindy wanted to know when Libby gave back her binoculars.

"Showerin'," she stated matter-of-factly.

"Perfect!" Cindy exclaimed, and handed Libby her waterproof digital camera. Then she challenged, "Sneak in through his back door quietly and make your way to his bathroom. Once in there, I triple-dog-dare you to fling open the shower curtain and snap a picture of his reaction. Then get back here as fast as possible so we can print it! Got it, Libs??"

"You got it, girl!!" Libby reassured her, and snuck quietly over to Sheen's house, clutching Cindy's camera securely. She tiptoed through the back door and made her way upstairs, quietly but quickly. When she saw that his bedroom door was open, she crept through and approached the bathroom door, which was slightly ajar. Libby cringed a little when she heard Sheen's obnoxious singing, but thought to herself, It's worthit; it's all worth it, Libby...

With that, she burst through the door and sped over to his shower, whipping the shower curtain WIDE open and quickly putting the camera in position.

Sheen, obviously, took notice immediately and yelled unintentionally, taking his UltraLord washrag and covering himself where needed, "LIBBY!!! Can't a guy take a shower in PRIVACY??!!"

She just ignored him and snapped the picture. Then she ran out of there as fast as she could, holding the camera tightly, and sped back to Cindy's house and back to her room.

Once inside, she slammed the door shut behind her and handed the camera back to Cindy, bursting into a HUGE giggle-fit.

"So, did ya do it?!" she asked excitedly.

"Oh, YEAH!!" Libby exclaimed, turning on Cindy's computer and motioning her over. She plugged the camera in with a cord and uploaded the image. She took one look at it and cracked up immediately, Libby soon joining her.

It was right then that someone knocked furiously on Cindy's bedroom door. She cautiously answered it, slowly opening it. When she saw who it was, she flung the door open and cracked up even harder, pointing at her visitor, who turned out to be Sheen wearing nothing but a towel around his waist.

"Look... I'm only here cuz Libby embarrassed me," he tried to explain, then...

Whump!

"Uh, Sheen?" Libby informed him, trying hard not to laugh at him while pointing at his feet, "Look down at yo' feet!"

He looked down and his face turned beet red when he saw his towel laying on the floor. He immediately picked it up, wrapped it around his waist securely, and tore out of Cindy's place like Robo-Fiend was after him.

Libby shut the door and burst out laughing hysterically. When she finally calmed down enough, she gasped, "OMG!! That was the most hilarious thing I've ever seen!!!"

"TELL me about it!!" Cindy agreed while holding her stomach and giggling like crazy!

When they both calmed down, Libby told her, "Okay, Cin. Now it's my turn to ask ya: Truth or DARE?!"

"DARE!!!" she answered almost immediately, rubbing her hands together slyly.

"First, let's see what Neutron's up to, 'kay??" Libby suggested.

"You GOT it!!" Cindy exclaimed, and used her binoculars to look across the street to see what Jimmy was up to. She saw that his bathroom light was on and, though she could see only the sillhouette of his hair, she could tell he was relaxing in his bathtub.

"Well?" Libby asked her when she put away her binoculars.

"He's in the tub, bathing," Cindy informed her with a sneaky grin.

"Okay, here's the dare: I triple-dog-dare ya to, once you're in the bathroom with him, get in with him, but with yo' clothes ON, mind ya, and use your camera to take a picture of you and him togetha', then get out as quickly as ya can and get back her fast! Ya up fo' it?!!" she challenged her friend.

"Oh, yeah!! I'm on it, Libs!!" Cindy exclaimed, and rushed out of her house and across the street, quickly but quietly. Let's see... she thought to herself, I should be able to find my way through his house, cuz I had to when he and I switched places 5 years ago... With that, she snuck through his back door like lightening and silently flew up the stairs as stealthy as a leopard. She turned to her right and carefully made her way into his room, making sure not to trigger or set off any alarms. She quietly poked her head through the bathroom door and saw him relaxing in his tub without a care in the world.

Then, without any warning, Cindy burst through the door, rushed over to Jimmy, and hopped into the bath with him, clothes and all, before he could protest or even say anything. She then turned around and photographed the 2 of them with her camera, with Jimmy sporting a bewildered expression on his face.

When she hopped out, dripping wet from her upper waist down, and started to bolt for the door, she heard him speak up, saying, "Hey, Cindy? Leaving so soon?"

She was beyond shocked! She was expecting him to retort back in a loud voice, not speak to her like he just did! She turned around ans saw him leaning against the side of the tub and his head resting on his arms, a relaxed look on his face.

Then she informed him, "Well, I was going back to my sleepover with Libby, but I suppose I could stay some time longer..." And she set her camera down on the side of his sink and sat against the side of the tub, leaning her head against the rim.

Before long, her wet clothes began to make her chilly, starting to shiver a bit.

Jimmy noticed and suggested helpfully, "Why don't you just take them off and hang them on that towel rack?? They'll dry faster that way."

At first, she balked mentally and was about to protest, then she remembered that they were in a relationship together, so it couldn't hurt just this once... She then did so and sat back down, shivering a little when her bare skin touched the cold, tile floor.

"It's warmer in here, Cindy," he invited, motioning her in.

It's a good thing the door's shut and locked... Cindy thought as she slowly climbed in with him. Then, as she sat down, she gradually relaxed. The water's not that warm, though... He must've been in here quite a while, she told herself a few moments later, getting a chill or 2. "Water's not all that warm, though, Jimmy," she reminded him.

"Just lay on your stomach; I'll take care of it," he promised.

"Okay, whatever you say," she agreed, laying on her stomach with her chin resting on her arms. Though the teens were taller 5 years later, the tub still had enough room to accomadate them. As Jimmy laid down on top of her, facing the exact same direction as Cindy, she felt a strange sensation she'd never felt before

"Feel any warmer?" he wanted to know.

"Ooo!! Yes, I do, thanks!" she informed him. She'd never felt this sensation before, but she revelled in every moment of it. That's the ticket! Keep on goin'!! she silently told him in her mind with an enamoured look on her face, He really knows how to "get it on", for SURE!! She then let out a long sigh of contentment. That's when it happened.

Then, Cindy's eyes flew open as she remembered something. Libby! She figured she'd KILL her if she knew what she'd been doing! So she told Jimmy urgently, "Jimmy, I gotta go! Libby's waiting for me!"

"Okay, Cin," he agreed, and got up so she could dress herself, grab her camera, and leave in a hurry, which she did.

As she was hurrying across the street, she ran into Libby, literally.

"Girl, I was just comin' to look for ya! Why are you all wet?! Oh, yeah... The dare. Well, come with me and let's print that picture," she told her, leading her back home in a jiffy.

Once back in Cindy's room, Libby uploaded and printed the picture Cindy'd taken. Then she took both pictures and set them aside where they wouldn't forget them when it was time for school again the following week.

Then Libby added, "Think we should have another round of Truth or Dare?"

Her heart beating rapidly, she shakily replied, "Um, no thanks, Libs! Heh-heh, heh-heh!!"

"Uh, okay, Cin," she said with a suspicious look in her eyes, then put in, "Let's just get ourselves a snack and call it a night, 'kay?"

"Yeah, let's go with that!" Cindy hastily agreed, laughing nervously.

After a quick snack of Purple Flurp and NanoChips, they both got ready for bed and called it quits for the night.

[sam-ely-ember]

Yay! First post ^^

Okay. You made me laugh hardly XD I like it.
I cannot say exactly what I like about your story but definetly there is something.

LOL, towel! I won't forget that never!

[CjIiNmDmYy]

It definately was funny.
I LOVEIT!

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

Okay, I know this isn't as popular as some other oneshots, but could I at LEAST get 10 more repliers to this oneshot?! It saddens me to find only 2 people that are interested and comment on this... C'mon, guys! I know you're out there!

[Beks]

Oh, I hadn't had time to post a good reply,(I'm so busy lately) but I thought it was very good! The title was very catchy.

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

Aw, gee, thx, Beks!!

[XstarsandheartsX]

I didn't comment on here, but I think I replied on it in a PM. I think it was very good, Emily. It was funny.

[Urvy]

Not bad for your 1st Oneshot!

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

It TOOK me long enough...[/endsarcasm] I just posted this on Fanfiction.net today!!!

[AmazingMe123]

I really liked it!!! Good writing!!!!

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

Thanks! At the time when I wrote it, I felt like it was lacking in something, so I made it a little steamy near the end. Why? Cuz I can.

[AmazingMe123]

Of course you can!! I'm surprised Libby didn't catch on!!!!

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

Maybe not at first... But, if this was made into a real fic and come 6 months after that, she'd finally figure it out.

[AmazingMe123]

You rock!!!!

[Katia11]

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

Glad you think so, too, Kate! Sure is kinda steamy, isn't it??

[xErik12]

Okay, I know this isn't as popular as some other oneshots, but could I at LEAST get 10 more repliers to this oneshot?! It saddens me to find only 2 people that are interested and comment on this... C'mon, guys! I know you're out there!

You're right I was out there but, in Texas and in high school--lol this was was your oneshot?

If it was--you did  very well!

[JimmyxxCindy4EVER]

Yes, it is!  I'm so glad you love it!

[Elraine]

Very well done; I'm not sure I've seen a more impressive first one-shot! A common theme I find with early attempts at one shots are random wandering plots, but yours had a definite flow and was well-contained to a distinct scope. The writing was quite good in spelling and grammar, and easy to read. The title was absolutely EXCELLENT; it pulled me in the moment I read it.

I will say however that the title was a bit misleading... Sure, I expected a J/C fic from it, but I definitely didn't expect what I read. In a way, that's a good thing; you kept me guessing the whole time and threw a couple plot twists my way. (I swear my jaw hit the floor at the words "Leaving so soon?"... I did NOT see that coming!) On that note, since things -did- get a little steamy, might I recommend just putting a small disclaimer at the top about that? A little warning would have been nice.